12 Miles Below

12 Miles Below

by Mark Arrows

Warning This fiction contains:
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The world is in ruins. 

Extreme sub-zero temperatures suffocate the surface, making even simple survival an ordeal. Frozen derelicts of bygone eras span across massive ice wastes. And the elite few hoard any technology rediscovered within.

The only escape from the deadly climate is beneath the surface. But it’s another disaster underground. Monstrous machines lurk in the depths. Unhinged demigods war against them, dying over and over, treating it all like a game. The land itself shifts over time, more contraption than rock. And an ominous prophecy states that the key to everything waits at the last level - but nobody’s ever reached that far. 

When an expedition into the far uncharted north goes terribly wrong,  Keith Winterscar and his father get trapped together in a desperate fight for survival. Stumbling upon an ancient power struggle of titanic scale; the two will need to set their differences aside while they struggle against sinister gods, deadly legends, and the grand secrets of the realm that lies below.

Author's note: Updating Monday and Thursdays.

This is a long planned out fic. If you're looking for a power fantasy where the MC gets everything right all the time, this ain't it. Fights get hairy, people get greedy. Bad descisions happen on incomplete information - and I don't write fake-failures where those mistakes don't matter. When the whammy moments come, they'll be earned. 

[Dungeon-lite and gamelit-lite, though both start being relevant much later.]

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Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Only A Nightmare ago
Chapter 2 - Prelude To Violence ago
Chapter 3 - You Should Have Left it Closed, Dumbass ago
Chapter 4 - Father ago
Chapter 5 - A knife to a dream ago
Chapter 6 - The Deathless ago
Chapter 7 - A Monument to the Gods ago
Chapter 8 - The Tomb of the Stars ago
Chapter 9 - Never challenge a Winterscar ago
Chapter 10 - つや ago
Chapter 11 - The First Mile Below ago
Chapter 12 - You Don't Belong Here ago
Chapter 13 - A Test of Might and Mite ago
Chapter 14 - The Face of Death ago
Chapter 15 - Fight Like You Live ago
Chapter 16 - Pyrrhic Victory ago
Chapter 17 - The Way Home ago
Chapter 18 - A Harsh Lesson To Learn ago
Chapter 19 - Maw Of The Drake ago
Chapter 20 - They Can Talk? ago
Chapter 21 - The Meadow Underground ago
Chapter 22 - The Goat ago
Chapter 23 - Things of Metal And Pride ago
Chapter 24 - Gift Of The Sun ago
Chapter 25 - Journey ago
Chapter 26 - Root administrator ago
Chapter 27 - Predictive Modeling ago
Chapter 28 - Reunion ago
Chapter 29 - The friends we'd made along the way ago
Chapter 30 - No plan survives contact with the enemy ago
Chapter 31 - Redemption ago
Chapter 32 - Three's a crowd ago
Chapter 33 - Nothing Personal ago
Chapter 34 - Crucible ago
Chapter 35 - Son ago
Chapter 36 - Darkest before dawn ago
Chapter 37 - Back into the frying pan ago
Chapter 38 - Too shallow a grave ago
Chapter 39 - The Supernatural Tag ago
Chapter 40 - The mission we came for ago
Chapter 41 - The secret left behind ago

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Really interesting premise so far, I am extremely excited to see where this goes.

The first 12 chapters hint at a very rich world under everything, which to me usually means the author put some serious thought into worldbuilding and its consistency.

If the rest of the story contains the same quality as these first chapters, it will be an epic tale indeed!


It's Dune, but on ice! (spoiler free)

Reviewed at: Chapter 12 - You Don't Belong Here

I wanted to wait until he had a few more chapters up to write an advanced review, but after the content we've been given thus far, I don't doubt Mark Arrows' ability to deliver consistent quality going forwards. So here goes nothing!

Overall - I can't fault it. 12 Miles Below is a great fic to lose yourself in if you love sci-fi, lost tech, and mystery. It goes down well and has a great cast of characters.

Worth noting that Mark Arrows isn't afraid of testing his characters, making them fail, and having them make morally questionable decisions. If you like stories with faultless or overpowered protagonists, this ride ain't for you.

Setting - The setting is what stands out the most for me. Arrows has a knack for sprinkling in just enough information about the icy wastelands to keep us wanting more while holding enough back to cultivate a genuine sense of mystery about what's out there. Reading 12 Miles Below has me as excited to discover the secrets of the ice, the technology above and below it, and the surface dwellers as I was to learn more about the worms, fremen, and spice of Arrakis.

My favourite aspect of the setting is how the characters worship the misunderstood and forgotten tech and almost treat them and their users as gods and kings. Just read the chapter 'The Deathless' and you'll get what I mean. It's a believable piece of world-building that really pulls you into the story world.

