After his parents died, Alex Roth had a plan: become a wizard. Through hard work, he was accepted into the world’s greatest university of wizardry—but fate had another plan.
On his eighteenth, he is marked as one of his kingdom’s five Heroes, chosen to fight the land’s great enemy. But his brand is 'The Fool', worst of the marks.
Rather than die or serve the other Heroes like Fools in the past, he packs up his little sister, his childhood friend and her cerberus, then flees for the university in hope of refuge, magic and to unravel the truth about his land’s evil.
There’s one small problem: The Mark tries to ruin magic while enhancing skills outside of divinity, combat and spellcraft.…
…that is, unless he can learn to exploit the hell out of it.
This the first time I am writing a web novel type story, and I hope you like it. I like progression stories and I've always wanted to try and write one like a few of the web novels that inspired me.
There are currently 20 advanced chapters on my patreon as a thank you to patrons.
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Chapters will be roughly 2000-2500 words.
[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]
Rating: This story is kind of like a PG-13 movie. There'll be gore and some swearing but not much beyond that. If that changes, I'll warn you.
Tone: Tone will be a mix of some action-adventure with excitement, comedy, slice of life elements and mystery. I won't be going too dark with this story. There will be mentions of war, some death, grief and violence.
MC: MC is analytical/rational with emotions. He is mostly in control of those emotions. MC will progress in power, eventually becoming very strong. When that happens, I'll add the Strong Lead tag.
Fights: Fights will be detailed.
Stuff this story won't have:
- Extreme grimdark content
- Murderhobo plots
- Edgy, anti-hero MC
- Pacifist MC
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Seems interesting but I personally don't like it.
If there if something that I hate in stories is when someone else takes credit for something that the MC did. In some xianxias I understand that sometimes it's better to hide you power, but here?? The MC is just going all over the place escaping and everyone else is getting credit for what he does (Because obviously The Fool can't do anything).
And if we follow the idea that the Fool is useless in the mind of everyone then the story will probably continue like that until the end of the story or not even that.
So yeah, give it a try and see if you like it but if you are like me and likes to see the prowess of the MC recognized then right now this isn't for you...
First of all, I'm really chosy when it comes to selecting new novel to follow. It gets worse when I'm starting to get used to RR's most common troupes: dungeon cores, LitRPGs with subsystem, dungeon crawling, apocalypse (which most definitely has zombies... or more dungeons), half-assed isekai meeting this god/goddess; to mention a few.
This novel has dungeons, yes. But so far, no overboard information on it. Though it's implied that the MC will be going to a dungeon next, I will trust the author to bring difficulties and not just "a slime, kaboom! level up!" kind of overused plotting. (Also, Im biased against slime. Fite me!)
Great powering concept as variation from the classic "hero parties" with an additional classification of "The Fool". Something that put intrigues--at least to me--as a reader to explore how the MC can cope with it. Great use of word choices and so far, the author delivers fluid characterisation without punishing the side characters' intelligence
WARNING: MINOR SPOILERS (to chapter 9)
As I said in the title there are quite a few logical inconsistencies that break me out of the immersion:
1. It's clear the author doesn't know how to make the main love interest act. She just decides to go with the main character on a journey for little reason (which okay makes some sense because we don't know their previous relations too well) but then her parents are totally for it and let her go with the mc even though a second ago the father was all mad at him for being in the same room with her alone and they are also leaving. Why couldn't they just leave together? She also has a pet Cerebus who is only there to make her special.
2. Something I find weird is that the mc was able to do magic on the first try even though it was said that Fools cannot do magic. Yes I know he is the mc and that it is possible but still at least make him work for it and not just do it perfectly on the first try, it just makes him feel like he is a Mary Sue which is not what you want.
Now some positives:
1. The grammar is very good for this site so no worries on that front.
2. The plot seems okay even though the specifics make little sense.
Ideas that I think could go good with the story:
1. I had the idea that maybe he could learn social things very quickly with the mark. This would be very cool to see but I don't think it is going to happen because the mc needs to be a bit naive in these types of stories. The main point is anything that is not magic, fighting, or healing can be learned super quickly so imagine being very good at walking, breathing, playing cards, social activities, and things like that. I feel like he could make himself into a noble, he could also seduce a lot of people if he learned how.
If the Fool's mark is not used to its full potential I will be very dissapointed.
Initially I rated it 5 stars, but recent chapters have been really dragging. Incredible beginning, great characters, exciting world, great magic system that is creative and believable and immersive and all that, but pacing has slowed considerably. Always a conflict between tight pacing and releasing a bunch of chapters all the time to keep your readers and p a t r o n s happy.
No really, why did the author decide that having a literal child tag along with our MC is a good thing for the story. From what I read so far she is supposed to be the adorable little mascot for our MC, but while other stories get some sort of a mythical creature like fae, dragons, cats or whatever our MC gets a sniveling child. She is basically an equivalent to a useless sidekick from anime who stands around while MC fights, and comments on the fight. But she doesnt even do that. She cries and sometimes say something smart. I honestly don't understand why she is in the story at all apart from being some kind of emotional baggage. It gets worse later on since she also gets a PTSD at some point.
Also, I am not sure if you have noticed but out MCs partner has a 'deathstalker face' and 'the great grandfather's sword'.
