The Blood Core

The Blood Core

by Dragonsunxx

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

Amara has been having a rough couple of weeks. Unwittingly committing tax fraud can do that to a person. Now forced to "enjoy" house arrest until her court date, she ends up playing a Virtual Reality Dive Game that she hasn't touched in over three years. Logging in was easy enough, she just had to sit down in her Dive Chair. The complications came after that when her character seemingly broke the game. Now she is a dungeon core of all things! With no way to contact other players or the Game Masters, she has to find a way to get out of the game in time for her court date. She'd rather not go to prison for a long time.

Maxwell had decided that he had just wasted the last five months of his life on a path that would never work for him in life. Deciding to just give up on the finals, he loads up the new game he just bought for the exams. He didn't expect to end up trapped inside like all the shows he'd seen in his youth. It didn't help that his character was basically on Hardcore mode being a Dark Elf Village Leader in the middle of a human supremacy kingdom that went in every direction for hundreds of leagues. Without knowing how dying might affect him, he steels himself to grow his village into the new power in the area. Of course, that's easier said than done when a blood-thirsty dungeon appears to be on a warpath with everything in the area. 

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Reviewed at: Chapter 16

Overall, I think this does what it sets out to do
its quality is consistent, and it’s interesting too
the premise and the multiple perspectives are well done
the story makes the most of being lighthearted and fun

The style is quite accessible and easy to digest
anyone can read it, but gamers will love it best
it’s written for its audience, a dungeon-tale at heart
but it’s a sci-fi/fantasy as well in no small part

Story-wise, it’s pretty easy going for a while
after kicking off, it takes the scenic route in style
it might seem slow because it is two stories, not one
but they compliment each other, and I like each one

The premise is a unique spin on tropes that people love
this piece is more character based when push comes to shove
I do wish the story went a little bit more quick
but it’s a slowburner, so that just my own nitpick

Grammar in this work could use some polishing for sure
but it’s mostly small stuff that is easy to endure
I rate grammar based on whether it is fun to read
there’s a solid flow which little errors don’t impede

The female lead is well explored and has her strengths and flaws
I enjoy her character, she respects all tax laws
the male lead also works, although a little less awesome
but I’m biased to vampires, and he’s a fine young chum

Supporting characters are introduced at a good pace
well described from how they talk to features on their face
as of chapter sixteen, they’re they’re a big part of the plot
even when the story slows, I like the imp a lot

In the end, this is a genre not for everyone
but I think that this work will have quite a good long run
it’s a light read, suited for consumers of this style
if you like the genre, you will read this with a smile