Rise of the Last Star - A LitRPG Adventure

Rise of the Last Star - A LitRPG Adventure

by Ayer12

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

As multiple worlds and dimensions converged, humanity was met with the Unknown. A mysterious System forces it to play its part in a death game, and through the workings of a higher power teleports every human to a deadly Tutorial Zone. In order to save himself and others, Liam must reach his full potential as the last hope.
He must become the last shining star that guides his people.

This is the story of a man's desperate attempts to save humanity from certain extinction, as well as find out who's behind it all. He dreams of creating a fairer, more just reality and through the System, finds a ray of hope. Follow his journey as he struggles to build up his power while withstanding the trials of Fate.

*While the story is fast-paced, it is also a slow-burn in terms of character building and development. Characterisation happens as the story unfolds and different plot points come into play. Beware if that's not your cup of tea.

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Training ago
Encounter (1) ago
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Choice ago
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Interlude ago
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Arthur (1) ago
Arthur (2) ago
Back on Track ago
The River (1) ago
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The River (3) ago
The River (4) ago
Escape (1) ago
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Arrival (1) ago
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Arrival (4) ago
Beneath the Surface ago
Last Stretch (1) ago
Last Stretch (2) ago
Emergence ago
The Blue Light ago
The Fight ago
Slayer (1) ago
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Homecoming ago
Outsiders (1) ago
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Imminence (1) ago
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Imminence (6) ago
Author Notice ago
Convergence (1) ago
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Convergence (3) ago
The Fog (1) ago
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Aftermath (1) ago
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Readjustment (1) ago
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The Search (1) ago
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The Search (4) ago
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Held Back by Inconsistency

Reviewed at: Fortuna (6)

Edit: Ayer12 is a very nice person and was very gracious in his reply to my review. I suspect he will revise this story, and if he does, I'll change my review 


This is also not a condemnation of the story. It's absolutely still readable and enjoyable, and the early chapters have a lot of hiccups.

3.2 Rounded up. 

Cards on the table: I am not the biggest fan of LitRPG, but I am trying to set aside that bias for the purpose of review.

I am going to address my issues with the story, starting with the smallest and ending with the largest. 

Censored swearing: This is an adult story for adults. Putting an asterisk in the middle of the word still makes it swearing, and the fiction is already labeled for profanity. The author should consider not censoring the swearing, it's a very jarring decision that does not feel consistent for the dark content of the narrative.

Character thoughts should be in italics: Italics for character thoughts are pretty standard, and it's a little strange to have them indicated by single quotation marks instead.

Comic-Book Action Descriptions: Sometimes author uses things like "BOOM" on a single line to indicate an explosion. Just describe the badass explosion, it will add a lot more oomph and make  the destructive/action-filled moments a lot more fulfilling.

Character age inconsistency: The main character, Liam, feels inconsistent age-wise. Not only does his dialogue cary wildly, it often-times feels age-innapropriate. For example, in chapter 2 he calls someone "little girl" in a sort of Santa Clausy way. There are ways to call someone "little girl" with phrasing that might be more appropriate for a 22, rather than Santa Claus. Up until that point the MC has also been referred to as a "youngster" (although, to be fair, was also referred to occasionally as a young man). Youngster feels like a misleading term, and I am confused why the author didn't use "young man" throughout those chapters. I was very confused as to why a 12-13 year old was wearing a suit and interviewing for jobs. Turns out he's 22.

Chapter 3 and 4: Okay. There's some weird stuff here. Game system just randomly introduced, and the MC's 6th sense for danger just tells him that it's dangerous and it's going to kill all of them. I liked how the world afterwards is going crazy, but I wish there was either a) more setup, or b) more time when things were crazy. Maybe in an alternate universe this could be the moment the story starts. I feel like it would cure the main problem I have with this story. Also the main character's friend is a billionaire who owns a private army. Why is he even job-hunting?

Liam's character: Okay, so he's a sex-god, hyper-stat, ubermensch who goes from the brink of suicide to literally one of the most powerful people in the universe by chapter.... (checks notes) 10, based almost entirely on his stats. The story states that the average human stat is 10, and he is literally above average at his lowest (int of 13). His statline gives him a 58 and a 40-something in constitution and strength, respectively, based entirely on a skill he recieves called "survive"

This is what it does:

 Increases Strength and Dexterity based on user's will to survive. The higher the user's desire of self-preservation in the face of death, the higher the skill effect. There is a limit.

This is inconsistent with the premise of Liam's character. He goes from literally near-suicide, to being an uber-mensch at level 0, based entirely on his will to survive (which we should expect to be low).

Chapter 10 ends with him deciding that he's going to turn into God, and forge the world a happier and better place. Nothing in his character really tells me that's what he desires to do with his life. He just strikes me as a bum who doesn't care about anything. 

Will you like this book?

If you like over-the-top power fantasy and litrpg, yeah probably. 

