The Great Devourer
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Thousands of years ago, Nox, the Goddess of Eternal Night tried to destroy the world and was sealed into an eternal prison for her crimes. Now the world wants to finish her off along with the girl who was unlucky enough to accidentally find and let her out.
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I'll get this out of the way and say The Great Devourer isn't a perfect story. Honestly, no story here is perfect. They all have flaws. I give ratings based on if I like it and if I don't like it, and from there, I usually grade super high.
But I will point out a few things that the author should keep in mind for this story and for later projects.
1. Readers here tend to have a hard time following characters that become the story's plot-related punching bag. It's weird. Readers want to see the characters struggle somewhat in some manner of conflict that makes it interesting, and maybe slightly unpredictable, to read. But it's hard for readers to be sympathetic toward characters who SEEM to self-sabotage too much. Or SEEM to lack agency. I'll admit some moments made me go "D'oh!" but then I kept reading, and I learned the reason behind why it happened. I suppose not many are going to last with the rapid repeats of "D'oh!"
-A counter to that point is that there are definitely nefarious characters involved set against Yul and Nox. It's quite the challenge to fight them. I wonder how they'll go about it.
1. The emotional development of the characters is fast as fuck, lol. The development between Nox and June felt like it happened within a few days. But I thought about why it happened and understood there were underlying reasons for it.
So a lot of the development can be explained, and I understand what the author's going for. That's the tragedy here because the average reader isn't patient enough to endure the "D'oh!" moments and come to terms with what's really happening.
Simply because the most important quality a character must have in RR stories is a level of "displayed" competency that's consistent. It can be a boring character, but if they're competent and consistent, RR readers' will ride with it. Make a competent, consistent, and unique character, and you're talking the holy grail.
But that's mostly commercial stuff.
What I like about this story are the unique locations the author takes us. The ideas and worldbuilding are plentiful in the world of the author's creation. I love the beauty behind the ideas, the way that everything that's modernized in the time of the setting has a link to what had been 6 thousand years ago. There's a huge amount of creativity here. Walking giants that provide sustenance. Ancient towers that shoot down invaders. Skyoceans and organisms fly around sections of a world orbiting a black hole shining light from its corona. So much is packed into this story is like reading a painting.
It's fucking amazing.
Then you have the art.
It's drop-dead gorgeous. It drips with talent and beauty.
And it honestly matches the descriptions the author writes that describe the world.
I think my biggest takeaway here is that the author themselves mentioned what this story is like from the beginning. And as a writer, I could see what the author is doing and appreciate it. And I think there's a lot of readers who appreciate it, too. It's just the way the story is told is going against what some readers would tolerate.
Also, the peeps who are downvoting this because of the nudes/ecchi are on some puritan-level ideology. They remind me of the Virtue Knights of the story, lol. And we know what Nox did to them.
Holy hell, it feels like someone distilled the essence of the average Royal Road reader and made it into this story.
(This is not a compliment)
The story doesn't even bother to explain most of its setting, it expects you to know most of it by heart (meaning it has all the tropes you can imagine), and its painful to read through.
This reads like a cheap Ecchi Anime (it means its heavily sexualized but never goes through with it, so its not actually smut), the protag has her clothes off 99% of the time, is sexually harrassed constantly, and it tries to pander to as many fetishes as its able to.
It tries to be comedic, but for me it always comes off as forced, comedy is deeply personal, and I personally dont find it appealing when its derived by having EVERY SINGLE characters feel about as intellectually challenged as a retarded goblin (and as debatably horny as well)
The Art is bloody incredible tho, idk what the hell this guy/gal/other (you can never assume these days) does to make these images so good, yet.... if anything reading it along with them only cements the notion that this was supposed to be a smutty Visual Novel instead of a Webnovel.
The great devourer is a misadventure of an ancient, world-destroyer, goddess of night, Nox trying to reclaim her past glory and her unwitting-unwilling vessel, Yul.
The first impression that the story delivered is how well-executed it is. Particularly when the readers are presented to the inner thought of Nox, which understandably a bit ...removed from the hubbub that is being a mortal.
While Nox one-track mind; her deluded, narcissistic one-dimensional personality is nothing new of isekai tropes, her banter and willfulness who thought that because the world used to revolve around her, thus it should continue to do so is exhilarating. Especially when we saw her fumbled the most basic social interaction.
Although with how the author presented Nox's character voice, it'd be unsurprising that the reader would found themselves not rooting for her 'looks on how things should be'. A pure child-like look, that however immoral, seems right because it's fun.
At the same time, the readers would also feel empathy for Yul, who is forced to endure in becoming Nox host, even willing to kill herself then becoming a vessel of destruction.
