The Primordial Tower [Re]

The Primordial Tower [Re]

by Daoist Enigma

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The Eternal Lion, Conqueror of the 98th floor, Lord of Destruction watched in horror as his companions were slain, one by one. Humanity had made a fundamental mistake in assumption from the beginning, for this was no fair trial. 

His rage knew no bounds, but alas it was to no avail. The only reason he still drew breath was because of a being stronger than even God offering him his twisted pity, making him watch as his companions, his sworn comrades, were slain one by one in front of him as a punishment for daring to affront Him. 

He only saw one final glimmer of hope to overturn this accursed outcome, which lay in the reward for completing the hidden piece on the 98th floor.  

[The Inheritance]

Allow your knowledge and experience to flow back in the river of time, back to the beginning of the Primordial Tower's awakening on Earth. Entrust the fate of humanity to one of your kind.

Cost of Activation: Erasure of existence from the river of time. 

To think that all his efforts would only lead to becoming a stepping stone for another. With a final roar in defiance, he activated the skill. 

"Let the roar of the eternal lion tear through the boundaries of time."


Get ready for one hell of an adventure. Now do it all over again!

Follow Noah Smith's journey, a young man struggling to find a job in a sluggish economy, as his life gets overturned and the fate of the world is suddenly thrust upon his shoulders! One opportunity to change his very perception of reality, will Noah rise to the occasion and give Earth the savior it needs, or will he watch from the sidelines as it heads to damnation?

Sometimes, an ant can see what the mighty lion, in hubris, overlook. 


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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 0- Noah ago
Chapter 1- Cheerio! ago
Chapter 2- Gridlocked ago
Chapter 3- Come! ago
Chapter 4- The Savior of Humanity ago
Chapter 5- Loot! ago
Chapter 6- Hallelujiah ago
Chapter 7- Not alone ago
Chapter 8- Trade ago
Chapter 9- Pufferfish ago
Chapter 10- Humanity ago
Chapter 11- Cheeky Potioning ago
Chapter 12- Lucky Draw ago
Chapter 13- Heart to Heart ago
Chapter 14- Azamorath, The Last Titan ago
Chapter 15- The Climb ago
Chapter 16- Defeat ago
Chapter 17- Final Step ago
Chapter 18- Firepower ago
Chapter 19- Miracle ago
Chapter 20- MINE! ago
Chapter 21- Shopping ago
Chapter 22- Sect City of Saemanis ago
Chapter 23- Old Codger ago
Chapter 24- Miserly fool ago
Chapter 25- The Con ago
Chapter 26- Big mouth ago
Chapter 27- Domination ago
Chapter 28- Sparring ago
Chapter 29- Duellist ago
Chapter 30- Final Preparations ago
Chapter 31- Scheme ago
Chapter 32- Soul Devourer ago
Chapter 33- Clash of Titans ago
Chapter 34- Failed Assassination? ago
Chapter 35- Unexpected Reward ago
Chapter 36- Buying food ago
Chapter 37- Uh-oh ago
Chapter 38- Greater Devil ago
Chapter 39- Level Up! ago
Chapter 40- Quest ago
Chapter 41- Adrenaline ago
Chapter 42- Phantom ago
Chapter 43- Hell ago
Chapter 44- Didn't quite catch that. ago
Chapter 45- Lessons ago

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Jason_Blunder
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Overview: Get past the ghost. 

While I was initially disgusted by the ghost, now it bothers me far less. Even if Noah gets an advantage like this, it's far far better than luck being the reason. 

I'm sure as things move forward with Noah making choices of his own Liam will become a mentor style character. Instead of the initial cheat he seems to be. 

What I mainly like and honestly the reason I'm still reading is that in a major sense all Liam has done is guide Noah and give him some pointers. It's still Noah taking the risk and earning what he gets. 

I also love how stats are not constantly shoved in our face, tho personally I'd rather not have the entire description of weapons we've seen before but that's a minor gripe, at wich point I'm nitpicking. 

Style: 

There is a lack of 'Luck' in the story for reasons that will have to be read about. Which helps push the story part up in my mind. 

The drive to do for others while still having a personal reason is helpful for understanding Noah's choices. Along with Noah being a decent person makes the reasons seem real instead of just something the author is using. 

This is just a personal not, the eye burning blue boxes do not luck in the pages! Praise be!

Story: Too early to know where it falls.

Honestly I'm worried, the story has amazing promise. With Noah having reasons for everything that is done. Tho not every reason is heroic, which makes Noah more human. 

The only major down side is future Liam, I can see this becoming something that is less of an issue later on but it's a bit like Luck power some other stories use. Something people will have to get past starting out but slows down so far. 

The system isn't up in your face all the time and only there when it makes sense. Along with the challenges seeming possible yet extremely hard. 

Any more critiquing would just be worrying about the future problems and I don't want to nag on the story just because of my fears.

Grammer: 

Alright I'm horrible at finding Grammer issues, Yet I've found none that are glaring, and seen less fix comments than usual. 

Character: Only two

Honestly it's only Noah and Liam so far. Everyone else is just side or background with no filling out. Sure there is the sect leaders son but it's too early to see if they get properly filled in. 

Sadly even if the only other characters Noah and Liam interact with do get filled in, they are unlikely to show up again. 

On to good news tho, Noah and Liam are perfect for a mentor/student pairing. One where both learn from each other and can rely on one another to soothe there pain. 

