A Journey in Darkness

A Journey in Darkness

by Mr. White

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

A Journey in Darkness is the story of a human girl who finds herself displaced far, far away from home, in a new world filled with wonders to discover and perils to overcome in her very own way.

Waking up in a cave in her pajamas will only be the start of her problems.

Will she find a way out? Maybe. Will she get eaten while searching for it? Probably.

Is she going to be quite unhappy with the menu offered? Absolutely.

 


Hello! I’m Mr. White and this is my first story. I hope you will like it!

In this tale you won’t find a powerful main character conquering the new evil world with only the power of his tortured soul. What you will find is a normal person growing and finding her way despite the hardships she encounters in a world that is not so black and white.

I will be posting every Tuesday and Friday and I’ll try to keep as large a backlog as possible.

English is not my first language so I hope you will inform me if you find any mistake in the chapters.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Ch. 1 - Cave ago
Ch. 2 - Feast ago
Ch. 3 - Plan ago
Ch. 4 - Chelae ago
Ch. 5 - Well ago
Ch. 6 - Gifts ago
Ch. 7 - Pain ago
Ch. 8 - Progress ago
Ch. 9 - Limbs ago
Ch. 10 - Silk ago
Ch. 11 - Discoveries ago
Ch. 12 - Tests ago
Ch. 13 - Retribution ago
Ch. 14 - Ear ago
Ch. 15 - Jump ago
Ch. 16 - Legs ago
Ch. 17 - Elektron ago
Ch. 18 - Webs ago
Ch. 19 - Charlotte ago
Ch. 20 - Offering ago
Ch. 21 - Promise ago
Ch. 22 - Interlude: Skitter ago
Ch. 23 - Wait ago
Ch. 24 - Besieged ago
Ch. 25 - Eye ago
Ch. 26 - Ex ago
Ch. 27 - Shadow ago
Ch. 28 - Understanding ago
Ch. 29 - Dive ago
Ch. 30 - Apoptosis ago
Ch. 31 - Symbiosis ago
Ch. 32 - Sight ago
Ch. 33 - Cooking ago
Ch. 34 - Journey ago
Ch. 35 - Bridge ago
Ch. 36 - Deeper ago
Ch. 37 - Queen ago
Ch. 38 - Audience ago
Ch. 39 - Settling ago
Ch. 40 - Physical ago
Ch. 41 - Experiments (I) ago
Ch. 42 - Experiments (II) ago
Ch. 43 - Promise ago
Ch. 44 - Memory (I) ago
Ch. 45 - Memory (II) ago
Ch. 46 - Instrospection ago
Ch. 47 - Terminus ago
Ch. 48 - Cores ago
Ch. 49 - Treason ago
Ch. 50 - Bones ago
Ch. 51 - Liver ago
Ch. 52 - Scurvy ago
Ch. 53 - Choice ago
Ch. 54 - Preparations ago
Ch. 55 - Departure ago
Ch. 56 - Construction ago
Ch. 57 - Hunt (I) ago
Ch. 58 - Hunt (II) ago
Ch. 59 - Shock ago
Ch. 60 - Back ago
Ch. 61 - Heal (I) ago
Ch. 62 - Heal (II) ago
Recap ago
Ch. 63 - Farewell ago
Ch. 64 - Advancements ago
Ch. 65 - Swamp ago
Ch. 66 - Over (I) ago
Ch. 67 - Over (II) ago
Ch. 68 - Under ago
Ch. 69 - Nice? No, Nose! ago
Ch. 70 - Tadpoles ago
Ch. 71 - Mucus ago
Ch. 72 - Toad ago
Ch. 73 - Sky ago
Ch. 74 - Ruins ago
Ch. 75 - Feathers ago
Ch. 76 - Signet ago
Ch. 77 - Empathy ago
Ch. 78 - Red ago
Ch. 79 - Humiliation ago
Ch. 80 - Smoked ago
Ch. 81 - Muscles ago
Ch. 82 - Bottom ago
Ch. 83 - Fragment ago
Ch. 84 - Ground ago
Ch. 85 - Forest ago
Ch. 86 - Door ago
Ch. 87 - Meeting ago

