Blood Demon's Retirement

Blood Demon's Retirement

by Avitue

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

Civil War has raged on the Al-Shan Archipelago for the past four decades, only recently coming to an end with the enthronement of the new Emperor.

This is not his story.

The Blood Demon, reknowned general of said civil war, is tired of all the fighting and politicking that has described the last four decades of her existence. All she really wanted to do now is to go out into the world and see the many lands from her father's stories.

Thus she retired. And went and did exactly what she wanted.

This is the story of what happens when you toss a (retired) war machine with somewhat lacking common sense into an unsuspecting world at peace.

Chapters will range from 1-2.5k words, scheduled for release every day from Monday to Friday.


First time posting a story on Royal Road here, hoping you folks will enjoy.

Expect:

-slow going slice of life with occassional faster paced action

-world building

-detailed anecdotes on the world, its races, the magic system, and whatnot every now and then

Do not expect:

-romance, other than maybe some passing mentions

-politics, again, barring passing mentions

Any comments, reviews, and criticism will be much appreciated.

And thank you for reading.

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Disclaimer: This story is my original work and only posted on the Royal Road website. If you should find this story elsewhere or under another name, please let me know.

Also please don't be too hard on me when I make occasional grammatical mistakes, english is my third language after all. XD

Edit suggestions are very welcome though.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue - When something ends... ago
Chapter 1 - Another begins ago
Chapter 2 - Fishy Shenanigans ago
Chapter 3 - Bountiful Kraken ago
Chapter 4 - Land Ho! ago
An Abbreviated Treatise on Deities, Magic, and the Races of the World. ago
Chapter 5 - Country Road. ago
Chapter 6 - Orcish Hospitality ago
Chapter 7 - Formality has its uses ago
Chapter 8 - Beauty is in the Eye of the Beholder. ago
Chapter 9 - Village Feast ago
Chapter 10 - Cultural Dissonance ago
Chapter 11 - Clothing, Shopping, Clothing Shopping ago
Chapter 12 - Paradise Found ago
Chapter 13 - Where Living Legends roam the Streets... ago
Chapter 14 - Where Wonders are Born... ago
Chapter 15 - And where Common Sense laid down to Die ago
Chapter 16 - Festival of Wonders (Part 1) ago
Chapter 17 - Festival of Wonders (Part 2) ago
Chapter 18 - Festival of Wonders (Part 3) ago
Chapter 19 - Festival of Wonders (Part 4) ago
Side Story 1 - The Blood Demon's Genesis ago
Chapter 20 - Departure from Paradise ago
Chapter 21 - Xewaur Plains ago
Chapter 22 - An Orcish Wedding ago
Chapter 23 - Wedding Feast ago
Map of the World ago
Chapter 24 - Big Game Hunter ago
Side Story 2 - Sins of the Blood Demon ago
Chapter 25 - Crouching Meats, Hidden Embroidery ago
Chapter 26 - Gal-Morogh, Jewel of the Plains ago
Chapter 27 - The Grand Gathering ago
Chapter 28 - Winter Months ago
Chapter 29 - Cult Mentality ago
Chapter 30 - The Cavalry Came Late ago
Chapter 31 - Meet the Baron ago
Chapter 32 - To Dispatch a Fool ago
Chapter 33 - Finishing Touches. ago
Chapter 34 - Human Sacrifice ago
Side Story 3 - A Deal with the Devil... Fish? ago
Chapter 35 - Champion of the Gods? ago

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Vomori
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Like Data Dragon Danika, but without LitRPG

Reviewed at: Side Story 1 - The Blood Demon's Genesis

This fic surprised me. It does not score particularly well on any of the core pillars of storywriting by any means: characterisation, plot, worldbuilding, etc. However, what it excels at, I find, is being a page turner, and—by extention—a chapter turner. It achieves this in two ways: 1) Shorter chapters, so easily readable in a few minutes; 2) The writer dishes out exactly what you expect from the synopsis/description, and that is commendable to me.

There are faults, yes, and many of them; that is to be expected of someone who is writing in their third language, however. The grammar is not great, dialogue feels very samey or uninteresting, and personally I feel like the main character does not act like someone who has such an infamous reputation. The author could do with trimming down some of the fat to streamline chapter further, as I feel like there's a lot of unnecessary information in many paragraphs, and feel like the easily-readable nature of this web novel could be made better with shorter chapters. 

But: it's clear they are writing this for the fun of it and is relaxed writing this relaxing slow-burn story, and this shines through with how nonchalant the writing is. It's very simple—there's lots of dialogue, quite a bit of worldbuilding (though at times there are info-dumps), but plenty of character interaction that will satisfy most RR readers of slice-of-life I feel.  

To me it feels like an even more relaxed version of Data Dragon Danika, reminds me a lot of it. I am usually someone who thinks, 'hard pass,' to web fiction that clearly does not have much—or any—polish, but for some reason, I find myself saying, 'Just one more chapter.' The easiest way I can describe it is that it is akin to comfort food; you take one bite and you just can't stop, or help yourself, and it helps greatly that each bite (in this case chapter) is just simple and short enough to be a pleasant experience through and through. 

There's no deeper meanings, no complex imagery or difficult concepts to grasp (bar learning lots of fantasy names/places). But for slice-of-life? That's ideal, so if that's the kind of stuff you're into and are looking for an easily digestible mundane-fantasy about solo backpacking across a fantasy world, I recommend this. 

DrBuller
Overall

Conversation feels like stock-up personalities-

Reviewed at: Chapter 4 - Land Ho!

trying their best to act while a man with a gun has it pressed against the back of their head, ready to shoot the moment that they cant say something perfectly. Perhaps something else to keep up with the setting, but I think my point got understood perfectly.

This isn't the perfect story. Flaws with the characters design, a style that might leave some questions unanswered, and a general sense of what the heck did not leave me with the greatest impression. Because of that, I will be leaving this with a 4/5. Needs work

Thorin Wolfsbane
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Let me start by saying this review is going to be updated over time, for sure as I'm now a fan. Avitue is now among my favourite Royal Road authors and someone whose work I will continue to look forward to as they develop. 

This is an example of how everyone has a story to tell and you can really feel that this author loves the story and the world built around it. I could see this easily becoming very popular, but for now it will be my dirty little secret. 

I love the characters, the humor is especially good, I have laughed out loud more than once, and it's not even that exaggerated, it's from the pure feelings of confusion or such that I get from the character, it really brings them to life.

The tale that's being woven right before our eyes, and I may or may not know of some things to come that have left my mouth watering for more. 

Whenever I found a typo here, or a typo there, the author was quick to edit and fix it, for someone whose third language is English, they're better at it than most, so don't knock it cause of one or two typos in a couple thousand words. 

I don't want to give too much away, but I would highly recommend this work.

Ragiula, if you're out there somewhere, come meet me and let's take your Kraken butt to grab a couple barrels, this Irishman wants a drinking contest.