Cogs Web Serial

by leecarlon

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Empires rise and empires fall, but legends live forever.

The gods killed most of humanity in the cleansing, but there are pockets of survivors.

Avril spends his days salvaging tech in the abandoned wasteland cities and avoiding anybody who still serves the gods, but when he’s caught between a vicious dragon and a god’s malicious foot soldiers, Avril is dragged into a mystery that will define the rest of his life.

Cogs is set in Rasa where dragons soar above abandoned cities of technological splendor, and the survivors of the cleansing must choose between kneeling to malevolent gods and risking annihilation.

Take a stand. Defy the gods.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Malicious Designs: 1.1 The Dragon’s Eye ago
Malicious Designs: 1.2 Taral ago
Malicious Designs: 1.3 Electrical Interference ago
Malicious Designs: 1.4 Lord of Nothing ago
Malicious Designs: 1.5 Lancity Tech ago
Malicious Designs: 1.6 Sprung ago
Malicious Designs: 1.7 Dualist ago
Malicious Designs: 1.8 Leaving Taral ago
Malicious Designs: 1.9 The Wastelands ago
Malicious Designs: 1.10 Vanilla Ice Cream ago
Malicious Designs: 1.11 Zin ago
Malicious Designs: 1.12 Cogs and Fairy Dust ago
Malicious Designs: 1.13 The Beacon ago
Malicious Designs: 1.14 Tourist ago
Malicious Designs: 1.15 Beads ago
Malicious Designs: 1.16 Fizzles ago
Malicious Designs: 1.17 Foolish Exposure ago
Malicious Designs: 1.18 Wetware ago
Malicious Designs: 1.19 Other Worlds ago
Malicious Designs: 1.20 Hot and Fast ago
Malicious Designs: 1.21 Unpleasant Realities ago
Malicious Designs: 1.22 Familiar Faces ago
Malicious Designs: 1.23 The Hunted ago
Malicious Designs: 1.24 Sand and Dust ago
Malicious Designs: 1.25 Heads Up ago
Malicious Designs: 1.26 Laurill fi’Simil ago
Malicious Designs: 1.27 Birthday Surprise ago
Malicious Designs: 1.28 Useless Gestures ago
Malicious Designs: 1.29 Thorn Chi’Mikkel Bondsan ago
Malicious Designs: 1.30 The Easy Road ago
Malicious Designs: 1.31 Twenty-Three Wasted Years ago
Malicious Designs: 1.32 Shadow-Walker ago
Malicious Designs: 1.33 Childproof ago
Malicious Designs: 1.34 Bullet Wounds ago
Malicious Designs: 1.35 Unbound ago
Malicious Designs: 1.36 Gabe ago
Malicious Designs: 1.37 Macabre Machines ago
Malicious Designs: 1.38 Trust but Verify ago
Malicious Designs: 1.39 One Step Forward, Two Steps Back ago
Malicious Designs: 1.40 Undeniable Compulsions ago
Malicious Designs: 1.41 Obfuscation ago
Malicious Designs: 1.42 Blockade ago
Malicious Designs: 1.43 Distracting the Enemy ago
Malicious Designs: 1.44 False Assumptions ago
Malicious Designs: 1.45 Gathered Fragments ago
Malicious Designs: 1.46 Deception and Dreams ago
Malicious Designs: 1.47 Zin’s Gift ago
Malicious Designs: 1.48 The Wizard and the Cadre ago

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Winged Thing
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Scifi + Fantasy. Reminds me of Shadowrun

Reviewed at: Malicious Designs: 1.24 Sand and Dust

Overall, I very much like this story. It has the charm of compelling ideas (Post-apoc, scifi and some fantasy elements. Though things lean to the 'can be explained as sufficiently advanced technology' so far) If I wrote each tech down seen so far, it'd be quite a long list, but they're used as elements to tell the story, not 'Here's a 500 word paragraph explaining a worldbuilding thing' Rather, they're used to enhance and flavour as spices should be. 

Grammar: Excellent, no faults I've seen.

Ideas: S+ Things feel familiar, but fresh and compelling. 

Storytelling: Competent third person past tense.

Give it a go, might be you'll like it too.

beto
Overall

The setting and worldbuilding are interesting, the scenes flow easily, and the descriptions come as needed, without overly long expositions. All in all good style, it reads like a first draft of an author with previous writting experience.

The story itself however has its flaws i guess, it starts too fast paced, and we are just starting but you can smell the MC's plot armor a mile away, which is no fun, because it drains all the tension away.

Its just 14 chapters in, will see how it develops in the latter chapters.