Even tho it seems like it Liam is not just solely instructing Noah on how to do it all. More so leading Noah then being hands off from there. I can see how in the future Liam's 'skill' stops controlling the whole story wile still being useful. 

Noah, is different enough to be refreshing yet flashed out enough to be interesting. While I don't want to spoil Noah's character, I'll say he is not any one thing. Reasons and responsibility along with a lack on constant complaining. Sure gripes are there but it's more like banter and lead to funny interactions. 

Along with right now might not be the best time to dump a bunch of permanent characters into the story due to building up Noah and Liam 

 

Total view:

Hopeful and excited. I hope this continues and the author has fun writing. 

This is my first advanced review so if I rambled or doned on sorry.

Allanther
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The rewrite of the Primordial Tower is a fun read.  

The story follows Noah Smith, an average down on his luck guy as he faces the apocalypse.    Chosen, or cursed, by the ghost of a man who failed to complete the challenge tower haunts him.  Or guides him.  With British humor.  Noah must face the trials of the system tower in order to save humanity.  

In a lot of ways, this story is a standard tower-climbing litrpg adventure.  If you're familiar with and enjoy those types of stories, you'll probably enjoy this one, too.

 

Style Score:  The style is unique, and as a reader, I can see the signs that the author has leveled up his writing skills.  Tbh, I'm not a fan of most british humor (I know, a personal flaw - blame it on being spoiled by Monty Python and then disappointed by Mr. Bean.)  That said, the humor is mostly tied to one character l, which gives the two main characters a sense of different voice that works well.

Story Score:   I enjoy reading the story and will continue to do so.   I also went back and forth on what I thought of they story's plotline when Noah was on the first floor.  The storyline up to that point felt almost too standard.  Which isn't bad, per se, but wasn’t remarkable either.  The second floor, though, takes the story into a direction I really enjoyed.   But that's only the plot itself.  Pacing, chapter lengths, etc was all great.  

Grammar Score:  I didn't see any grammar, spelling, or punctuation problems.  Granted, I am not the best at finding those, but I don't recall seeing a single one.

 

Character Score:  No problems with characterization or voice.  The british humor from the ghost character was annoying at times to me, but it was also annoying to the MC.  So having the reader be annoyed at the same time as the MC for the same reason was very well done, IMO.   

 

All in all, I recommend checking this story out, especially if you're looking for your next LITRPG to cruise through. 

primordial_cosmos
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I LIKE IT.

 

Story as of now is kinda okayish barebones of something promising. There are certain worrying tendences like mc may power creep, luck stat being luck in common sense leading to dumb plot armor twists to name few. But so far those are only tendencies. Future is hidden in depths of time and I hope this story will have only bright future ahead. 

SosadhScath
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A fun romp, if rough around the edges

Reviewed at: Chapter 28- Sparring

The prose is a bit rough, the characterization is attempted but a bit jumpy/disjointed, dialogue could be smoother.  

But for all its flaws, the story is readable and fun. I'll be following it.

ReViEwS mUsT bE 50 wOrdS lOnG. ReViEwS mUsT bE 50 wOrdS lOnG. ReViEwS mUsT bE 50 wOrdS lOnG.

The Walrus King
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The story is enjoyable to read, especially if you are a fan of tower climbing stories. We don't spend a lot of time until the story gets started, which I'm a fan of. We know from the start it's a tower climber, so no sense spending many chapters until we get into things.

We get enough information for the start of the story. You meet the character, get an idea of who his is and his motivations. Family is important to him and living up to his deceased fathers expectations.  He also worries about his sister and mother. Good motivators.

Once things get going, the combat is fun. The MC isn't an OP god of war.  But he does have an annoying/helpful spirit giving him some advice and adding some levity to the scenes. All the fun of having a sidekick without  having to worry about him. We start to get an idea of the progression in his abilities without having a huge amount of info on how the system works dumped on us. More of a 'we find out at the MC finds out'. 

The only advice I'd give is to take a run through the first couple of chapters, and look at some of the sentence structure. A few of them are very long and could be split into several separate sentences which would convey things better. 

We are fairly early in the story, I'll be following along as things progress. It's all new to me, as I didn't read the original.

Aballer5
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The story has way to many save mechanics for the MC. The author is using not one but two writing crutches in a luck stat and in a "god" who knows everything but isnt very helpful. Last review got deleted so I will leave this one. My overall opinion is the stroy is bad. Author writes well but the story needs less crutch and less cringe british man who has seen all of his friends die but doesnt act like it.

Eraldkai
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Overal a decent story. With decent potential.  A little too much marry sue for the MC. It all falls a little to easily in place even with his "cheat".  

Gramar is ok. Setting is decent. Not orignal but well worked out with lots of future potential. Be carefull of powercreep. 

Xlonian
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Good read, much improved with the rewrite

Reviewed at: Chapter 22- Sect City of Saemanis

It's a good book that I enjoy reading. I read the story before the rewrite and it was good, but it feels like it has more direction now. I just need to fill the 50 word limit so la la la la la la la la la la la la la la

Kamarii Suychad
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Solid story structure with interesting characters so far. MC doesn't have a lot of agency as he is basically just following instructions but I am hopeful that this will change as the story progresses. I am also hoping to see a few more main characters for the MC to interact with in the coming levels.

EnigmaTTO
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Good start so far, seems like the author has gone back and made some improvements to the story based on some of the notes. I'd say they worked because I didn't really have any complaints in that regard and really enjoyed everything I've read so far. There are some typos and other errors here and there, but not enough to distract from enjoying the book