Ancients [An Epic Litrpg]

Ancients [An Epic Litrpg]

by Lin Lee

After failing his soul awakening, Chen's terrible fate appeared to have changed for the better when he became a chosen. But as the mortal affiliate of a deity, he was thrown into the chaotic, never-ending, battles of the immortals. And in this world, dead souls tell no tale.

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Ahyuuga586
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I was in deep the moment I finished the 1st paragraph. By the end of the chapter my jaw was on the floor replaying the scene like 'wtf just happened?!?!' 🤯

I could picture the entire scene playing in my head, it flowed so well I forgot I was reading. Can't wait to read more, as always, great job!!! 🥳

Bapper
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Strong writing means strong potential

Reviewed at: 9 - The Pit Of Sorrow [V]

This is a meticulously crafted story. That much is clear from the second you look at it. I knew from the moment I started reading that this author was telling a story they really wanted to tell. First off:

Style: This story is dripping with floral language and vivid scening. As a wannabe writer myself, I was really impressed how gorgeous this story was. The reading process was effortless and extremely pleasureable. I found that a lot of care was put into this story in regards to it's style.

Story: This is where I offer my one caveat for this recommendation. The story is still young. The first act is just now getting going as far as I read, but I see the underpinnings of a really solid and enjoyable Hero's Journey. I'm giving 5 stars under the assumptions that the consistent quality I've seen will translate to an equally solid first story arc.

Grammar: As a grammar nerd, I found that there were very few errors if at all. I can't say for sure that there are no issues, but that none of them stuck out and interfered with the flow of the story and my enjoyment of it (and isn't that all you can really ask for?)

Characters: Now again, I'm circling back to the fact that this is a very young story. That being said, Chen is a really solid protagonist in terms of foundations for the future. There really isn't anything more to say other than I'm eagerly waiting for new chapters as the author is uploading super fast right now.

VMJaskiernia
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A fantastic new well-written xianxia! There are a lot of them on this site, but this one ranks very high. Grammar and story are good, this is not a rush job. A lot of respect for the tropes we all love go into it.

I like the main character and the world that's being set up. The story's still new I can't wait to read more of it.

AlexaLee
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I'm new to this genre but I truly enjoyed this! Lin skilfully crafted a believable world with characters I immediately cared for.

Story

Off to a great start, the pacing was good, the plot was interesting, I'm truly excited to read more. The world that Lin has created is very good. I’m interested in different clans as well as the different Goddesses! Enough detail was given throughout that I felt I understood the world whilst still craving more details.

Style

Again, I think this was good! Some sentences were a little bit too choppy and some more variation in word choice would be great but that can easily be fixed.

Grammar and spelling

A few spelling mistakes throughout as well as some unnecessary commas but overall, fine. Nothing that some light proof-reading wouldn't fix. 

Characters

Lin is extremely skilled at creating characters that the reader immediately cares for. From the first line, I cared about Daiyu and her family and this continued throughout. They're realistic, interesting and believable!

Overall, the story was well written and the world well crafted. There were a few mistakes but this absolutely did not detract from what was otherwise a fantastic story! I’m excited to see where it goes, keep it up!

VelkanBornstellar
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Plagued by the power of a divine artifact, Chen failed his life-defining awakening. For many years after that, he lived as an outcast, a cursed soul among his own people. His terrible fate appeared to have changed for the better when he became a chosen of their patron goddess. But as the mortal affiliate of a deity, Chen was thrown into the chaotic, never-ending, battles of the immortals. And in this world, dead souls tell no tale.

Style: The writer style is clear and concise, with an attempt to place the reader directly within the story. There is and underlying cultivation theme with some litrpg structure within. MC starts underpowered, but later funds his Strenght in time.

 

Grammer: No obvious grammatical error, good application of words to convey meaning. Story is written in the third person.

Story: The story is set on a fantasy world, where the people are pawns in a battle between competing gods and goddesses. Our MC is orphaned at a young age in this conflict and later discovers that he is an important tool in the hands of these gods, putting him in constant contention with them.

Character: MC starts out as underpowered, but optimistic, even at a young. There is still room for growth where the MC is concerned and I have high expectations of the story in general. With a name like 'Ancients," who wouldn't.

