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The world of Nyil, with its monsters, its knights and its mildly sociopathic gods. Come and see! A soul flees and a soul arrives, blessed by luck. Will she survive? Will she thrive? Will she become a calamity?
After all, luck is such a fickle thing.
Temporary note: I am trying to publish this web serial on Amazon under the pen name Alex Gilbert.
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As a reader from Patreon (up to chap 58), I can tell you this story is going to be a blast. Easily earns 5 stars, which I do not give out often.
I'd mostly class this story as a LITRPG comedy, though there are plenty of sparks, explosions, undead, exploding undead, and crawling clouds of death thrown around to keep things interesting. It can get dark too on occasion, evidently our author has been taking notes from George.
The story is about
Viv, Bib, Bob, a soldier, who gets her isekai ticket via a doorknob of a god looking to avoid the wrath of his wife by hiding out on Earth. This means he needs a body, and Viviane is the one that gets picked. Unfortunately, barely anyone knows how to pronounce a V where she ends up, but she's not going to let that stop her building an empire (probably, eventually, maybe?) *Disclaimer, this is not an empire building story.
The MC is smart, funny, and interesting (and totally not a murderhobo psycho.) Her sidekicks, comprised of
are often hilarious, stealing the scene in a way very reminiscent of a certain Sheriff of Nottingham(RIP). This is especially true of
, who reminds strongly of a certain HK-47. They are a joy to read. The antagonists are minor bumps in the road so far, but they provide an interesting local (when chewed) flavour.
World building is fairly typical, but this doesn't detract. It's typical but good, and suits it's purpose as a fine background for the story to be painted onto. The LITRPG is there in all its blue box glory, though it is not the driving force unlike some other stories. It's how LITRPG should be done, providing a vehicle to help the story, not be a means to an end in and of itself.
Grammar can be hit or miss on Patreon (mostly just spelling, sentence structure is absolutely fine), but that is because chapters are sometimes posted without a good review pass. On RR I'd expect the same quality as A Journey of Black and Red, another amazing story by the same author.
The story has style and class in spades. It is well written and easy to read (though I would like a bit more from the viewpoint of the Gods (it's exceedingly rare but fun)).
The only mark I can strike against this is that there is not enough of it. Which is a conundrum. I don't know which I like more, Black and Red or this. And there is only one Mecanimus.
If you read anything at all on RR, read this. Highly, highly recommended.
* There is no spoon.
I review at chapter 34 (Patreon).
The story is good and keeps getting better as the cast grows. Every character has an individual personality and so far there are only interesting and believable characters present. No dumb evil, no stupid good.
Dialogues are engaging and witty, world building is great.
Grammar and spelling are above average as far as I can tell as non native speaker.
If you liked Ariane from a Journey inRred and Black you will love Viviane.
Do yourself a favor and binge this as fast as you can, then suscripe to Patreon, binge that too and then stay caught in a net of addiction.
The Calamitous Bob is by Mecanimus, the author of Journey of Black and Red. I knew I was in for a treat when I heard it announced, and Bob has delivered in every way.
The story follows Vivi... errr... Bob... as a capricious god decides to take her place on Earth, and on a whim, shoots her back to his original planet. Let the adventure begin!
System: I like 90% of the System I see so far. Fairly straightforward, not terribly complex, but with enough levers and "play" to it where there's meaningful discussion. The parts I dislike are "mental" attributes (Because of the implications of "willpower" as a stat, for example), and, up to where I've read, the lack of a seeming limit to the number of skill slots. The lack of limitation *tends* to go horribly awry in litRPGs, and the author has already needed to have a few round of "compress skills into one big skill", although those were only the initial skills. However, the author is careful about adding new skills, and it looks like it's not going to bloat too badly.
Style: I love the style. It's clear what's going on, who's doing what, and Mecanimus is a master of the language. The author can write in 10k words what it takes others to do in 100k words, without readers thinking they missed a thing. Compact but complete, every word Meca writes is brilliant.
Grammar: I've noticed no errors.
Story: I'm loving just about every moment! All the characters are busy running around following their own motives, and the story is engaging and gripping.
Character: Each character is well fleshed out, and well thought out. There's never any question who's talking, and character motives, wants, and desires are clear without ever being explicitly stated. Solfis especially is a real treat.
//Empathy Expressed. Returning to the main objective.
Advance note: Actual reading status is at around the 100 chapters which are available to the authors patreons.
An update: I am upgrading my rating to 4/5. In the later chapters Mecanimus has been following a style that mostly ignores the "interface" part of the LitRPG genre and it is a great decision. I think a rewrite of the earlier chapters for consistency would be good and make a better story, the I'll change my rating to 4,5/5 - until then assume that I consider the current chapters at this level.
Another great story by Mecanimus. Most of what it does, it does very well. However it is not sufficient to turn the litRPG elements into an asset instead it being a liability as always: I am convinced that - once more - you could have written this story without the LitRPG elements. Mecanimus tried to change this by having the status be less of a spreadsheet with many numbers going up but more of an ability checklist and avoided clustering useless system notifications or skill selections through each chapter.
