I don't want to be a hero
Well, it's not really complicated. The story focuses on our main character Sara. She is a slum kid, that had most of her loved ones killed and even got kidnapped and experimented on
She got super powers thanks to the experiment(Yay) and enough material for 40 years of therapy in the process(Not yay?) if she lives long enough. Superhero world isn't a kind place, ya know?
So, the kid got powers and a target
Simple, right? Except, she isn't strong enough to take them down, and it's not like she can live on revenge alone. She has to eat, sleep, etc
What then? Does she train to get stronger? Does she find a job? Team up? Searches for an alternative source of power? Waits for others to take her of her revenge? Gathers money and pays other to do the job she can't?
If the everyday life of a kid with super powers and those around her interest you, give it a try
Genre: Slice of life - Super Heroes - Comedy - Science Fiction - Action- Fantasy - Mistery
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A Fun story following an interesting character.
This story has an interesting narrator which the reader will come to understand in time however the strong cynical flavor is fun to read.
There are flaws with Grammar but they are understandable as the Author has said they are trying to learn English and they have improved in grammar over time.
If you like crapsack worlds with a super hero twist try this out it combines cuteness seriousness sadness and many other feelings.
I hope to see more hope you improve did I mention that I love the story so far Good luck dude.........
Its simple, i like the story and the MC ^^
I just read the first 5 chapters and I already have a hard time continuing, for one the grammar is not great, quite often there are just wrong words like good instead of got, which is confusing. But whats even worse is the mixup of the gender, when there suddenly is a she instead of he it gets super confusing, like "is this a mistake, or is he talking about that other person now?".
Personally I also really dislike the writing style of a storyteller, where the reader gets "ironically" asked to to something or "jokes" are explained as if the one talking is waiting for praise. I just don't like it it breaks the flow and immersion of the story.
Maybe I will continue reading at a later date, but this first few chapter already got me to shy away, even through I didn't even get to the real story.
Pro tip: Don't review yourself and give it a 4.5 score whilst admitting your grammar is lacking. I'd say it frowned upon seeing high rated self reviews. If you want to explain something, add it to the synopsis or as a authors note in a chapter. Or even have an extra chapter detailing it for those whom want to read it.
Story so far (ch 35, NO SPOILERS): Could be condensed into 15 chapters and that's being charitable. The pace is slow with barely any events happening. It starts off interesting with things happening at a fast pace. Then it is followed by about 10 chapters which could be skipped for the most part. Slow pace is fine if it has purpose AND drive. I felt like you were attempting to do some character development, but there was none.
The slow pace suffers further by having the structure of 1 line paragraphs. Look at any story that has any form of descriptive creativity and you will find what the problem is. You do not have paragraphs, you have 1 liners... over and over and over and over again. Slow pace + this combo is really not good or worthy of your... 4.5 star rating.
Honestly, the story could be interesting. But considering how I feel after reaching ch 35 I'll be shelving this one. Hey maybe the author will decide to fluff out some chapters? Who knows, Might give it another try then.
Final Note: This submission isn't part of the worst finds on RRL. Id say if you have absolutely nothing else to do, and have time to kill... Go for it.