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This is an Apocalyptic Novel.
Ashton is an eighteen years old young man who is looking for a job. Matt is a nine years old kid who lives with Ashton.
Their lives were barely passing by when Ashton finally got the job but they couldn't even enjoy the happiness of the job before the catastrophe struck.
Out of nowhere everyone in the world heard the voice of the kid who told them that from now on earth will be a game platform where 100 races will participate and the final victor's race will live while other races will perish.
Thus, their journey started.
Go on Journey with Ashton and Matt. Meet their new friends. Read an endless vicious side of humanity. But also, humanities faith, beliefs, and will.
This Apocalyptic novel is a work of a fiction. All the characters appearing in this work are fictitious. Any resemblance to actual events, locals, or persons, living or dead, is coincidental.
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Fun story. I'm overall enjoying it. This writer is clearly new to the game but his style shows great potential. The story has been exciting. The world building interesting but they clearly need to sit down and plan their system better. The stats are handled well. Loot is way to common and powerful. Multiple SSS level drops in the first 20 chapters. This will only lead to internal story weakness as it progresses. This saddens me because I really want to see this story develop. The dynamics between the first 2 main characters are so cute and if pondered with any depth kinda heartbreaking. They are likable characters you want to cheer for. The single largest flaw for this series is that English is clearly NOT his first language. If grammar errors drive you nuts then skip. But, (I am aware of the irony of starting my sentence thusly), if you can tolerate some it's easy enough to read. Unlike most Eastern translations, the word salad of pronouns is not the problem. That is something I personally have a hard time getting through. The author has made the classic mistake of overpowering all of the three primary characters presented so far. I generally can't abide these type of novels as they are nothing but sops to the writer's inferiority complex and their absurd personal fantasies. I still find myself attracted to this story despite my bias. To me that says a lot about it's potential. So far no signs of harm elements. Thank all the gods of all the pantheon. Harem stories are 95% so poorly handled as to ruin any readability ( see my line about sops to personal issues above).
Good enough, liked it, you guys should try it. Read at least the first 10 chaps before choosing to drop, that is if you don't like it.
I really liked that the author was dedicate enough to write 50+ chaps, it takes a lot pf effort. Pls return Author-san! I don't know what else to write but I know one thing and that is I only some wgat enjoyed reading the first 15 chaps but still give it a try, it is worth it.
I'll assume you ahve read the synopsis and ahve a general idea of the genres involved, so I won't go over them again. The author seems to have a clear idea of where they want the story to go and how to get there, which is good. Unfortunately, at the moment at least, the author still has a few different areas to improve on in order to improve the readability of the story.
The good news is that some of these areas of improvement are relatively easy to implement, or will naturally happen over time. The story itself seems reasonably solid, so assumingthe author keeps at it and works on their craft, I could see fans of the genres taking quite a liking to it.
Recomended areas to improve.
-Sentence structure: A common piece of advice I give out to people, when they ask for it, is to try reading their work aloud. 95% of errors and badly phrased sections of a sentence or paragraph, become painfully obvious when spoken aloud. This makes it easier to improve overall flow, so I highly recomend it as a first step.
-Pronouns and referencing characters: It's very easy to overuse a characters name, and when you do the section of text can become quite stilted. In every day life, we don't constantly reference someone by name over and over again, we subconciously or deliberately replace atleast every second usage in most situations with the appropriate pronoun to make the thought process flow smoother. Typically, you won't reference someone by name again unless starting a fresh paragraph or long sentence, without atleast one other character being present.
Example of overuse: Matt loved to eat oranges. In fact, Matt often wondered where the neighbours kid managed to find them in the off season. After some thought, Matt decided Matt would ask the neighbours kid next time Matt saw the neighbours kid. (Very clunky.)
Example of interjecting pronouns: Matt loved to eat oranges. In fact, he often wondered where the neighbours kid managed to find them in the off season. After some thought, Matt decided he would ask the neighbours kid next time he saw the him.
Those two issues combined are actually the largest detractor to the story as a whole. At least they are for me.
A lesser issue could be the management of stats, but I am hardly an expert on the litrpg and gamelit genres, so I will defer to those with more experience.
I know another review already pointed out something similar, but I think it bears repeating. The initial acquisition of powerful equipment seems 'too easy' and will cause power scaling issues down the road if something doesn't curb it back a bit. This actually leads into the final problem, which is the main characters being on the stronger side. Not technically a problem if handled correctly, but this is definitely an area I would keep an eye on as the author. There is a very fine line between a readers enjoyment of power fantasy, and their utter contempt for the same.
Like I posted for the title of the review, I think there is real potential here. So long as the author is willing to put in the work, this could very easily become a popular contender in the apocalypse sub genre.