Characters - The central family unit of Kieth, Kidra, and their father play off each other really well. Kieth is the idealist, their father is the pragmatist, and Kidra is somewhere in the middle (the glue that holds them together). They all have something to learn from each other (Kieth and his father above all) and thus far, the plot doesn't pull its punches in forcing them to confront their differences. It'll be a long and painful road, but the potential for character growth is huge.

Antagonists - This far, (at chapter 12) we've not delved too deeply into the 'traditional' antagonists. We've met Ankah, a proud, competitive woman from a different family who doesn't like Kidra or the Winterscar family. I'm sure she'll play a larger role in the future, but until then, Kieth's father serves as the primary 'antagonistic' force. Kieth's disagreements with his father are interesting enough to keep you engaged, and similar to Dune, the environment is an antagonist in its own right. I've been too busy paying attention to the world-building and the in-family conflict to notice a lack of 'traditional' antagonists/ villains.

Plot - We're in the first arc, so the plot hasn't exploded yet. However, the signs of an imminent eruption are there! The plot revolves around Kieth and his desire to understand forgotten tech so he can use it for the good of mankind. Of course, this goal is something his father disproves of because pursuing it would put Kieth in a different social caste (a big no-no in his father's worldview). As of chapter 12, Kieth's already made his fair share of mistakes and failures in his quest to achieve his goal, and it's already negatively impacted his family. The conflict is building and promises to lead to a fantastic finale.

Writing - It's clean and concise, which works well against the icy, barren, sci-fi backdrop. You won't find superfluous words and phrases here, and the grammar/ punctuation errors are minimal and don't detract from the story.

Clockwork Orange

Above average writing, which is pretty impressive considering the short upload schedule. Story feels a little like Dune, or Mortal Engines, and i mean that in the best way. Excited to see how the Dungeon and Gamelit tags effect the story.

Isn't anything TOO crazy yet but has a lot of potential depending on where the story goes from here.

First off, I give points for the setting. While dystopias are a dime a dozen, I like the idea of great houses and I have always been fascinated by stories set in frozen tundras. The blend of sci-fi with touches of the occult is a personal favorite of mine. Also, the hints of a civilization in the past which very much pertains to our time is an extremely nice touch. In short, if you like Dune, Wheel of Time, or The Shannara Chronicles, this one is for you.
The style is perfectly suited to the setting and the lack of flowery prose makes sense. The sentence structure is up to the mark, so is the flow. I don't recall any choppy portions. My only gripe is with the ubiquity of contractions. While contractions are fine in the case of dialogues, I could have used a little less of them in the narration. Speaking of the narration, despite it being in the first person, I noticed at least one instance where the narrator seemed to be in someone else's head. 
While I am yet to get into the meat of the story, I can already tell it is going to be tense and exciting. The world appears unrelenting and dangerous and I am already enraptured. I cannot wait to see what happens as the plot progresses. 
It begins with a scavenging mission that goes awry. Cut to an intense and well-written action sequence, great worldbuilding, some tension-filled banter, and it all makes for a hell of an opening.
Now, it is clear that the author has a good grasp of grammar. And for the most part, it is on point. That is why I was surprised to find several minor errors. 
For example, the lack of hyphens connecting single adjectives and compound numbers like five-inch, twenty-five, etc; the use of hyphens in interrupted dialogues rather than em dashes as suggested by the CMS; and the usage of "then" instead of "than". There was also an instance where the narration shifted from the past tense to the present tense and then back to the past tense, which violates one of the fundamental rules of narrative prose. However, these are things that can be fixed by a little bit of proofreading. And none of these are jarring enough to detract from the story.
Now, this where the book really stands out. Believe me when I say this is one of the few instances where I started to care about the characters so early into the book. The author has clearly worked hard to make the characters into actual people and not just archetypes. 
The protagonist Keith is likable and relatable. In a world that reveres martial prowess, he is a scholar. Although born of a noble line, it is clear he has not had an easy life. And the tension between him and his father is one of the highlights.
Then there is his sister Kidra. And it is not a stretch to say she is the standout. Despite being favored by her father, she is kind and caring towards her brother. At the same time, she is a plucky badass, and the sibling banter between her and her brother is the best part of the book. 
The character of the Father is also no slouch. I can tell that he has a chip on his shoulder and a story to tell. It is a testament to the author's ability to write great characters that I am already curious to learn about his history, particularly with his children. 
Of the myriad other supporting characters, the ones I have to mention are the "rivals". Their introduction instantly elevated the narrative and despite their obvious antagonism towards Keith and Kidra, I was immediately taken by Ankah, Calem, and Locke. I am curious to learn more about them. Another testament to the author's ability to forge great characters.
 In conclusion, if you are into sci-fi, post-apocalyptic, or just adventure fiction in general, you must read this book. I most certainly will continue to do so.