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MR.DANTE
Overall

An interesting read with an unique setting

Reviewed at: Ch. 17 - Elektron

Intersting idea with an original setting, first time I read something that has an underground cave as a setting, I wonder if she will ever find her way out. The writing stile and grammar are on point and give a nice reading experience, don't take my word for the grammar since I'm not a native speaker but it looks good to me

The system and magic system are fairly simple in design but and leave a lot of room for a creative application of power, a lot more interesting then the classic system here skills generally only do one thing. Having a biomancer as a protagonist is also something you don't see a lot, the implementation of how the power works is really detailed.

Now a minor spoiler since I'm a patron so don't read if you don't want spoilers till chapter 27. I'm a bit ambivalent on the spider colony, on one hand is bit cliche, it open a lot of possibilities for future interaction with all sort of possible creature but it's difficult to make a credible animal/monster character that dosn't end up acting like a human, I feel that having Alice go through the cave system completely alone could have been really interesting even if extremely hard to pull of in an entertaining way

thewitness
Overall

It’s just ... really good.

Reviewed at: Ch. 29 - Dive

It ticks all of the boxes I like in a character to start a story like this with, a strong willed female in harsh situation overcoming her horrifically dangerous scenario.

On top of this the chosen setting of starting far from any normal humans so we can adjust to this reality before eventually meeting them on her own terms appeals (though the potential for many other types of 'first contact' remain all of which having just as much potential), and I love the minimalistic system type alongside the updates in sleep stopping it from interfering in the immersion of her deadly survival story and the immediate but still extremely open explanation of the system/power she has simultaneously leaving lots of obvious room for growth without hinting at how she will truly grow within her archetype.

 

finally I love the chosen archetype of biomancer because let's face it biomancers are cool, with their adaption, regeneration and lack of easy power - any power she gains is a result of modify herself for it which gives it a layer of separation from her just gaining this power which makes all the difference to the reader.

so overall I love it and want more as soon as possible (though the quality retained so far is an important factor to your website style as I have experience it so take that request as the grumbling of a reader finding a new good story without enough already out to satiate their hunger - in other words ignore me and do you!!!)

MegaloMegalo
Overall

Early Chapters Look Good

Reviewed at: Ch. 33 - Cooking

I read first 15 chapters and I feel pretty good about this novel. (Some minor spoilers ahead). The system is well made and pretty straight forward, there is no oversimplifying or overcomplicating it's very smooth from what I've seen so far. MC feels real and there is no anoying cliches with panicking for no reason every 5 minutes (she vomits a lot tho, can't blame her i would too), she also doesn't overcome every danger with sheer power of will and determination, she actually uses her brain. The abbilities that MC recives and/or acquires are interesting and while not being op they are useful and have potential.

If things go as well as they do now this novel is gonna be great.

plad
Overall

Focuses on the journey rather than the destination

Reviewed at: Ch. 49 - Treason

I'm a bit of a progression junkie, but this is a good read even to me.

Not much of an overarching plot so far, seems to be in more of an arc format.

The litRPG part definitely takes a back seat to the story, and seems to be based more on competence and resources than something ephemeral like experience.

As of now, MC's only interaction with other characters has been with nonhumans, so I can't speak too much about character development yet, but the MC does have a realistic mindset and does seem to be improving.

Blue09
Overall

Kinda got me hooked

Reviewed at: Ch. 39 - Settling

So - not much to say about this story, expect it got me hooked. How did that happened?

There is first our protagonist who is quite likable. THAT! is something realy important imho. If you find an MC anoying, you will find fault everywhere ending with you maybe reading the story, but not (fully) enjoying it.