The characters are well developed and well fleshed, already by chapter 10, we could see several character growth slowly developing in the background.
The only flaw that could be pointed out (and this is really nitpicking) is that Yul is a tad bit too advanced for a simple farmer's daughter. How could the girl think in the million (first chapter, first paragraph), while none of her cultural background seemed to indicate so. It could be understood if she come from a mercantile/scholastic family, but millions for a farmer? That's stretching it a bit too thin. Of course, this particular commentary should be sidelined the moment she revealed to have more of those 'unusual pasts' like most author here love to foreshadow.
The story also teased grand worldbuilding; a complex interconnecting world of magic with possibility of space travel, a black hole as sun replacement, a church-civilian politic, racism, and (obviously) a secret organization encompassing six millennia and six thousand miles.
The style is lyrical. Particularly Nox's voice. The sentence structure is varied with length. First with five-six structure crescendo. Then stopped with a hint. A brief.
It is beautiful and mesmerizing. Immersing the readers fully.
A̶ ̶b̶i̶t̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶w̶a̶r̶n̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶a̶u̶t̶h̶o̶r̶ ̶t̶h̶o̶u̶g̶h̶,̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶s̶t̶o̶r̶y̶ ̶n̶e̶e̶d̶s̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶b̶e̶ ̶a̶p̶p̶r̶o̶p̶r̶i̶a̶t̶e̶l̶y̶ ̶t̶a̶g̶g̶e̶d̶ ̶w̶i̶t̶h̶ ̶p̶r̶o̶p̶e̶r̶ ̶c̶o̶n̶t̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶w̶a̶r̶n̶i̶n̶g̶.̶ ̶S̶e̶x̶u̶a̶l̶ ̶c̶o̶n̶t̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶w̶a̶r̶n̶i̶n̶g̶.̶ ̶F̶r̶o̶m̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶f̶i̶r̶s̶t̶ ̶t̶e̶n̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶p̶t̶e̶r̶s̶ ̶a̶l̶o̶n̶e̶,̶ ̶i̶t̶ ̶c̶o̶u̶l̶d̶ ̶b̶e̶ ̶s̶p̶o̶t̶t̶e̶d̶ ̶t̶h̶a̶t̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶s̶t̶o̶r̶y̶ ̶d̶e̶s̶c̶r̶i̶b̶e̶s̶ ̶a̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶m̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶s̶e̶x̶u̶a̶l̶ ̶h̶a̶r̶a̶s̶s̶m̶e̶n̶t̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶d̶e̶p̶i̶c̶t̶ ̶a̶t̶ ̶l̶e̶a̶s̶t̶ ̶a̶n̶ ̶N̶S̶F̶W̶ ̶l̶e̶v̶e̶l̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶f̶e̶m̶a̶l̶e̶ ̶n̶u̶d̶i̶t̶y̶.̶ ̶ ̶ ̶
W̶h̶i̶l̶e̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶l̶a̶t̶t̶e̶r̶ ̶c̶o̶u̶l̶d̶ ̶b̶e̶ ̶a̶s̶c̶r̶i̶b̶e̶d̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶c̶u̶l̶t̶u̶r̶a̶l̶ ̶b̶i̶a̶s̶ ̶i̶f̶ ̶c̶o̶m̶p̶a̶r̶e̶d̶ ̶a̶p̶p̶l̶e̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶a̶p̶p̶l̶e̶ ̶w̶i̶t̶h̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶i̶r̶ ̶m̶a̶l̶e̶ ̶e̶q̶u̶i̶v̶a̶l̶e̶n̶t̶,̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶m̶e̶r̶ ̶n̶e̶e̶d̶s̶ ̶p̶r̶o̶p̶e̶r̶ ̶t̶r̶i̶g̶g̶e̶r̶ ̶w̶a̶r̶n̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶a̶s̶ ̶n̶o̶t̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶t̶r̶a̶u̶m̶a̶t̶i̶z̶e̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶r̶e̶a̶d̶e̶r̶ ̶w̶h̶o̶ ̶e̶x̶p̶e̶r̶i̶e̶n̶c̶e̶d̶ ̶s̶a̶i̶d̶ ̶d̶i̶f̶f̶i̶c̶u̶l̶t̶y̶ ̶i̶n̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶i̶r̶ ̶o̶w̶n̶ ̶l̶i̶f̶e̶.̶
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In conclusion, the story is amazing. A true worth read that deserves all of its five stellar stars.
The art is fantastic, the premise is solid, and so is the worldbuilding. Spelling and grammar are all good too.
So why give it 2 stars?