Fascinating future world doin what scifi does best

Reviewed at: Chapter 7 - A Monument to the Gods

Anyone looking for a post-apocalyptic future story should absolutely give this one a go. It's got that perfect mix of calm and tension for a group of people trying to survive in a world that previous generations have made inhospitable to them.

The writing is clear and engaging, with enough personality that we have a clear idea of what kind of a person the narrator is, but not so much as to be distracting. I found myself sympathetic to his goals and actions even when he's being an idiot, and that's hard to do. If you're going to give it a go, read to the second chapter at least -- the first is kind of fluffy and unnecessary, but the second WILL hook you.

Grammar is perfectly serviceable. Not much to say about it. If there are egregious grammar or spelling errors, I didn't notice them. It reads perfectly well.

The story itself is a bit slow, but only because it's putting all its energy into developing the world and characters. As of chapter 7 (the latest chapter when I'm posting this), we don't know what the main plot of the story is yet, but boy do we have a lot of fascinating information about the characters, their world, and their politics. So far it's quite "slice of life but post-apocalyptic" and I LOVE that. The details of the scavenging priorities of this society, built on what their society is like and what tech they do and don't have access to, are particularly intriguing -- it's a very well-thought-out world. (I also love when characters are trying to conceive of our time based on the fragments they have left. There's this whole part there they find a painted interior wall at a scavenging site and are baffled by how much of a waste of paint it is and start speculating on where the owners could've gotten so much paint and why they'd wasted it on a wall, it's great.)

I am in love with these characters. Keith and Kidra have such little sibling/big sibling energy. These two and their relationship really carry the show and I would die for Kidra. Anyone who has a sibling will understand and love the MC and his sister immediately.


Compelling characters and worldbuilding

Reviewed at: Chapter 1 - Only A Nightmare

after beta-reading all 10 chapters thus far, i can confidently say that this is one of the best post-apocalyptic novels i've read. the characters really shine - the cast is not huge, but between the three winterscars and small handful of secondary characters, i find them all delightfully intriguing and easy to invest myself in. in addition, the world is fantastically thought out. i love the hints that something is hidden in the ruins and out on the ice, and i'm painfully anticipating the moment that everything is revealed. 

i can't recommend this story enough and i'm excited to see how the plot plays out. consider me a fan. :)


Very interesting cast and story.

Reviewed at: Chapter 11 - The First Mile Below

Getting a first glimpse into the world of Keith and the Winterscars has been very interesting and exciting, and as such here is a slight review into the story so far.

The story and by extension author, have a very subtle touch for blending hint's of mystery in to the answers of questions that each chapter asks its reader to consider, always a good hint to a good story.

For the world building itself, it also gives a very realistic view towards the reasoning of cause and effect that the actions of the characters have on the greater environment around them, which is quite interesting to see in a story like this that has even the most simple of gestures causing unique situations overall.

As far as grammar goes for those interested the story is so fluently written that you should have no issue being able to dig into it with fear of misconstrued or odd ended sentences to make you guess as to what the scene is about.

Add all of these things to a cast of characters that you continue to want to learn about as the story continues and this frost bitten adventure has everything to keep you entertained until the next chapter is shared.



It's too early for an advanced review. But 24 chapters in I could not be more happy that I found this work. Describing exactly what itch it scratches is hard for me but scratch it does! Post apocalyptic setting that still offers character growth and exposition that strongly resonates with the cultural problems of the modern day. I don't really know where this story is going for it's future, but I feel like our world's modern day almost makes it's beginning portion more prediction than fiction, and that makes all the fantastical elements hit harder. 


Like just look at the cover, it looks like its commisioned and its been out for what, 1 month? I can tell the author has everything well planned cuz he said so, already planning 40+ chapters ahead this is legitametely a bussin work. Read it you won't regret even if you gotta wait for it to finish up.

Chaos' Crow Kanigami

Having read the first 10 chapters I must say I really enjoyed discovering the universe that our main character and his crew live in: a frozen wasteland with some remnants of futuristic tech they can use but don't really understand. 

The story leaves quite a few mysteries for the reader to wonder about, which no doubt our MC will ask for us as he's curious to the point he gets burnt (frozen?) for it. The surrounding cast seemed diverse and complex enough, especially the family unit. I'm eager to see what kind of other characters we'll encounter as various... surprising professions were mentioned. The setting pushes for a lot of tensions and survival through banditry so it's probably going to be a harsh story. 

The style is good and flows well though it's a bit curt at times. The cold must be so freezing that the teeth clatter when telling the story I suppose! It makes the events quite riveting as the pace can get pretty fast. 

The grammar was ok too, a few mistakes but nothing glaring. 

Overall, I would recommend it, it seems to be rat-adjacent too with a MC who tries to exploit the system (available tech) and characters with well-defined goals.