How can the author fix these issues in future books/revisions?:

If you're still reading, then here's my advice for this author: Focus on one aspect of Liam's character. Currently, it feels like it does not matter who he was before he came into the system-world. I am not invested in his character by chapter 10. If his character were 1) described more consistently 2) was more consistent in how he viewed the world, then I would have some amount of character investment. As it stands, I don't.


A great story but... :)

Reviewed at: Homecoming

Overall/TL;DR: It's a great read as of currently how I am reading through it, great job! :)
The only problem I see is that the plot is sometimes maybe a bit confusing or could be a bit better? I guess I'll figure it out and tell yopu what when I find it :). Keep at it, it'll become a great read and you're a great author.

Style: I love the way you portray the protagonist, and the way you write around them and all that happens within the plot, it is an interesting read and I like to see how this protagonist developes throughout the story.

Story: It may or may not move a bit fast for my liking, but readiong it at my pace and soaking in everything I cna say it'd be a great short story written, nbut as this is a novel it can be improved in some ways such as the structuring of the events and the storyline is greatly done keep at it champ :).

Grammar: Almsot nothing to say, you definitely used a spellchecker or you're naturally fgreat with writing! The written structure flows and liocks together solidly and the spacing and pauses is enough to leave me on the edge of my seat.

Character: Now this may be a bit harsh, but I do believe your story needs a bit more character developement or a bit less, I am currently on the gate with this and it's basically depending on how I read this story to be honest. Although you could maybe wittle down the numbers it is great how your story flows around the protagonist.

The Walrus King

The challenges are actually challenges.

Reviewed at: Arthur (2)

I've read lots of stories that start with 'hero with dark past' sent to 'tutorial to be tested'. Most are actually an awesome power trip for a gamer. They beat up goblins, find magic, level up quickly and get OP. Their dark past is a minor betrayal, or they are poor, or something else minor. Not in this story.

The dark past is traumatizing, and it shows in how the character reacts to things. He's a better than average fighter at the start, but has very good reasons why this is so. He's scarred inside and out. It's sometimes tough to even think about what he went through. 

The 'tutorial' is a nightmare scenario. He gets stronger pretty quickly, but the fights are horrible. He's always in danger. No fancy gear, food is burnt monster, prospects of survival are poor. A real meat grinder. 

Very curious to see where things go.


Captivating action, enthralling characterisation!

Reviewed at: Interlude (2)

It's actually very rarely that I'm drawn into a story on this platform, but I really was with this one. Finished everything that had been done so far in one go,

So style, first off. The language isn't tremendously complicated, but its easy to read. The story pulls you in fast and the action scenes are especially well done.

The grammar is largely fine. Speaking very critically, there are a few mistakes here and there, and some of the formatting surrounding dialogue could have been done a little better, but by and large the text is very professional, and certainly some of the best I've encountered on this site.

As with any fiction, the story is what really matters. Last Star pulls you in with an action-driven plot, suitably surrounded with deeper themes of philosophy and absurdism -something that is very much up my alley! The main character spends a lot of time on the brink of death, and the treatment of this is refreshing, focusing on the thought processes behind what the character is encountering. This feels very real and helps to draws the reader into the moment, lending them a lot more investment into the character. The action scenes are captivating in general, as a matter of fact.

The one thing I would say -and this is entirely a matter of opinion- is that I disliked the RPG/game stats aspect of the story. I felt like presenting things as a video game (and hanging on that during the crescendo moments of action scenes) seemed to rob the situation of some of its gravity and drama.

For example seeing a character do something like lay aside their self destructive tendencies in the midst of battle, seizing instead hope and the will to live, and then having that defined as an in-game ability sort of... Cheapens the moment, in my eyes.

Of course, this is probably entirely subjective to me, and fans of the genre will likely enjoy the extra layer it provides. Others should likely learn to read the story tags more carefully before they are surprised by certain inbuilt elements!  

Characterisation, of the main character at least, is fantastic. Relatable, well drawn and empathetic, with a spine-chilling backstory to match, the protaganist certainly feels real. I can't really say the same for the side characters at this stage of the story, but hopefully this will change as we go onwards -Albert certainly seems very promising!

Only thing I found a little hard to swallow was how quickly all of the characters were in figuring out the world/individual skills/rpg system elements. Seems like the sort of thing that would take a while to adjust to, perhaps with some of the side characters voicing a little more scepticism, or not quite landing on the official nomenclature. Perhaps a larger time gap would fix this?

I'm also genuinely quite interested to learn more about other character's perceptions of what had happened -If the translator is universal, does it put the system into terms that individuals could better understand? More than anything, their general reaction to the whole situation ought to tell you droves about a particular character.


So in summation, check out this fiction, and do it now! It is one of the best I've had the pleasure to read on here -and I have a natural aversion to the very genre- that certainly ought to speak to its quality! I hope the author has plenty of more material ready for release!


Surprisingly good

Reviewed at: Fortuna (2)

I didn't expect much at the start but after a few chapters I can see this actually going somewhere keep up the good work I usually hate reading,watching TV, even playing games but it grabbed my interest with how realistic it is explaining social media and how it feels to wake up in the morning



My Review on this.

