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Beyond The Worlds[BTW]
by Dark_4
Would you like to travel to another world? Crossing different dimensions and realities? reach a power that no one has ever reached?
Shin Akash did not know that he had started his journey to reach the ABSOLUTE. Finding companions along his journey and forming an invincible team, he climbed step by step.
From student to team leader. from an ordinary human being to the Absolute.
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Warning!
The characters in this novel will have an extremely high power level, so the protagonists will have some big power boosts throughout the series; however, this will not be frequent and they will grow up "healthy". I guarantee you will understand why in the end.
This story will not be focused on the Harem.
The protagonist will not be the full focus of the story. All the main characters in the story will have their highlights
1- English is not my native language, so I apologize for the spelling mistakes;
2-the whole story is original; however, there are some minor references to other works.
3-All worlds are fictional (including our protagonist's world), so don't use the "common sense" of our world in this novel
Chapter words: 800-1500
ATTENTION THE COVER ART IS NOT MINE; HOWEVER, I HAVE NOT FOUND THE ARTISTS' NAME YET, IN IT I OFFER MY FULL CREDIT TO THE BEAUTIFUL ARTS.
Book cover: pinterest
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Reviewed at: Ch 9: despair and the desperate
Overall the story is fine. Not great but not unreadable. Now before I start I would like to mention the story has potential and is genuinely intriguing despite its many flaws.
The grammar is basic but there are no major issues and it is easily read from a purely grammatical standpoint.
Style- The style is spread out and awkward to read. No paragraphs exist. There are only individual lines regardless of patterns in speaking or dialogue involved. They are spread apart and are incredibly awkward to read. It stretches out the individual moments while also cheapening the major events.
Story- The story feels rushed and bland. Yes, the author mentioned that at the start there would be fast-paced growth but this feels like a bit much. There is next to no explanation for anything occurring in the story. There is a reason stories possess an exposition, while it is possible to do without there needs to be something to draw in readers and the story is lacking in that aspect.
Character- The characters are boring and shallow. All of them are extremely two-dimensional with the only motivations being clear and easy to see. Boring MC cares deeply for his sister in an almost sexual way, the most popular stereotype in this type of novel. The growth is near-instant and is not followed by or directed by any sort of character growth or extended characterizations. All of the characters feel cheap and meaningless which immediately cuts off any sort of connection to the characters that may occur naturally as the story fails to progress.
General notes- Author, please try to reformat or something to adapt the truly irritating style it is now. The choppy and inconsistent lines with double wide gaps make it very difficult to read. The story and characters feel basic and extremely generalized. I know it may feel complete and reasonable when you think of it but get some fresh eyes on it to try and see where the gaps in your intentions are. Putting your ideas exactly as you see them down on paper is incredibly difficult and I do not blame you personally for the mistakes in this. Grammar is one of your best points for this story. It feels simplistic and childish which makes sense given English being your second language. I recommend using a thesaurus once in a while. The grammar is perfectly adequate but slightly bringing up the level of vocabulary without making it awkwardly wordy will improve the story and style overall.
I will continue to read and have higher hopes for the story's future