Lord of the Night Realm: Book I - Sojourn
by sennabyrd
A romantic fantasy tale following Ellie, a young woman torn from her everyday life and dropped in an unfamiliar and dreary world known as the Night Realm. There she forms unexpected and cherished relationships with its denizens, including Lord Janus—the vampire who takes her in as his ward. But if Ellie's not quick to decide between the life she knew and the one she's found, evils lurking in the shadows may take it upon themselves to write a new fate for her.
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Sweet and Detailed
Reviewed at: Act 1: Chapter 13
The biggest strength of this story is how much attention it pays to the characters and their relationships to one another. The main character Eleanor, Ellie, gets a number of meaningful relationships: her mom, her dad, her sister, a magical mouse named Gerald, and the vampire Lord Janus. The characters are all lovely in their own ways, so this is a comforting story to read.
The biggest weaknesses are an extremely leisurely pace and overwritten descriptions (which I pointed out to the author.) With a tighter structure and writing style, this has good potential!
I think that the Slice of Life tag could be worthwhile, because while there is a broader and high-stakes plot in formation from the looks of it, the story very much focuses on the day-to-day activites of the characters. I think that readers of Slice of Life, would appreciate the detail of the characters' daily lives.