The Core: The First Guest

by Ken Raven

So distantly far away there is a race that advanced to the point where they built dyson spheres to house their civilizations. In their continual expansion, they seeded galaxies ever farther away with pods and connection satellites. Over time they upgraded their dyson spheres into matryoshka brain Cores. 

Imagine a computer powered by a star.

Citizens of Cores no longer age once they upload their minds into the virtual living system of the Core. While they didn’t age, most still choose to cycle through life and death though at a different scale of time compared to our lives. 

Citizens can visit other planets and live there as if they were on a "vacation". Mercury is Earth’s hub connected to the closest Core and Earth is a remote vacation spot for wealthy citizens. 

When the main character was 10 he witnessed a citizen returning to the Core. The story continues 10 odd years later when he again witnesses a similar situation unfolding and manages to touch the person returning to the Core. This causes him to be swept up in the transfer as well and for his mind to join as a "Guest" user of the Core. 

As a Guest he has limited powers, a starting balance of zero cr or Citizen credits, and no idea how he can get home. He is the first human ever to become a Guest of a Core, where money itself is the highest form of their science. 

This is a work in progress. Major editing will be done after the book is complete, so there will be typos and parts that need further explanation. Please, please feel free to point out any of these things. I will attempt to keep readers apprised of all changes and big updates.

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Interesting premise

Reviewed at: Discoveries

This is my first written review and I just had to post to let people know about this novel it has interesting premise with a lot of potential bit slow to start but picks up.

It has a plausible explanation for cartier motivation unlike some story where the main characters just gets isekai'd and is just ok with it or changes who they are with from one scene to the next.

I recommend giving a try hope the author continues