This makes it better than the common approach (because notifications/status do not interrupt). However in my opinion even the parts that are defined through/require the LitRPG system could have just worked with a "background status": I think an approach compareable to overlord with classes that do have an effect but you are not visible by easily yelling "status!" (or similar). You can see Mecanimus already going in that direction because of a) the simple status b) is being refered to only every few chapter c) as a sidenote instead of "Look at the higher shiny numbers" d) and does not contain essential information you weren't roughly aware of before anyway e.g. "Oh, I got better at doing this *checking status* yes, that seems to have increased my status". But to me that just signals that the LitRPG elements in from of "real" status windows that are looked up just be removed.
Overall while I feel the story is fun to read it is a lot more ... casual (?) overall. This isn't detrimental per se but might make the story look like having not a lot of depth. In fact in conjunction it is a much better approach to the [transmigrated MC] souveranly doing stuff.
This + litRPG still being a liability makes me rate the story 3.5/5. Without the LitRPG I would rate it 4/5 - it is definitely a lot better and more fun to read than compareable works. But the story does not have enough redeming unique features with enough depth to make me rate it higher.
Note: I am less generous with my ratings than the average reader. I rated only 1 story on RR as 5/5 and only a few with 4.5/5 - Journey, Mecanismus other work, being among them.
€ Some spelling and formating.
I will be very brief on this review.
The story is about a soldier(Viv or Bob) who wakes up in the heart of a ruined empire.
She (the MC) has a nice personality and cheats at an acceptable level. The secondary characters and their interactions with her are very pleasant.
Grammar is good, with some minor typos.
And explaining the title, I think this story has a lot of chances to reach the top 3 (previously 5) of the Best Rated. So go read it now!
PS: In two days this story went from the top 50 to the top 10, and still continues to climb the ranks!
~Written at chapter 34.
A story you've doubtlessly read countless times on this site and elsewhere. A new world, a contemporary protagonist, fantasy, magic, you know the drill.
But if the premise is indeed frequent, it's been mangled and poorly executed in a plethora of other works. This is the exception to that rule. This story is competent, superbly executed and deliciously, deliciously fun.
Its best quality lies in how it effortlessly avoids most of the traps and exaggeration of the genre. The setting isn't comically GrinDerp, there's a decent safety net, acquired from the get-go. The protagonist isn't some average schmuck self-insert loser yet capable of miracles. She's a trained elite, with her own history, depth, issues and every other good tidbit of characterization. And while the narrative isn't yet pronounced due to its recentness, the immediate goals are sensible and the ever-growing cast interesting.
The protagonist is adaptive and inclined to introspection and actionable work-plans. She heeds counsel and warnings and her posse is quirky and delightful. She is gradually coming into the world and as such, the setting is progressively expanding at a good pace and the arrayed threats and antagonists are reasonable. Like the narrative, Viv is currently at the stage of building a solid core, a power base from which to grow and expand and it’s handled masterfully. Better yet, the prose and style coat it all with a generous comedic flair that is a joy to read. Bob is fun.
To sum it up, a competent narrative about a competent protagonist that manages to be grounded, hilarious and sweetly defunct of artificial drama and other frustrating tropes.
This story had a promising start but in the second half it lost all tension, focus, and momentum. It had a lot of good idea but none of them were given the development they deserved. I don't know where this story is going and it's pretty obvious the author doesn't know either.
The Calamitous Bob cracks a few jokes, has characters with more depth then a piece of cardboard, and it's lore seems to have a few less Common ideas sprinkled throughout..
But it's not particularly good at any of these things. To me it reads as another one of the lot, it has an overpowered protagonist who's special for reasons that they didn't really earn- they come up with an idea or two that should have been obvious in hindsight and that gives them an edge. Bob quickly gathers a group of rather overpowered party members not through any particular effort of her own, but instead seemingly through happenstance.
It's not a bad novel by any means, the quality of its parts is perhaps a bit higher then the average bargain bin power fantasy- but I don't see why people seem to like it so much.
I came here from Amazon, The books are great. The plot is compelling and the main charecter is the perfect level of cunning and oblivious to her predicament, and we stan a bisexual icon. I love the main charecters especially She-who-feasts-on-spiders-and-gets-much-gold. I loved the books on Amazon and the chapters avaiable here. I've read everything thats currently out and am looking forward to the next update. Please support this wonderful author!
If Journey of Black and Red is the Vampire masterpiece, this deserves to be the LitRPG masterpiece.
It is a story about a capable person going to another world in the middle of a dead empire and struggling nations. I found it to have a perfect balance between the MC emotions and the rational side.
There is no dispute about the style; the story has the right amount of dark, comedy, and emotions.
The story -after reading the patron chapters- has a good and slow world-building. The system is unique without being overly rewarding. The first few chapters have a lot of attributes and skills gains, but that's only on the adjustment period, and you will see it less as the story progress. On that note, I have to mention that MC's unique skills naming sense, which's by itself worth reading for. The characters are not overly reliant on the system, and no system will take on the world, but it's a good representation of the character's growth and strength level.
The grammar is good, especially on the published chapters. It's hard to find any mistakes.
The characters -except the gods in the first chapter- have sound reasoning and background. Again it has the right amount of character growth and a dark theme
In summary, it is a must-read.