The First Dungeon Core

The First Dungeon Core

by Yotro

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

Jump on in, on the journey of the first-ever Dungeon core, and explore the planet around you. Meet other races and get to know the unique Evolution system and its vast variety of creatures in various environments and biomes. Venture through the continent and experience what it is like to be the first dungeon core in a world, that just like you, just started. 


What to Expect:
- Small and large-scale Battles
- Dungeon Building
- Epic Adventuring
- Dungeon diving
- Experimentation
- Kingdom building
- and a lot of fun


Update Schedule:
1-2 times a week Wednesday and Saturday
About 2000 words


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Pauli
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An interesting and exciting adventure

Reviewed at: Chapter 14 - Expanding the Dungeon 

The fiction is about a dungeon core that explores a young world and grows up within it, together with all the different kinds of experiences, challenges, and people. This makes the story quite interesting and exciting because around every corner there is something new and not before seen. 

This together with the author's descriptive, action-packed, and "Show not tell" writing style makes this story a sure rising star among other amateur authors. I am excited to read where the author guides the little dungeon core and can't wait to read more about the adventures and tales of the first dungeon core. 

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The story is excellent. I like how the author designs the races, monsters, and zones of the dungeon. The only problem I have is the grammar. One example is how peak is written as peek. This is fine as the story more than covers the occasional mistakes. However, chapter 18 is where the author's grammar skills become a problem. Before this, the author avoided dialogue, but he writes a lot of it in the chapter. The dialogue is terrible, with errors all over the place. Overall the story is excellent but needs an editor. (To the author if they read this. Try using Grammarly, it is a free website you can use to fix glaring issues but not all. Or hire an editor. Your story is still great though.) 

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Indecisive_Wanderer
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I've really taken a liking to this book and the ideas/concepts it uses. I like how the author structures their chapters and how the main character thinks, being something that came into existance recently. I also like the different creatures the author makes in this book. And while the author's grammar could use some work, I have noticed that they take edit seggestions seriously and correct their mistakes.
I will continue reading your story with great interest