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Civil War has raged on the Al-Shan Archipelago for the past four decades, only recently coming to an end with the enthronement of the new Emperor.
This is not his story.
The Blood Demon, reknowned general of said civil war, is tired of all the fighting and politicking that has described the last four decades of her existence. All she really wanted to do now is to go out into the world and see the many lands from her father's stories.
Thus she retired. And went and did exactly what she wanted.
This is the story of what happens when you toss a (retired) war machine with somewhat lacking common sense into an unsuspecting world at peace.
Chapters will range from 1-2.5k words, scheduled for release every day from Monday to Friday.
First time posting a story on Royal Road here, hoping you folks will enjoy.
-slow going slice of life with occassional faster paced action
-detailed anecdotes on the world, its races, the magic system, and whatnot every now and then
Do not expect:
-romance, other than maybe some passing mentions
-politics, again, barring passing mentions
Any comments, reviews, and criticism will be much appreciated.
And thank you for reading.
Disclaimer: This story is my original work and only posted on the Royal Road website. If you should find this story elsewhere or under another name, please let me know.
Also please don't be too hard on me when I make occasional grammatical mistakes, english is my third language after all. XD
Edit suggestions are very welcome though.
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This fic surprised me. It does not score particularly well on any of the core pillars of storywriting by any means: characterisation, plot, worldbuilding, etc. However, what it excels at, I find, is being a page turner, and—by extention—a chapter turner. It achieves this in two ways: 1) Shorter chapters, so easily readable in a few minutes; 2) The writer dishes out exactly what you expect from the synopsis/description, and that is commendable to me.
There are faults, yes, and many of them; that is to be expected of someone who is writing in their third language, however. The grammar is not great, dialogue feels very samey or uninteresting, and personally I feel like the main character does not act like someone who has such an infamous reputation. The author could do with trimming down some of the fat to streamline chapter further, as I feel like there's a lot of unnecessary information in many paragraphs, and feel like the easily-readable nature of this web novel could be made better with shorter chapters.
But: it's clear they are writing this for the fun of it and is relaxed writing this relaxing slow-burn story, and this shines through with how nonchalant the writing is. It's very simple—there's lots of dialogue, quite a bit of worldbuilding (though at times there are info-dumps), but plenty of character interaction that will satisfy most RR readers of slice-of-life I feel.
To me it feels like an even more relaxed version of Data Dragon Danika, reminds me a lot of it. I am usually someone who thinks, 'hard pass,' to web fiction that clearly does not have much—or any—polish, but for some reason, I find myself saying, 'Just one more chapter.' The easiest way I can describe it is that it is akin to comfort food; you take one bite and you just can't stop, or help yourself, and it helps greatly that each bite (in this case chapter) is just simple and short enough to be a pleasant experience through and through.
There's no deeper meanings, no complex imagery or difficult concepts to grasp (bar learning lots of fantasy names/places). But for slice-of-life? That's ideal, so if that's the kind of stuff you're into and are looking for an easily digestible mundane-fantasy about solo backpacking across a fantasy world, I recommend this.
trying their best to act while a man with a gun has it pressed against the back of their head, ready to shoot the moment that they cant say something perfectly. Perhaps something else to keep up with the setting, but I think my point got understood perfectly.
This isn't the perfect story. Flaws with the characters design, a style that might leave some questions unanswered, and a general sense of what the heck did not leave me with the greatest impression. Because of that, I will be leaving this with a 4/5. Needs work
Let me start by saying this review is going to be updated over time, for sure as I'm now a fan. Avitue is now among my favourite Royal Road authors and someone whose work I will continue to look forward to as they develop.
This is an example of how everyone has a story to tell and you can really feel that this author loves the story and the world built around it. I could see this easily becoming very popular, but for now it will be my dirty little secret.
I love the characters, the humor is especially good, I have laughed out loud more than once, and it's not even that exaggerated, it's from the pure feelings of confusion or such that I get from the character, it really brings them to life.
The tale that's being woven right before our eyes, and I may or may not know of some things to come that have left my mouth watering for more.
Whenever I found a typo here, or a typo there, the author was quick to edit and fix it, for someone whose third language is English, they're better at it than most, so don't knock it cause of one or two typos in a couple thousand words.
I don't want to give too much away, but I would highly recommend this work.
Ragiula, if you're out there somewhere, come meet me and let's take your Kraken butt to grab a couple barrels, this Irishman wants a drinking contest.