It's really nice that the authour decided to describe MCs partner very simply, no need for things like facial expression, emotion, appearance or any other silly things if you can just slap a deathstalker face every other chapter so readers with their smoothbrains can finally imagine her portrait. Truly a visionary.
On the positive side if you survive the first 30 chapters or so it becomes quite enjoyable to read. If I was the author I would rewrite those because compared to the rest of the novel they are barely readable.
Bumping it to 4 stars as of now.
MC is set upon a path not of his choosing, but doesn't give up just like that. He's got all these plans and he'll be damned if he's gonna let a mishap like this stop him. I loved the story so far, and let out a quiet "noooooo..." when i found i'd caught up. Highly reccomended for sure
This is essentially a slice of life magic academy, which is a lot less interesting than the original premise of Marks and Heroes. I hoped that the Heroes or Church would chase after the MC and make the story faster paced...but MC spends all his time making friends and training. It would have been great for excitement and character development, but it feels like the author is too cautious and wants to make the MC OP first.
I'm sure a lot of people enjoy it nevertheless, but personally it feels like a let down - too boring for my taste.
It may be a bit too early to properly review this novel, having only covered around 50 chapters by now. I might revise it later.
Overall this is a novel I am invested in now and to which I look forward to seeing each new release. The story has a good premise and I would really want to see where it goes.
The first arc ( traveler) was exciting and has been the best so far. The current arc (growth/academy) unfortunately has not been that great so far and has started to lag a bit. I am following two novels which are coincidentally going through an academy arc and unfortunately both are not shining.
I believe the problem for this particular arc is that there is no opposition and hence no tension in the current part. Also the author is struggling with the side characters and seemingly not sure what to do with them.
I sincerely hope that the author has a good plan at hand and that the story would go on to a good finish.
My recommendation is that this is a good story to pick up and read.
Quick warning, I will not be restraining myself from spoiling a few bits. You have been warned.
I found this story a few hours ago and have already finished everything currently posted. The chapters are not particularly short but they fly by along with the hands of the clock.
The story starts off introducing the MC. He is a rational guy, and is regularly does stuff that makes sense. Not once through the 20 chapters have I regarded his actions as stupid. Here is the kicker: other characters are also not morons. important organisations are not generically stupid.
So, we find out that he lives on an island kingdom where every 100 years 5 people are blessed by their parton god to defeat the monsters of some evil entity that seeks to kill people. It is presented in a slightly more complicated manner, but that is the gist of it. One of the people that is blessed is considered to be worthless as a hero. The Fool. The Fool's blessing lets them learn fast. But it makes anything that the other heroes much, much harder. To the point that it is considered impossible. As the runt of the heroic litter, the Fool also has a gigantic mortality rate (1/2), and will always be viewed as inferior to the other heroes.
Our MC plans to go off the island to the best mage college, while escaping from the more dangerous situation the island kingdom is about to be put in. The night before leaving, he recieves the mark of the Fool. He is scared. The average Fool dies on the heroic mission. The average Fool never gets the oportunity to do magic. He does not want the life of a Fool. He wants the life of a wizard. Something he has been preparing for years for, relentlessly. So he still goes to learn magic.
On the way there, they are attacked by some monster. They fend it off, with difficulty, when here comes one of the other heroes. The Chosen One (is what it sounds really) has been evading the priests by going to town on the local monster populace, killing a lot of the bad guy's monsters (those come from stereotypical fantasy dungeons). He commends the MC for his magical ability and talks about how the only hero not yet found is the Fool. The MC fishes for information and gets a big fat fish: There is some circle set up around the island by priests that would detect heroes if they cross it. I will put a stop to the storytelling because I am not going to summarize everything the author has written.
The point I was trying to make before I devolved into the storytelling was that characters are not idiots. None of them are. He reminds himself many, many times to think whenever he panics or is about to do something that is plain stupid. He is not a fool. Not the dictionary definition, in any case. The girl who joins him wishes to leave and to adventure, see the world. Why not go with him while at it, since they are childhood friends? They probably also have a crush on each other but that is just headcannon. They are just on the same wavelength. His sister wants to be with her brother. After becoming orphans, her wanting to stay with the family she has left makes sense. She is also more mature than her young age would suggest, most likely due to traumatic experiences. She has been a voice of reason, pointing out stuff that the other two missed or simply did not think of. Sadly, she has not gotten much screentime yet, mostly due to the other two being protective of her. We get to see more of her once they are out of immediate mortal danger, and I expect the trend to continue.
Something that keeps me away from many stories that I would have otherwise liked is grammar. If nothing else spotty grammar gives me an uncratchable itch. Very annoying, is what I am trying to convey. This is a problem I have not encountered in this story. There are no grating problems in this regard, and if there were minor occurences, then I was too absorbed by the story to notice. I am so glad that this is the case, because it really is a make or break point in my opinion. A great story can't have shit grammar. The wonder of a story would be shrouded by the distracted grammar. Let me say it again; no issue sticks out to someone that really cares about that stuff. You will not be distracted by such problems
I have taken enough of your time. Enjoy the book.
This story is fun to read! The characters are well written and well rounded, and the adventure (short as it is for now) is genuinely gripping! If you think a Fool must be an unwitting companion and cause of chaos, then prepare to be proven wrong. Take a spin with the smartest, least chaotic, and most likely to succeed Fool you will ever read!