Aura of Magic

by DuskArcanist

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

Aurora Nightshade spent her whole life living as a countryside bumpkin, living just to get by. Despite the hardships brought onto her by the Song clan, the tyrannical people that levy insufferable taxes onto her and the villagers, she was content enough with life.

This all changed one day, when an amulet fell from the sky like a meteor, a werewolf became her companion and the world of magic opened up to her. The world of spirits and gods revealed to her that fateful night.

If you are into Wuxia and Cultivation themes, then don't miss this novel. It touches on some interesting mythology as well, and a lot of magic based on Epic Fantasy.

A book that any WMW fan should read!

Keep in mind this is a first draft! Developmental editing for the book will be underway at the end of this month.

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JHawk55
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The story's start is fine, but the narrative felt disjointed at points and the MC's decisions/characteristics did not fit together. In the first few chapters we find out that she is kind and smart. The kindness stays consistent, seen when she helps out a complete stranger and takes them to her home, but the smarts? Why does she antagonize a member of this tyrannical clan, and then follow that stranger, who she's barely known for a day, towards said clan's territory with the intent of stealing something from them. Mind you, that stranger has publicly announced, in Aurora's presence, that they want to steal that stuff. 

Inconsistencies aside, the story is pretty good. Grammar is pretty good but not perfect, flow is decent but stilted at time, and characters seem like they have a good base for future development. 

I don't intend to continue with this stoyy because I keep questioning what I'm reading, but it is decent and I recommend that you form your own opinions on it. 

TakkieSenpai
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It's an interesting story, where it doesn't feel like the MC gets gifted incredible, overpowered strength solely because it's the main character. The characters are believable, and it doesn't have a strong black/white justice that I see in these types of stories where the MC is perfect and powerful while the bad guys are vile and hateful. The bad guys steal things because they have the power and want things, i.e., the supplies. When they finally get their way, they leave the victim be without being unnecessarily cruel. I'm not that far into the story yet, but it does give me hope that antagonists could have redeemable qualities or sympathetic goals.

Very few grammar mistakes, mostly issue with missing commas, but it's RR. This can be easily edited out, and honestly, the only reason I noticed them was cause I was actively looking for them. It reads smoothly regardless.

One thing I also appreciate is the balance in descriptiveness. The story gives you just enough to conjure up an image in your head without strong-arming you into the visuals the author has in their mind. I appreciate being able to picture a scene without having it take up most of the story.

Brenner Miles
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From the looks of it, Aurora, our MC, lives in a typical village with clan that racketeers its simple citizens for protection. Aurora lives a slow life until she comes across a newcomer, Irelia, bullied by the clan. Once they get acquainted, some serious adventures begin.  

Aura of Magic is written in a not overly wordy way, where you get just enough details to imagine the lush world and don’t get bogged down by endless intricacies. Thus, it’s easy to read. There’s lots of dialogue and it surely fits the characters: the daring MC with multiple siblings and a pie-cooking mother, the naïve newcomer with an aura of mystery around her and the not-so-nice Song clan members. I did notice some weird word choices in the dialogue.  

The beginning of the story is a bit too generic for my liking, but it gets very interesting very quickly. The MC isn’t without her faults and does get the tinniest bit of power exactly at the point where everything starts to change. I adored the amulet element and everything about it. 

Grammar-wise, there are pretty much no issues that would be blasphemous on RR. 

The beginning of Aura of Magic has me interested for what’s to come next!  

MaskedFather
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Looks good so far. Enjoying the read, especially the dynamic of the main character and the spirit of the amulet. Also don't think the story is being rushed which is also nice, it's giving us time and lots of foreshadowing and opening plot points which I can see being resolved in the future.

 

NoReadingNoLife
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I am very interested in where this will go! Though I was confused by the description ( I thought she would be transported to another world ) as soon as I started on the second chapter I was not confused anymore. I will definitely be staying with this book as it develops! My only question is if this is a pre-written book or if it's still being written.

I hope for the latter.

Ploopie
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Do I even need to say how good this is?

Reviewed at: Chapter 7 - The Target

Well well well. To start off my review, I just want to say that I can tell the author has had experience before. It's well structured and easy to read. The plot flow is really good too, as I feel like I have a good understanding of what's going on so far. It's been very intriguing so far and I'd like to read more. The characters, although make strange decisions sometimes, are relatable enough. I like how the author hasn't made them overpowered.

