Ti Lepus Dies, A Dark Lord Story

Ti Lepus Dies, A Dark Lord Story

by Gibbs505

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  • Traumatising content

Ti Lepus, is a planet in turmoil, who can save it? Deadly forces scheme to break with the Empire and its Sovereign, spreading lies and committing act of vandalism. Some stand against the terrorists while others seek to master them and bend them to their evil design.

Rentap Dressiler and Trem De Markus are friends who resist these forces; one will be destroyed along with his family in the fight against murderous forces who would lead the planet to its destruction. The other may save it …

Leja Leves; the councillor who cunningly hides his leadership in the campaign against the Empire orchestrated by Nikie and Kirkrup Di Frim who are his unwitting dupes. He would die before admitting defeat …

And...

Cami sis Nep; an innocent fourteen year old girl who is caught in a fight between powerful competing forces but who may bring great change to her planet, even as she risks loosening it as well as her life…,

But … The wild card …

The Dark Lord, Supreme Ruler of the Empire, an entity with strange powers and skills who is working behind the scenes to effect change before it is too late …. Will he succeed?

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The names are at least original enough. Can't say I've ever heard of a cast of characters named such things. Maybe there is a reason for that.

Anyway, Style is nice enough, though the pacing might need some work to become balanced enough. It just feels like some points were either slowed down of sped up too much for comfort. While this did bring me out of my immersion, I wouldn't call it the most terrible thing. Still enough to lower the rating tho.

4/5 from me.