Her Golemancer Girlfriend

Her Golemancer Girlfriend

by Thedude3445

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Sexual Content
The dazzling, high-tech city of Fleettwixt is the jewel of the North Sunwell Company's colonial empire. Its vast dungeons vanquished by the Great Hero, the city is now home to wealth and peace... at the cost of exploiting the continent's people and resources. Enter Amelia Bluewood: half-human, half-golem—all fury.
 
She had lost everything. Her hometown was in ruins, her girlfriend missing without a trace, her modular system malfunctioning. Now in Fleettwixt, she has a chance for revenge, answers, and ultimate power. Amelia will never stop until she finds her lover and her vengeance, no matter the cost.
 

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Story by Thedude3445

Art by Mikalya Buan


Things to expect from Her Golemancer Girlfriend:

-LGBT+ cast. The story is not a full-on romance novel but obviously love plays an important role.

-Significant violence. An anti-hero MC who does things that you and I both disagree with. Mature themes. Chapters with sexual content will be marked.

-LitRPG-lite progression fantasy. There are blue boxes and systems, upgrades and new skills, but no stats and no character sheets. Fans of crunch will be disappointed, and progression is a lot slower than most comparable fictions (at first).

-A huge fantasy city explored throughout the slow-burn storyline. Mixes medieval high fantasy with cyberpunk aesthetics and a whole lotta golems.

-".X" chapters are bonuses that can be skipped. ".1" chapters are alternate POVs and should not be skipped.

-This is a first draft! I'm always open to feedback and suggestions in the comment sections so that I can make the story better later. And I'm definitely open to compliments.

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It's unequivocally, mathematically, true. 

But if you need me to show my work, well. Here's all the equations.

Her Golemancer Girlfriend is a story about a golem that's been left all on her own. and her willingness to go to any ends to get revenge on the vicious colonial corporation that stole her girlfriend/creator away.

Of course, being recently awoken and naive, our heroine has all the grace, wisdom, and subtlety of a bull in a china shop. So she blunders recklessly into trouble over, and over and over again. Fortunately she's got a sassy system programmed by her missing girlfriend to advise her, keep her alive and help use the residual soul energy from her foes to enhance her capabilities and turn her into an unstoppable, ruthless fighting machine. That is if the growing cadre of people she meets along the way don't infect her with a pesky conscience first.

Stylistically: the author paints a fantastic picture of a corporatized fantasy world, where a large megacorp is bent of extracting as much as possible from their colonial venture. By and large the writing is fluid, and flows well; with brisky snappy fight scenes. Occassionally an awkward word choice, or an odd thought from the MC will make me pause, but it rarely impedes my enjoyment of the story. Its always nice to see a world where represenation extends beyond the main characters, and the world has plenty of background queer represenation, which is a solid plus.

4.5/5

Story: the plot is well paced, with events progressing at a steady clip, including frequent upgrades for the MCs. There is also a clear sense of direction, despite the main character's own inability to put together a good plan, which is I imagine quite difficult to pull off; but has been executed quite well.

5/5

Gramatically, errors are rare; and most errors that do exist have been spotted by keen eyed readers; and corrections are apparently imminent. Moreover, those errors where corrections are pending did not impact my enjoyment of the story.

5/5

The characters are really well done, there is a distinct personality out of the HUD system that is consistent with the personality displayed by Ed (the titual girlfriend) in the flashback scenes. The side characters all have distinct voices and desires and come across feeling reasonably mutli-dimensional even with fairly limited screen time. As for the main character, well, she is, quite frankly a ruthless, reckless fool, and that is captured perfectly in both thought and action; it can be a little frustrating watching a character make mistakes knowing they're likely to bring serious consequences down on their head. And, more damningly making the mistake of consistently overestimating her abiltiies. Although those consequences promise to be narratively very satisfying. And, given the mental age of the character I think any other portrayal would read as inauthentic. Ultimately what makes these flaws fun to read about is the sense that Amelia is growing, and learning, and becoming a better character who might be able to look back at her earlier decisions and be horrified by her own foolishness.

4.5/5

Overall, its a bang up novel with rapid updates. If the premise interests you, I highly recommend you dive right in.

5/5

Mr. White
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Came for the author, remained for the story

Reviewed at: 003: Fury Inside

Ever since reading the Tower of Arnold I've kept a very close look on TheDude since that story was the perfect combination of amusing and horrifying.

This story is not like that one and, despite that, I still remained.

Sure, it might be hasty to make a review after only 3 chapters but what the hell, sometimes you just want to hope.

The story seems very well thought out, with a clear goal and a protagonist that is very focused on it. I also have a feeling there will be some spicy twist but I don't know yet.

The background is interesting and the grammar lacking any mistake (that I saw).

I'm not good with reviews but maybe give it a try?

DrBuller
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Don't know whats the meaning of the title. Don't question it.

Anyway. I have been starting my reading on this story. Only got to chapter 5 around now, but felt that I could make a review without too many problems. And since I don't think that I'll be changing the rating anyhow, I felt it was best to put the review out as quickly as possible.

From the genre alone, it should be obvious what this is. Romance, a bit of magic, and hopefully more romance(plz more romance). There are a few parts that are slow but that doesnt really matter in the grand scheme of things. The important plot point happens quick enough and the setting unfolds with every step. I really did like the world-building, even if it might not have been the part with the most focus.

Style and grammar are pretty good if anybody was looking for that specifically. I recommend this one strongly. 5/5 from me.

573-33-1
Overall

Well, let's start with the know characters; Even when we are in a really early point of the story, they all feel thier own, they have thier charisma, thier flaws and prouds, and the beautuful artwork with extra content to get to know them better really gives them another point.

With the world and setting;  It's really vivid and interesting. All those little detials and characters we are told about really make it feel alive, even in its gruestoms parts.

For last, the storytelling; Its fluid and inviting, it doesn't make some parts extremely long or really short.
I'm looking forward to see more of this story in the future. That's all. Take care!