Ilhen's Seventh Deathtrap — A Fantasy Adventure Tale

by ninjacat007

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

A trail of clues... a political conspiracy...

Enzo and Leonardo are renowned adventurers who specialize in Rare & Esoteric Artifact Recovery. With their guild on the brink of bankruptcy, they embark on a quest to locate Ilhen's Seventh a legendary deathtrap brimming with occult treasures.

But complications abound. Rival adventurers are also on the hunt, and Enzo suspects they're being followed by the Empress' shadowy spy ring, the Black Cabal.

And worse, Ilhen's Seventh is not what it seems. As they race to solve a trail of cryptic clues, they are drawn unknowingly into a sinister conspiracy...


For fans of THE LIES OF LOCKE LAMORA or fans of attunement spires, bewitched libraries, floating academies, mad dukes, forged art, clever disguises, enchanted swords, eldritch sea monsters, vengeful gods, & much more!

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AlexaLee
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Truly a wonderfully written story

Reviewed at: Chapter 7 - The Other Party Members

This book throws you straight into a wonderful written and well thought out world. The world building is truly masterful and really allows you to get a feel for things.

The introduction to the story and the myths surrounding Ilhen’s deathtraps is very well done and leaves you intrigued to find out more.

The characters are interesting with their own quirks and personalities. Particularly, I love Gianna who’s mix of cheekiness and excitement is a delight.

There were no noticeable spelling or grammar issues here!

Each chapter has good pacing and a good hook to keep you wanting to read more and I absolutely plan to follow this story to the end. The chapters did, however, at times feel a little bit too short? But that might just be due to my enjoyment of the book and desire to keep reading. 

I think that the only thing that this book falls down on is the style. The language and word choice is a little bit archaic which can be a little bit jarring however, once you get used to it (and google a few words as and when you need to) it is good! 

Overall, I think this is a very good book and is perfect for fans of heist, mystery and magic system novels. Keep it up!!

Derin_Edala
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Great if you like heist stories

Reviewed at: Chapter 5 - Complications

Ilhen's Seventh Deathtrap grabs you and pulls you in right away. What you see in the first two chapters is essentially what you get.

The writing style is clear with just enough personality to beinteresting, but neutral enough to avoid being distracting. It flows well and presents information clearly -- which is a good thing, because there is a LOT of information being thrown at you at once. If I had one minor nitpick on this story it's that the information density asks a lot of the reader, and the tendency for solutions to problems to be immediately presented with the information needed to find them (that is, no information is given in advance so the audience isn't given a chance to find their own footing and speculate on solutions) axes engagement a little, but it also contributes to the story's chaotic and fast-paced atmospher and general fun tone. As of this review, only the start of the story is up, so I imagine there'll be more advance information and foreshadowing when we get to the important mysteries.

Grammar is grammar. Perfectly standard and readable, no glaring errors.

The story itself is interesting enough. Who doesn't love a good fantasy heist with financial insolvency and a mentor's execution on the line? We get right into setting up the plot here with no messing around; five chapters in and we've established the characters' skill sets with a mini-adventure, given them a mission, and set up stakes.Efficient use of page space and strong, standard structure.

The characters are where this piece really shines. They have so much personality and I love them. I'm not generally a fan of this kind of fantasy but the characters made me eager to jump into every chapter and made the whole thing a joy to read. Even if this kind of fantasy world isn't your cup of tea, you should give this story a go and see if the characters hook you regardless.