The author keeps forcing the 2 MC's to act like idiots. All. The. Time.
The same old mistakes are repeated constantly and they never learn a thing. This goes on and on and on chapter after chapter.
I dunno maybe its supposed to be funny or something but its frustrating to read to me. I got 9 chapters in and I couldn't take it anymore.
I love this story in its entirety. I'm currently 20+ chapters ahead of the RR releases as I've been blessed with editing this gem. I can assure you good things are coming, and a lot of the complaints in the negative reviews are addressed in time(but my apologies to the prudes–the butts remain victorious). My original review below:
I read the first chapter, but I was not ready for it. I binged everything posted today dreading the fact I knew I'd get to the end of the posted content. This is absolutely sublime. Just enough humor, just enough seriousness, plentiful world-building, amazing character development, and all that drowned in a splash of awesome. That's the recipe here.
There's some grammar mistakes that slip through, but they get caught and fixed. No worries here.
The writing style suits the story and lures you in to fully enjoy the settings, the characters, and the plot. And just in case you're wondering what some scenes look like, there are pictures to help immerse you even further. Never mind the butts, though I have to admit the artist has cornered the market here.
The story... Goodness, the story. It's so immersive you'll just get drawn in and taken for a ride. I'll be eagerly devouring this one as new chapters are released. I'm looking forward to the main plot kicking off in earnest, but until then even the build-up is amazing.
The characters. There are no flat characters here. Everyone has their goals, ambitions and unique personalities. Love them, hate them, that's up to you to decide.
The gist of this story is someone didn't like the whole "entropy ensures the inevitable heat death of the universe" thing, so decided to scream "FUCK YOU SPACE!" so loudly they accidentally broke the earth into a pile of tiny pieces, turned the sun into a super-massive black hole, fucked up magic so hard that now all the trees have tits, the rivers have tits, basically everything now has a sexy spirit who demands the puny humans worship them, and accidentally got imprisoned for 6,000 years by her own followers who were understandably upset about the whole "everything is fucked" situation.
Fast forward 6,000 years to a very different world where a young girl just found out she has no talents beyond being the equivalent of a virgin in the creepy, fetishistic way catholicism viewed that trait during the middle ages. So the local super-power obviously wants her to become a nun. Yup.
Naturally this all goes terribly wrong, and before you can say "excuse me, what the fuck?" These two functionally polar opposites are smashed together, resulting in extreme shenanigans as one doesn't want to die, while the other is convinced she is possessed by an ancient evil and must go become a nun to cure herself. I can't really say more without spoiling things, but that's the first 2 chapters, and it gets crazier from there.
So enter a not-quite-a-world of magic, intrigue, debt-slavery via soul magic, ancient nature spirits, corrupt quasi-religions, and at least one adorable fox-girl, and remember to enjoy your stay. Don't mind the screaming lady glowing purple. That's Nox. She does that.
I don't know how to describe the style beyond "wholesome humor meets unpleasant reality and the two fight like angry cats in a wet bag, while wonder and awe watch from the sidelines."
The story is fantastical, as presented in my short synopsis above. If you don't like it by chapter 2, it's probably not for you.
As a registered grammar gestapo, I can confirm that the grammar meets my standards.
For character score I only have one thing to say: "AUTHOR IF YOU DONT MAKE SURE SHE'S OK I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN AND DO UNSPEAKABLE EVIL TO YOU! THE UNIVERSE WILL TREMBLE AT YOUR SCREAMS! You know who I mean, chapter 27 better have good news for me.
This is absolutely one of the best executions I have ever seen for what it is. The swapping between perspectives is what really drives this story for me and it honestly amazes me how the dichotomy between Jul and Nox works as well as it does.
Also, arrogant Goddess goes brrrrrrrr.
it's a fun concept and I like how the author uses multiple personalities. The world building is great and I feel like I'm starting to understand how everything works. Also I like the story and have a great time reading it. Can't wait to see how it turns out. So thanks for the story!
This actually nice y'all, this is just the beginning but I already loving it.
For starters the double personnality allows lots of fun situation, and that's just made even more fun with how different they are. Especially given how fun the Godess is looking to be lol.
The writing seems good to me, never distracted me from the story, and it flows nicely.
So... looks to be awesome, please read it ?
I have read up to the current chapter and whew buddy is it enjoyable. I saw none of the things others saw. A stupid mc, or anything like that. I saw a girl developing in a world of magic growing and doing and existing. It's like they expected something else or a different thought process and it wasn't there so therefore it was wrong. I didn't see anything like it just her living and trying to live, with the human foibles that come along with that. Thanks Author, please continue the story and arrive to a great finish I look forward to following her adventure or experience.