Magriculture (Rewrite)

Magriculture (Rewrite)

by NullMagic

When Aurum Industries announced the first Full Immersion Virtual Reality Massive Multiplayer Online Role Playing Game (FIVRMMORPG if you're hip) Limitless Online, most people saw it as an opportunity to live out their sword and sorcery fantasies. John, however, saw it as the opening of a new and as of yet uncrowded job market. One he was willing, and eager, to exploit.

Determined to make money through virtual hard work and effort, John sets his sights not on the heights of magic or the perfection of the sword, but instead upon the tilling of the soil and the sowing of seeds as he explores the wide and wonderful world of magical agriculture all from the comfort of his own bed.


Disclaimer: This is a rewrite of the original "Magriculture", which some of you may have read. (To those who did, you have my deepest gratitude, it is absolutely because of your patronage and comments that this rewrite happened, and I feel the story is better for it.) That said, this story is not a complete and polished work, there will be mistakes and errors, an occasionally these errors may mean I need to rewrite portions of the story (as of this posting the story has gone through two major rewrites already, and I'm seriously hoping there won't be need of a third.) Because of this, there may at times be changes.

Such changes may be as small as editing a few numbers (such as going back and changing how much mana an object holds) or it may force me to re-write entire chapters (this has happened once already, and I'm really hoping it doesn't happen again, but... life). Minor re-writes will probably never be posted here. Major rewrites probably will.

Anyway, what this boils down to is: If you're looking for a fully cohesive story with few to no errors and publisher level editing, this is not the story for you. If your looking for a cohesive plot that's more than "Man farms, man farms, man farms well, man maybe makes money" you're probably also in the wrong place, but I will attempt to entertain you anyway.

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Bouncl
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Much Improved Execution

Reviewed at: Chapter 15

I tried to read the previous Magriculture and could not get into it, the writing was just not at a level I enjoyed. However this rewrite seems to have gone really well, and I'm really enjoying the story. 

We follow the main character as he attempts to make a living in a new virtual world as a farmer. Unlike many MMO LitRPG's the world has a fair amount of versimilitude. The plot tends to focus on the main character's day to day challenges as a farmer, with a common thread being skill growth.

If you're interested in an engaging story about self-improvement, farming, and building than this is the story for you. 

Trighap
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Read the first, looking forward to this rewrite

Reviewed at: Chapter 1

As I am bored stiff of the hack-a-thon that most LitRPG are, I was quite please with Magriculture when it first came out.  I hope the author will continue to keep things focused on the crafting/agricultural aspects, as well as treating the NPCs as real beings.  I hope the town will feature strongly in the story.  Good luck!

coalmine overlord
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I liked this story before but it just didn't flow right and felt a little forced but now it is awesome all the mechanics and achievements feel very realistic same with the characters all in all a very good idea and a great read.

I admit I gave up on the first draft of this story as it just felt bad to read and was a little hesitant to read this one but it is much better now                             

AlejoTheBear
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Its been wonderful. Read the first try and it was good and engaging but had a few problems stopping ot from being great. This rewrite has cleared up all the pitfalls I could see in the last one. I've been checking for a new chapter roughly every hour today so CLEARLY im hooked

Mr. Mis'chief
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I really enjoyed the first iteration and was kind of sad when it joined the pile of unfinished litrpg farming stories. 

So I was quite happy, after discovering this rewrite. 

The changes I've spotted are all well chosen and understandable and I'm hopeful that this will become a great story (with some farm animals? ) 

 

QueenInRags
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An Amazing Revision To an Amazing Concept

Reviewed at: Chapter 7

Practically A New Story - 

This rewrite although similar to the original is something completely different, and so much more amazing than the original in my opinion. It goes off in a completely different direction than the first version did and is a worthwhile read. 

It carries amazing prose with rock-solid grammar. 

There's not really an overarching storyline yet and that might lead to some complications later but for now the books fine. 

The main character is logical and relatable, making smart decisions while still staying human.

The characters although not really the focus of the story are suitably built up.

I'd say my only complaint so far would be the lack of an overarching storyline or pressure. But like one of the other most popular stories on this website " Beware of chicken " shows us that's not really too needed. Well, maybe a little overall pressure and a bit more motivation could help but overall it's been great so far. A nice thing to read when you want to turn off your brain and fall into a decent story. 

Overall  - Great Job author !!!! Your doing a great job, keep it up and make sure to enjoy yourself !!! 

Varkt
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Farming for real

Reviewed at: Chapter 15

First of all, I have to say that I love the novel!  Very interesting read.  Not very action orienated which I'm fine with.  The world building and the progression of the store is so well thought out.  I love how its unfolding before us.  The style is great and the characters actually feel like real people.  The MC actually thinks like a real person and not an idiot.  A man and his farm...of dirt.  Love it!  I honestly cant wait for more.  Please keep writing author!  

 

For the character minimums: 

SOLDIER
    Halt!  Who goes there?

            ARTHUR
    It is I, Arthur, son of Uther Pendragon, from the castle
    of Camelot.  King of all Britons, defeator of the Saxons,
    sovereign of all England!

Pause.