Then there is the fact that her Biomancer class isnt some kind of OP win it all button. It takes a lot of work for her to survive and biomancer is just a tool to - somehow - survive. Oh, OH! and she dosnt turn herselfe into some kind of abomination. Changes yes, but all in a sense where modern medicine might get at some point (or you could find them at least in a (hard)SiFi too).

The setting - now thats someting. Its not super new - but it feels... not real, not completly, but relatable and of all things, its well depicted. A cave biom, not a Dungeoncrawler cave. Meaning: You feel as if under certain circumstances, this place could actually exist.

Style of writing you ask? Pretty good, its flow is nice. The author also understands that you cant just run to a climax and then stay there, no, there are fast and slow scenes, wins and loses, ups and downs.

All in all - a very good read, so if you're looking for something to read that isnt just meant to rot your brain, this is a good investment of your time, as you wont feel regreting spending time on it.

chikiwilson
Overall

Hopeful of what’s to come

Reviewed at: Ch. 6 - Gifts

I thought I should give a review since I noticed no one else has and the story has had a promising start.

Style

The style of the story so far is good. It reads slightly comedic but in a darker sense (think Azarinth healer's style for reference) and also flows well. 

Story

So far, the story hasn't had enough chapters to be properly uncovered however the start has an interesting premise.

Grammer

I haven't noticed any spelling errors or grammer errors so far.

Characters

We have only been introduced to the main character so far, however, she seem likeable and thought out, and, most importantly, real.

 

Overall, I think the story has an interesting premise and, so long as it keeps a consistent, semi-frequent upload schedule, it could turn out to be a great story :)

ValentineN
Overall

Ticks off a little too many scary boxes.

Reviewed at: Ch. 79 - Humiliation

There's no "horror" tag, but it wouldn't have been out of place.

There's permanent darkness, caves, tight crawlspaces, insects of all kinds AND sizes, which in a fantasy world always means ... more.

There are also spiders, trippy mushrooms and raw "food".

It's interesting, but sometimes I get the feeling that I'm waiting more to see what happens if/when she escapes the caves.

Paul Roundfield
Overall

Natural Science Done Supernaturally

Reviewed at: Ch. 23 - Wait

Dr. Cavescience or: How I Learned to Stop Bleeding and Love the Spider.

The review title I wanted to use was hit with the character limit...

Enjoying this one enough to write a review instead of just leaving a rating. Does that count as enough of an endorsement, considering that I read many many stories but only bother to go beyond the rating and actually write a review for very few of them?

SCIENCE! Not a lot of science but still a nice microdosing of more or less legit science bits makes fiction so much more delicious.

Also, the science methods available while trapped in a cave system tend to be scary and dirty and probably really stinky, but cave science should not be confused with animal cruelty. Mother Nature is a bloodthirsty biatch and it is nice to see stories that don't try to do the "care and fairness values" dance around that simple fact.

I also like spiders, so that helps...

jklm
Overall

Bad time for MC, good time for me!

Reviewed at: Ch. 42 - Experiments (II)

I like this story because the main character is straight up not having a good time. It's fun to read a story with a MC who is really struggling with being transported to another world.

Her abilities are a mix of magic and science, which I love!

The story is slow building but seems well thought out. A good mix of challenges and progress. It's a lot grittier than your average transmigration story, and I love how it addresses many things that other stories ignore:

Like eating raw meat, menstuation, losing a limb. There are creative (and magical) solutions to these things, and it's great that they are actually addressed!

I am looking forward to how things progress and the future evolution of the main character. May she someday escape the caves!

ShaggySchmacky
Overall

Overall, the story is pretty good. There are very few grammar mistakes, the abilities are well thought out, and all the characters (including the non-human ones) feel real and have very definitive personalities. Fair warning though, the story is a bit slow paced (but not necessaily in a bad way). The author really takes his time developing the world and his MC and does a good deal of research to make his story feel more grounded in reality (despite the involvement of magic).