The Unstoppable Ascension of Zu Mari! (Cultivator, Time Loops)

The Unstoppable Ascension of Zu Mari! (Cultivator, Time Loops)

by Asviloka

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Zu Mari will never be stopped! Zu Mari will ascend to the heavens!

Zu Mari is a downtrodden cultivator without any hope of becoming powerful. OR SO HE THINKS! One day fate intervenes on his behalf to give him everything he'd ever dreamed of, ALL THE POWER HE SO RIGHTLY DESERVES! And then, finally, everything starts going his way.

(Well... kind of.)

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1: A Gift From The Heavens To Unlock Destiny ago
2: The Great Search! Secrets of the Weakest Clan?! Is Any Power Worthy Of Zu Mari? ago
3: Challenge! Zu Mari Must Fight His Cousin For The Right To Rule! ago
4: Leaving The Clan? Not So Fast! Zu Mari Encounters A Wicked Trap! ago
5: Death Is Not The End! Zu Mari Will Not Be Stopped However Many Times He Dies! ago
6: Fight To The Death! Fight To The Death Again! ago
7: Death Shadow! The Demon Awakens! ago
8: Shattered Blade! Soul of the First Immortal? ago
Interlude! The Master Of Time? Ozyri Tori Approaches! ago
9: Rematch! Fight To The Death Yet Again! Zu Mari's Vengeance Will Be Swift! ago
10: Enemies Will Be Pruned! Zu Mari Will Not Fail Again! ago
11: Sorrow and Despair! The Tale Of The Cursed Maiden ago
12: The Path To Greater Power? Clash In The Sky! Who Will Prevail?! ago
13: Zu Mari vs Ozyri Tori? Whose Loop Will Triumph?! ago
14: The Dark Desires of the Demonic Prune Tree! Zu Mari's Fate Is Dire! ago
15: Rematch? Zu Mari, Xashu Cougar, Ozyri Tori! Who Will Triumph This Time? ago
16: Allies Fight Together! Ozyri Tori Must Be Stopped! ago
17: Alahira Inferna Vs Ozyri Tori! Will The Prune Tree Triumph, Or Fall? ago
18: The Prisoner's Fate Will Be Determined! ago
19: Master of the Loop! Zu Mari Will Never Stop! ago
Interlude! The Teachings of Zu Mari? Kayli Mari, The Faithful Disciple! ago
20: Time Advances! Zu Mari's Quest Must Continue! ago

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some total kretin
Overall

I started reading this during my morning shit and my first reaction is my original review just under this new new one. Now, after I've had a few minutes, let's just rewrite my reaction a bit to explain myself better (I hope).

NEW ONE:

TL;DR: It is a parody if by making a parody you mean MAKE EVERYTHING MORE AND LOUDER. The result is even more off-putting than the target.

Xianxia is a genre full of garbage and a few stand out skillfull variations. Everyone with half a brain finds that out pretty soon. Mostly it is because it is a dream genre of every angsty teen loner going through his chuuni phase and Chinese word womitors.

Now, you could make something good out of it with skill, same way you could tweak any recipe and make something good out of it with skill.  The problem is that most of those angsty teen cooks just half-bake everything and overspice it in an effort to be edgy.

And what the author did here is attempt parody by giving it even more spice and just flat out not bothering to bake it at all. And then parading it in front of us and going "Look, this is a xianxia if you overspice it and don't bake it! Am I clever or what? Now eat it and find out it is absolutely unpalatable!".

Of course it is, you just took every spice in the recipe and quadrupled the amounts. THAT DOES NOT MAKE IT ANY GOOD. It just makes it a really on the nose caricature of a parody. Ugh.

ORIGINAL:

TL;DR: Parody on the xianxia and time loop genre, only problem is it's not funny but really cringeworthy. Like prank videos on YouTube.

Take the xianxia and turn every settings knob to maximum to the point where you abandon any pretense of seriousness and become a parody of the genre. Make the MC an insufferable pillock and the setting the most wish fulfillment you can think about.

Add arrogant young mistress and family so arrogant even soap operas would have trouble to compete. Name the characters by taking names from your favourite telenovela on Telemundo and then morph them to make them sound vaguely Chinese.

Now add time loop and a train wreck of a confrontation that brings the initial fever dream of wish fulfillment to a screeching halt while still remaining insufferable.

That's as far as I got skimming before I lost any momentum on my bathroom break. And to be honest I still don't know what to think. If it was earnest I would just give it two stars and send it on its way, but even if it is a flippant parody it is still not that great but for a different reason. It is like taking a prank too far and making a saw blade cannon to shoot after your coworkers while shouting "it's a prank and therefore not a workplace massacre"...what the hell do I do with you. I don't have interest in finding out if it gets any good because the tastelessness of the start just really turned me off and I don't want to be too fast in dismissing it.

Ah what the hell, I'm a lazy reader who reads to relax and you didn't allow me to relax, so two and a half stars for you not because of the style of grammar but because the characters and plot are insufferable.

 

Weavervale
Overall

The entire premise of this just makes me love it. Trashy, comedic, fast paced, time loops, it has everything. It just needs you to read it to make it to the top. So read it and forget that little voice in the back of your head that says, I need to feed my kids or my wife because those don't matter.

 

Zu Mari matters.

Rydenius
Overall

Still early days (er, chapters), but Asviloka has already managed to embrace and subvert(?) so many XianXia tropes in ways that are oh-so-wrong that this might be a work of art. From the not-quite chinese names where the family name is last (why???) to the MCs growing arrogance, ridiculous technique names, instant (well-deserved) defeats, and sudden ass-pull victories, don't take this story too seriously and just enjoy the ride. 😎👍

Hi_Im_Ren
Overall

Is this a good story? No. It's a great story. If I were to describe this story it would be: Take all of the tropey nonsense from the xianxia genre and then crank it up past 11 to the point where the dial breaks. This story is a freaking rollercoaster of emotions (primarily laughter) and it is absolutely fantastic. The first paragraph made me laugh out loud, then the MC ate a random pill and I was rolling on the floor. Look, just read this if you need a good time.

DrBuller
Overall

Style is pretty good for what the genre is. Not that I've actually read that much of cultivation to begin with but whatever. The time loop genre was enough to sell on this story so it isn't like I have anything negative to say. I mean, Cultivation is meant to take time and with time loops, the MC can get as much time as they need in theory. Gotta be more than a few restrictions on it.

'Die and die again for power.' good motto. 5/5

mothy
Overall

While the exagerrated satire/parody is amusing, the novelty only really lasts so long, and the story doesn't have the comedic legs to stand on after it wears off. The characters are incredibly generic. I mean, that's the point, but it's still really irritating. Most "plotpoints" are just random tropes turned up to 11 and then rushed. I've read actual xianxia novels accidently more stupid than this, and parody is significantly less funny when the real product it's parodying is frequently even more ridiculous. I recommend reading the first few chapters for giggles, and just dropping it once it inevitably gets boring. I'll read further and revise this review if it becomes necessary, but honestly I don't really see what there is to do from here.