            SOLDIER
    Get away!

            ARTHUR
    I am...  And this my trusty servant, Patsy. We have ridden the
    length and breadth of the land in search of knights who will join
    our court at Camelot..  I must speak with your lord and master.

            SOLDIER
    What?  Ridden on a horse?

            ARTHUR
    Yes!

            SOLDIER
    You're using coconuts!

            ARTHUR
    ...What?

            SOLDIER
    You've got two empty halves of coconuts and you're banging
    them together.

            ARTHUR
        (Scornfully)
    So?  We have ridden since the snows of winter covered this
    land, through the kingdom of Mercea.

            SOLDIER
    Where did you get the coconuts?

            ARTHUR
    Through ... We found them.

            SOLDIER
    Found them?  In Mercea.  The coconut's tropical!

            ARTHUR
    What do you mean?

            SOLDIER
    Well, this is a temperate zone.

            ARTHUR
    The swallow may fly south with the sun, or the house martin
    or the plover seek warmer hot lands in winter, yet these are
    not strangers to our land.

            SOLDIER
    Are you suggesting coconuts migrate?

            ARTHUR
    Not at all.  They could be carried.

            SOLDIER
    What? A swallow carrying a coconut?

            ARTHUR
    Why not?

            SOLDIER
    I'll tell you why not ... because a swallow is about eight
    inches long and weighs five ounces, and you'd be lucky
    to find a coconut under a pound.


            ARTHUR
    It could grip it by the husk ...

            SOLDIER
    It's not a question of where he grips it,  It's a simple
    matter of weight - ratios ...  A five-ounce bird could not
    hold a a one pound coconut.

            ARTHUR
    Well, it doesn't matter.   Go and tell your master that
    Arthur from the Court of Camelot is here.

A Slight pause.  Swirling mist.  Silence.

            SOLDIER
    Look! To maintain Velocity, a swallow needs to beat
    its wings four hundred and ninety three times every
    second.   right?

            ARTHUR
        (irritated)
    Please!

            SOLDIER
    Am I right?

            ARTHUR
    I'm not interested.

            SECOND SOLDIER
        (who has loomed up on the battlements)
    It could be carried by an African swallow!

            FIRST SOLDIER
    Oh  yes! An African swallow maybe ... but not a European
    swallow. that's my point.

            SECOND SOLDIER
    Oh yes, I agree there ...

            ARTHUR
        (losing patience)
    Will you ask your master if he wants to join the Knights
    of Camelot?!

            FIRST SOLDIER
    But then of course African swallows are non-migratory.

            SECOND SOLDIER
    Oh yes.

ARTHUR raises his eyes heavenwards and nods to PATSY.  They turn
and go off into the mist.

            FIRST SOLDIER
    So they wouldn't be able to bring a coconut back anyway.

            SECOND SOLDIER

    Wait a minute! Suppose two swallows carried it together?

            FIRST SOLDIER
    No, they'd have to have it on a line.

Uh-hmmm
Overall

For a immersive MMORPG story, it's good to see the main character take time to keep his real body fed and in shape. The magic system is simple so far, but not so narrow as to remove the possibility of creativity in formulation and execution. Having the story start in the early days of the game, with the game world itself adapting to both the deluge of players and the slow growth of the dungeons is an interesting setting. It gives depth to the "npcs" and allows for an interesting culture clash between players' expectations of fantasy society, and what actually developed within the rpg system.

The main character himself is a good mix of humble and polite, while pursuing farming instead of adventuring. His problem solving is enjoyable to watch, but the story does drag a bit while following the day to day activities of clearing land, making fertilizer, etc. It's best to go into the story expecting a slow burn, it is a story about farming after all. If you are looking for a thoroughly grounded litRPG, then look no further.

Monoria
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OK so far loving this, the worldbuilding as of now is great and the story interesting. I hope to see you updating this at your own speed, just so we get the story in the way you wanted to present it to us readers. So take your time writing this and to everyone reading this, get ready for a book of I would say good quality. 

Achtland
Overall

Varied Magical Farming Story

Reviewed at: Chapter 27

None of my friends know that, but I'm a sucker for a good farming story. I just love the creation out of nothing, the slow growing and building up and the creativity needed to overcome the complexity of it all.

This one is well written and surprisingly varied. While having to operate in a certain frame and with a clear goal, the protagonist engages in a lot of different activities. There is farming, of course, but also economics, building, a lot of different magics, theology and much more. It never gets boring, the protagonist usually juggles at least six wildly different tasks.

All of this requires well developed organizational skills, of which the protagonist has exactly none. He even acknowledges, that most of his problems come from the lack of planning and then changes nothing. While it's usually useful to concentrate one's energy on the most important things and not stretch oneself too thin, in this case it's even more crucial, since the protagonist has a strict deadline. Oh and he is really bad with money.

Yet the protagonist succeeds again and again, in some part due to how easy the world makes most things for him, but mostly due to his luck. He really should fail.

In conclusion, the story is entertaining and has a lot of variety. The skill and magic system, while not overly creative, work well. It's just, and this might just be my personal conception, that the disparity between the protagonists incompetence and his successes drags the story down too much.