Reviewed at: Arthur (2)

So obviously i doubt anyone reads this and clearly i'll update this as the story progresses and although there are aspect which have been used from other novels, this is not utilizing them in such a crude way some parts are like well why did he all of a sudden power up? But then again it could be counted as plot armor however this is  not overused. The flow of events is consistant and realistic along with the MC's use of his abilities is well implemented. Keep this up and you will have an amazing Novel! Now some points he clearly started strong his foes have to be incredibly powerful for this to progress without it becoming somewhat drab or utilize him less like in OPM for example. Additionally some cases of where he got his power boost is somewhat questionable but comprehendable as those situations may stimulate his hidden potential. It is enjoyable that the MC is not arrogant or utterly stupid and proceeds with his intellegence instead of rushing in and planning as he goes. The MC is not famous or anything makes it down to earth as a kind of relatable person which makes people possibly get a connection to the character Liam. Now some questions for the future how will Arthur and Albert be able to assist Liam since he is naturally the Main MC will they be Like Recon Support or become assistants who are powerful but not Nearly as powerful?


A Good Novel, In my opinion, its a very great novel, I enjoyed it, I had fun with it, a very good novel, thank you for creating this, I really liked it, it was a fun novel to read. ((I'm just going to extend this cause 50 words long is what the goddamn review want))


Well, this won't be too long of a review, I'll get my point across quickly. The style and grammar are both good, I think some more variety for words could be used, but it's all very good. 

The story itself is interesting and characters are somewhat cool too. I would say Liam is a little bland for my taste, but that's because I just don't know a lot about him yet. Otherwise, the story kinda pulls you in, and I had fun reading this.

If there would be any advice to give, I'd say maybe explore Liam a little more and further delve into the side characters, as I think they are currently not very interesting. I like the attribute system and being warped into a tutorial is something I don't see often so it was something I think was a great addition too. 

Who I liked the most was Arthur, he seemed very interesting and mysterious like Liam, but I think we were given enough information to put together a mental image of him, unlike how with Liam, I am utterly clueless to what his past could be; he seems to be trained, but yet again, he is struggling to get work and is suicidal. 

Now, I don't have much more to say, except what I repeated before for a conclusion. The story was interesting, I think delving into characters could be done a bit more. I haven't gotten to it with my story either, so can't blame ye much on that part. A solid 4 star for sure, and another half since I like this story personally, I will be tuning in for future chapters.

PS: As this was my first ever advanced review, please don't judge me for how it's made. This is my personal opinion, and please don't resent me for that.


An above average story with inconsistent tone

Reviewed at: Encounter (1)

This story does touch on heavy subjects, so be warned. 

Style: Solid, evocative, and does a good job drawing the reader into the MC's life. It's written in third person, mainly limited, but with some omniscient creeping in. I don't mind omniscient, so it didn't bother me. It has a vaguely light-novel feel to it, the way things are written out. 

Grammar: Quite good. Has a few flaws, but overall there is little to complain about. Above average.

Story: Some events felt a bit abrupt and rushed. Chapter 4 in particular was more difficult to suspend diseblief for and once we get into the game part, the main character seems quite overpowered for someone in his situation. 

After the very grounded and largely realistic intro arc, it felt jarring to be thrown into a more typical super special MC with unique powers story. 

Character: I have a problem with two supporting characters being named Arthur and Albert; I keep getting them confused with each other. Thankfully, there are enough descriptors sprinkled throughout that it was only minorly jarring, but it's still worth mentioning.

There's a disconnect between the feel of him in his initial chapters and the version after attaining his system abilities. It felt almost like I was reading a different story about an entirely different person, with only occasional asides to remind us of who he's supposed to be. 

Overall: Based on the intro arc, I expected to rate this story much higher. Unfortunately, the genre transition proved to be too jarring for me. Still, despite my personal falling out, the story is quite well done for what it's trying to be. 


Ok, gamelit isekai story here. 

The major difference between Rise of the Last Star and other gamelit stories is that it looks like the entire population of Earth is getting summoned into an alien gameworld, instead of just the protag and a few other unfortunates. I'm just seeing hints so far, but it appears that there is an actual over-arching plot in mind, so this just might manage to be one of the relatively rare Isekai stories that get a real conclusion. Here's hoping! :D

The MC is interesting and has some distinct personality traits, even better his backstory informs the way he interacts with the game. While he is a smidgen generic, that tends to be a feature rather than a bug. The supporting cast is relatively flat though, and can be a bit tough to keep strait. On a similar note, the dialogue can feel forced, as it gets used to exagerate features instead of expressing them. Adding some more physical descriptions could help, and giving us more background on the important supporting cast members would help too. 

The story moves quickly, and I found myself reading way more than I intended to in any given situation. Five stars for always pulling me forward. 

Nothing wrong with grammar, so five stars. 

If you like this kind of story, try it out!