NutellaSandwichEnthusiast
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Story

This a fantasy world with elements of magic and combat. Like the summary suggests, there are elements of wuxia/cultivation. I will admit that I've never touched a Wuxia in my life. However, from the get-go, the reader is immersed in a fantasy world in which the main character comes into contact with a magical artifact and befriends a werewolf. There is a clan of magicians called the Song that serves as the primary antagonists for the first couple of chapters. In addition, there are lots of fantastical elements such as Spirit Beasts and Arcanum and just draws the reader in.

Grammar

The grammar here is virtually flawless, aside from the few punctuation errors. However, this does not impeded the flow of the story and is completely negligible.

Characters

The main character is well written and well characterized. Seeing her interactions with the other characters, Kwame, Irelia, and Haeheon (I think that's how you spell it) is really fun and entertaining to read. Though, Aurora's speech seems a tad too sophisticated for where she is but that's easily overlooked by the plot. The other characters are entertaining as well with Kwame serving as a witty mentor figure and Irelia being the reliable friend.

Style

The author is a well-balanced writer that has a good command of sentence structure and diction. They also have a good sense of description, never over describing everything nor under describing. The interactions between characters and their inner thoughts are enough to conjure an image in the reader's head. In short, there is no needless or senseless exposition anywhere. The story flows nicely, going from one scene to another. It seamlessly transitions from one situation to another which allows the reader to read the whole thing in one sitting.

All in all, great job author. I look forward to more. Consider this story followed.

 

Simian king
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Story:  This is a fantasy story that follows the tale of Aurora Nightshade in a fantasy world where hardship was dished out to her and the villagers by the Song clan. Then, she met a werewolf and found a magical amulet. Right from the synopsis, the readers are already diving deep into the imaginative world. A beautifully planned fantasy tale. Hard to put down.

Style: The author is using the omniscient third person narration style. He's able to convey the thoughts, expressions and emotiions of the characters in the story to the readers in a beautiful way. The writing style is also more about showing than telling, and the author pays great attention to details. Combining all these with a good fantasy storyline is bringing out the beauty of the novel. Great execution.

The grammar: Excellent use of the grammar. No noticeable errors that could disturb the flow of the story. Good grammar makes a story more pleasant for the readers, and this author is excellent so far. 

The character: They are a beauty to read. Well written and well defined characters by the author.The characters of Aurora and Irelia are very entertaining. The other characters too, are having deserved recognition, especially Kwame. This shows the excellent capacity of the author. 

Great work, author. 

PillowReader
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This story is very interesting and progresses at quite a good pace. The characters are well introduced and the setting isn't force fed to me as the reader. 

So far I'm reviewing after 7 chapters in and already the MC is getting into trouble with her friend and accidentally coming into contact with a magical artifact.

The grammar is great, with me only spotting one spelling mistake and incorrect use of apostrophe. It's heaven and earth compared to my own literary skills. Diction and use of metaphors are also great, but the character's vocabulary can slightly break the immersion of village life. I dunno they might have a sweet school in the village or something.

The only issue I have is how the MC dives into the crazy developments so easily. She has some reservations about her wild new friend, but takes a talking space amulet in her stride. I really feel like there can be room for character development through use of thoughts and internal monologuing here. This is especially when she starts talking to the space wizard trapped inside the necklace.

Overall a very good read if you stick around past the mundane beggining chapters, but sadly on RR the first three normally are the sink or swim ones. I hope that if you're reading this review then you will go on to stick around to follow Aurora and her scallywag of a friend!

VelkanBornstellar
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Aurora Nightshade spent her whole life living as a countryside bumpkin, living just to get by. Despite the hardships brought onto her by the Song clan, the tyrannical people that levy insufferable taxes onto her and the villagers, she was content enough with life.

 

This all changed one day, when an amulet fell from the sky like a meteor, a werewolf became her companion and the world of magic opened up to her. The world of spirits and gods revealed to her that fateful night.

Interesting style,  the main character is a hound girl with little life experience thrusting for adventure. Hound but open minded, she is willing to take in a stranger, bond with a strange amulet and learn magic, and maybe hopefully drive the corrupt song clan out of her home.

No errors in grammer, well written and concise. 

The story has some cultivation elements; where the MC grows stronger over time, and will learn all sorts of esoteric techniques along the way, all the while making new friends and allies. She is young, and thus, is written to wear her heart on her sleeve. Very trusting and kind, it seems her emotions are the very thing that put her at the center of the story, rather than a weakness. I'm curious to see where the writer takes her