Ellen Taylor
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Apparently this is a xianxia, which I have only ever heard of when I came upon this site. As someone who is a newbie to this specific genre, I had fun. It was a very enjoyable story. I was hooked from the beginning, and had no problems with hitting the next chapter button. 

The story was engaging. I found myself interested in the characters. Usually when stories have a prologue, it's a super interesting prologue and then chapters and chapters of boring-ness. This book had a wonderful prologue, and it kept getting interesting! 

With the style, there were times when I wanted the author to slow down just a bit to let us see Chen while he was growing up, but I can also appreciate the need to keep the momentum going after such an action packed prologue. The chapters were short without being too short, if that makes sense. There was enough in the chapters that painted a wonderful picture of the world and the situation of the character, but not long enough that it felt daunting to get through. It was a nice balance.

With grammar, I figure five stars is a perfect, no grammar mistakes at all. I found a few, but they were minor enough that it didn't pull me out of the story at all.

Chen is a great, sympathetic character that seems down on his luck. Great for an underdog story, if that is where this book is headed. I feel a lot of sympathy for him, and quickly gained that sympathy early on in the book.

Overall a great read! 

 

Moonweave
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The story opens with a fast-paced action scene that seems almost to freeze time to give glimpses into the hearts of the characters between each intense fight. This sequence alone convinced me that the story would be worth reading and the author worth following.

Style: There is a very impressive blend of scene and plot development with action and events. In some places it does feel as if the explanation comes after, and not all transitions are smooth, but it is clear that the author knows how to put a scene to words.

Grammar: There are some small errors, but nothing to hinder comprehension.

Character: This is quite early in the story, so I may return later with a different opinion. The characters in the opening scene felt so real that some of the characters in the following scenes seemed pale and flat by comparison. The obvious villains were obviously villainous with no reasons for being so, and other characters were glossed over. Although it could (rightly) be argued that these characters are not important, I do feel that the author has the skill to do better.

Story: I have never read litrpg or wuxia (although I have watched some dramas), so I am not familiar with the tropes and I came into reading this with no expectations. The author has created a rich world, and I can feel that there is intentionality in the history and layout of this society. 

 

I look forward to seeing how this story develops ^.^

OntoSomethingGood
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Interesting story, Good execution

Reviewed at: 9 - The Pit Of Sorrow [V]

This is a very interesting story about a young boy called Chen who tries hard to live up to the expectations but fails as fate has something else in store for him. 


Story

Excellent premise, the MC's plight is believable, immediately felt a connection with poor Chen. I like the different clans, and their internal dynamic would be a great potential to explore further.

Style

The style is good. In some places, there is repetition as if the author struggles to find alternate ways to add more description. But overall the narrative is good. Flows nicely, without lingering too much on one part.

Grammar and spelling

Some grammar mistakes, nothing major that can't be fixed with a good edit. Overall, a decent level and it improves as you read on. Some parts could be reconfigured for better impact.

Characters
The MC is utterly believable. The author portrays Chen beautifully, right from the first chapter the character makes an impact. I'm already hooked and will revisit the story to see how Chen has fared.

Overall an interesting read that's executed quite well. Do give it a go.

Aziel
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This story is definitely one of the better ones on this website. As of this review there aren't many chapters available but from what I read it looks like it's going to be a very enjoyable ride if you like Xianxia. I also really like the writing style as each chapter so far flies by at a brisk pace due to not being so long in length. Unfortunately you'll run into a few grammer errors here and there, but honestly it didn't really affect my experience too much. When a story is this solid you kind of forget about them the second after you notice them. Overall this is a thumbs up from me.

ArthurScott
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Ancient Storytelling Written in Modern Style

Reviewed at: 5 - The Pit Of Sorrow [I]

ONE OF THE MANY THINGS that authors tend to go for is the beige interpretation of older, historically fictional circumstances. This particular style of writing is most apt in fantasy and thrillers. And while ANCIENTS possesses many of the characteristics that would be found in this style, it can lead to a stunt in the imagination. Nonetheless, the world that Lin Lee manages to draw together is both gripping and stark, enough to develop one's interest and carry out a long journey with the characters, who, I believe, are the catalysts that make the plot so easy to fall into. 

