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Ti Lepus, is a planet in turmoil, who can save it? Deadly forces scheme to break with the Empire and its Sovereign, spreading lies and committing act of vandalism. Some stand against the terrorists while others seek to master them and bend them to their evil design.
Rentap Dressiler and Trem De Markus are friends who resist these forces; one will be destroyed along with his family in the fight against murderous forces who would lead the planet to its destruction. The other may save it …
Leja Leves; the councillor who cunningly hides his leadership in the campaign against the Empire orchestrated by Nikie and Kirkrup Di Frim who are his unwitting dupes. He would die before admitting defeat …
Cami sis Nep; an innocent fourteen year old girl who is caught in a fight between powerful competing forces but who may bring great change to her planet, even as she risks loosening it as well as her life…,
But … The wild card …
The Dark Lord, Supreme Ruler of the Empire, an entity with strange powers and skills who is working behind the scenes to effect change before it is too late …. Will he succeed?
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The story is pretty decent with good characters who don't feel like cardboard cutouts, and the plot feels natural and not forced.
If I have any complaints, it would be the setting of pure oppression, and the dark Lord. Modern writers seem to think this stuff is ok if it's not meant to promote said behavior, but I bet many full blown neonazi racists enjoy watching shows like family guy and never realize it's a joke. Therefore, I don't enjoy any media that does this. I also don't enjoy that the "good guy" is the totalitarian dark lord universal dictator. It really doesn't matter what he believes, people should oppose him just for what he is. It reeks of North Korean propaganda. Dictators don't put the public first, because if they did, they wouldn't be a dictator. If the guy was just a warlord who didn't OWN planets, and destroy them for leaving, it wouldn't bother me, but he does, and the story tries to portray him as some unbeatable dictator for good. No. That's cognitive dissonance insanity that rather ruins the story. This could be fixed by removing the whole blow up your planet if you leave, and just having him help with cleaning up corruption. It's one or the other, not both, and if you choose the war, then there should be a valid opposing force. Otherwise it's just a novel promoting oppression and dictators. Seriously author, sit down and think about how you are writing this, and there needs to be valid reasoning for these plot points. Maybe there's a reason, but it wasn't made, at least nothing that makes sense. Warhammer for example has reasons, while this guy has none.
Other than that, the story is enjoyable. It just needs work on justifying itself, and maybe the dark Lord shouldn't attack planets for leaving if he really is good. Being a peacekeeper makes more sense for his personality.
The names are at least original enough. Can't say I've ever heard of a cast of characters named such things. Maybe there is a reason for that.
Anyway, Style is nice enough, though the pacing might need some work to become balanced enough. It just feels like some points were either slowed down of sped up too much for comfort. While this did bring me out of my immersion, I wouldn't call it the most terrible thing. Still enough to lower the rating tho.
4/5 from me.