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My Newest, and at the same time, Oldest novel. This is a Rewrite of my very first novel that I begun when I was just starting out.

It follows the story of Mark Floyd, a broken man who once tried to do what he thought was right... only to be stabbed in the back and thrown away.

Now, pulled into a conflict that spans time and space, Mark has a choice to make; Stand up once more, even if it means facing an unknowable future, or let the Embers of his heart die and sink back into darkness.

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“For gold is tried in the fire, and acceptable men in the furnace of adversity”.

Once part of a Special Ops team in the US Army, Mark Floyd thought he had seen the worst that Humanity had to offer. That was until his final mission, one that would leave him a broken and shattered man, betrayed by the Country he served, and abandoned by society as a whole. 

His dreams filled with nightmares of the ones he failed to protect, mind and memories clouded by booze and more, Mark finds himself stumbling through life without purpose or desire. 
Life isn't done with Mark yet, however. 

For as long as even a single ember remains in a persons heart, here is still yet hope for the flames of Passion and Hope to be Rekindled. 

When the dying embers of Mark's heart catches the eyes of a Being far beyond his understanding, Mark finds himself thrown into a situation not even his years of training could prepare him for. 

Will this new chance be Mark's hope at both Redemption and Recompense? 
Or will it simply be the final nail in the coffin for a man already dead to the World? 

[This is a rework of my very first story. The general story will remain the same, however a few details have been tweaked, the chapters have be Edited better and some chapters have been broken down into smaller chunks for better flow and consistency.

The biggest change will be to the System itself; It will be a lot less "Game-like", meaning no stats, levels or similar aspect, though skills will still be present in the form of "Programs". Instead, It'll focus more on the Sigil's nature as super-computers and how they change the world around them. This should make for a much more "natural" and less info-dumpy system.

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A story about a broken man dragged into an equally

Reviewed at: Chapter 6: Answers

A story about a broken man dragged into an equally broken world. 

I've read the first story, so seeing it here rewritten is quite a treat. Its different enough that I doesn't feel like I'm just rereading the older chapters, but at the same time its familiar enough that I'm even more excited to see what the author has in story. 

The Characters are a lot more flushed out and the details crisper and clearer before, so that's a plus. Remembering some of the future scenes, I can't wait to see what else is in story. 

I remember the author talking about deleted scenes I hope to see as well. 

All in all, this story has a lot of potentials, even if its still got a long way to go. If you're looking for a good story with a different flavor than the other 'other world" stories out there, then this one is for you.

If I had to give one bad thing about this story, its that it has a bad habit of bouncing from silly, light-hearted moments to darker, more mature ones. whether the Rewrite follows this trend however, is yet to be seen. 

Hope you enjoy the story!