 

With this thought in mind—or these thoughts, more so—there are issues I've encountered that led to my disinterest down the line, most of which die down to personal preferences that are brought about inconsistencies with the style.  

 

STYLE - 4/5

 

Like many reviews, I'd like to start with my lowest score, not because I disliked it—I actually found it relatively simple to follow most of the time—but because it loses its touch as the story proceeds. And to many, this may be seen as a good thing—a sign that the author is trying new things with each curve-point in the plot. And while it can be good, I found it to be not as strong as it could have been. It begins—and pretty much proceeds with—a strong beige writing style, with some blend of exposition, and occasionally strung with a sharp depiction of the characters' thoughts. This is good. I like this. But further down the line, the story feels like it's pushing itself with a movie camera, and makes me think This is very to-the-point. What about their feelings? How does the action delve into their past? Was the last chapter not important, after all? Likewise, the way in which Lee depicts scenes can become messy because of the lack of exposition. And, although it has its perks in being able to convey actions, it can lead to a lack of immersion and a tiring read. Despite this, the style is great for catching one's attention quickly, especially in the opening chapters, leading on up to the more vital scenes. Coupled with the nice beginning pace, as I've said, it's easy to fall into. Not as easy to stay in, however. For me, at least. One of the areas that went well with the style is the characters. 

 

CHARACTERS - 5/5

 

I haven't much to say except for the fact that I thoroughly enjoyed the characters. Chen was introduced quite nicely, a little back-telling that led to great things—the way I like my characters introduced. Lee doesn't go overboard with telling the readers about him, which I love; it opens up an air of mystery for which to explore. And considering the circumstances of the plot—war, striving for peace, surviving in a fantastical world drawn into chaos—it was very interesting indeed to see how he dealt with said elements. His relationship with his father felt a bit short-winded, as if just a breeze that blows by, but it still had an impact, enough to make me turn the pages and try to figure out what was going to happen next. I'd like to think that Chen is afraid of the world but still keeps persevering. And if that is the case, would it matter if his father was brought into it all? That's a question I thought about when reading—that if Chen is brave, why doesn't he show it a lot more? Maybe this delves into the idea that he is multi-faceted, and I love that. It reminds me of Shakespeare's Prince Hamlet—full of questions that people long to be answered. 

 

GRAMMAR - 5/5

 

No problems with the grammar really. The only thing I could point out is the way Lee structures the dialogue. The tags are separated from the dialogue itself, which I found a little bothersome, though it wasn't enough to dissuade me from carrying on. It was just something I had to live with. Other than that, the prose reads smoothly and in a cohesive manner; no jarring sentences, clean and responsible. I can tell Lee edited it—or that someone else has, at least. 

 

STORY - 4.5/5

 

While I enjoyed Chen's development in the story, I found the plot a little cliche. I've read multiple stories and reviewed them on my wall, a lot of which possess an eerily similar story to this one; there seems to be an obsession with LitRPGs on Royal Road so it's not entirely surprising. But it didn't stand out to me as much as I hoped it would. The prologue especially felt this way. Apart from that, it develops quite well, and at a pace that is perfect for the genre. I hate prose that is either too slow or too fast; but if I had to choose it would be too slow, because at least then we would have something to imagine and think about. 

 

OVERALL - 4.5/5

 

While ANCIENTS is a story that's naturally a hit or miss to readers—I'd like to think so based upon my experience, it has many tropes that are characteristic of a good story. Had I read more then maybe I would get to see the full extent of which. I felt the prose was too simple later on, a bit inconsistent, and bothersome. But that's just my opinion. I particularly enjoyed the characters—the interactions felt natural and easy to believe. And that's something Lee gets right: how people react. If the prose let go of its shackles and breathed freely with all sorts of colours, exploding with a refreshing sense of wonderment, then I'd likely have enjoyed them more. But until then—if it ever changes (and if it doesn't, that's fine, too)—I highly recommend any reader give this a try, regardless of preferred genres. It might just be worth your time.