The KING group

The KING group

by Invictus21

Does circumstances make a person, or does a person make his circumstances?

How far can an ordinary person go when pushed to the limits?

What is right and what is wrong?

And how far can one fight back an incomprehensible opponent?

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Alpha_guru
Overall

Needs some work, but overall nice story.

Reviewed at: Chapter - 5

As the story is still in its early stages, I will rate this according to the writing style and where to improve rather than its plot.

Overall, the author incorporates 'show and don't tell' very well in his style. The grammar is a bit sketchy in some areas but not to the point where it is unreadable.

The only issue i do have with the style till now is that the author shifts the p.o.v. of characters a bit too much without any warning. This is not much of an issue while focussing on a single character but in scenes with multiple characters, it can break immersion of the reader.

So a nice story overall, but needs some work.

 

DrBuller
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Not sure how else to describe the style. The further you get into each chapter, it just begins to feel more advanced in the ways the author writes. It feels like some rust needs to be taken off each time the next chapter gets written. Not calling that bad or anything. More like... weird thing to notice.

Grammar is fine. Style is named above. Characters are... eh. Feels a bit weak in that regard, but it isn't that bad. 4.5/5