Candlelit Lives

by luda305

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

It is an exciting time for the people of the Eurial continent.  The new [Mage] Class has allowed the powerful to begin uniting the fractured tribes and villages into kingdoms and civilization.  A century on, and the continent is quickly consolidating into competing states. 

Amelia, student and daughter of a humble [Hunter], just wants to learn [Fireball] and become a [Mage] in service to her [King].  She succeeds.  All is well as the months fly by, eagerly awaiting her Classing.  One day though, she receives a (unique) Trait: [Reincarnator].  And then, she dies. 

And so begin her many lives. 

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Volume 1 (16 chapters) has been completed. 

Other tags: Serial Reincarnator, Experimental Storytelling

The "Experimental Storytelling" is that each chapter is a separate life.  That means things move very, very quickly and, regretfully, we often spend very little time with the people, places and things in each life.  Some might call it an anthology.

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BurnNote
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Serial Reincarnation, Anthology style

Reviewed at: Afterword (Volume 1)

On a lot of standard metrics, the story isn't impressive. The language is readable, though description is barely there. The MC isn't all that complex/interesting, and the rest are barely gestured at (with one exception from about a third of the story in). The story is extremely fast paced, and the plot is barely a thing. The litRPG system while potentially interesting, barely matters.

And yet, I enjoyed it immensely. It takes a hard and rare genre and does it very well. The flaws either don't matter to the core enjoyment, or even come together to enhance things. For example, the bare descriptions, fast pacing and low stakes come together to create a floaty, calm mood to watch the world pass by. A warm summer evening floating down a river.

Of course, that is very much a subjective thing (more so than any judgement about fiction), and if you're not in the right mood, or want something with more tension going in, then you probably won't enjoy it as much.

One thing I loved was the historical length. In early lifes, people have only just discovered the [Mage] class, as opposed to [Shaman]. And then later Mage gets rerated as more common, because it's spread enough. The system as a whole actually changes, which I thought was super neat.

I would have liked to see more of the historical impact of the MC. Traces of pervious lifes show up occaisonnally, but one of the big ones (the goblin thing), hasn't. It did get some foreshadowing, so maybe that'll turn up if this story gets some followup.

Finally, I thought the climax was pretty damn well done. It caught me by surprise how much it upped the stakes, had some really nich emotional moments, and even set up some potential overaching plot (though I don't know if I'm keen on that last one).

mightykk
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The reincarnation mechanic of the MC opens the door to something distinct from other LitRPG stories.

Two stories are being told - the MC's and the civilization's.

I find it an enjoyable take on LitRPG civilization and its development over time. 

Overall, it is worth giving the story a try!

Benw8888
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Blitz version of “In Loki’s Honor”

Reviewed at: Afterword (Volume 1)

If you have read In Loki's Honor, this story has an extremely similar setting, except each life is condensed to 1 chapter, instead of a whole arc. Because of the serial reincarnation concept, and the lack of well written stories like ILH and Cadence Lee, the genre isn't explored enough for me to criticize the author for doing something similar.

The condensation of each life has the plus that we get a lot of lives quickly; but the downside is that deaths are too quick, and we don't get the proper amount of enjoyment from each life. The MC gets OP too quickly with not enough satisfaction as time skips are more frequent than not.

Plus the MC gets a tag along that becomes indistinguishable from the MC, to the point that readers mix the two up all the time.

That said, there's something mysterious about this genre that makes me love it so much that the flaws barely matter, at least so far. Perhaps the condensation of each life into one chapter cuts out a lot of the cliche boring stuff I've read a million times in isekai, and keeps only the good parts? Also, progression fantasy is at full force here.

That said, I do have gripes about the ending, put in a spoiler. 

The last antagonist attack came out of nowhere, and was a one in a billion encounter instead of something foreshadowed, or even causally induced. Because the MC was so OP, the author had to manipulate probabilities and apply plot armor to the villain so that there would be conflict... and that's annoying.

Also, the MC acted out of character. No matter how sad you are, murdering tons of innocents and your parents is inexcusable... you'd think someone who'd lived for centuries would be rational enough to internalize that. Lashing out or isolating would make sense; a murderous rampage caught me by surprise and was very jarring. Maybe it's just me who cares a lot about rationality, but this might turn some readers off.

 

Vishv
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The story is of serial reincarnator but each chap is a life.But instead of giving you a story it feels more like summary wtitten on wiki.You understand whats happening but their is no real fun or connection to protagonist.

It doesn't hold candle to other well written books like loki's honor which actually explored each world and gave them due deligence

Lotharel
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I loved this story. It was clever and interesting. Rather than a normal story I would see this as a colection of interconnected short stories. I only have two complaints (other than wishing for more). The first would be that some of the lives are short, and thus their chapters are as well, but this makes sense in the overall nature of the story so it actualy adds to the story overall. Second was that in the later chapters the system was mostly ignored, when a good amount of the early chapters focuses on the detials of the system. Once again this makes sence in the setting of the world. Once you have enough power built up over diffrent lives you don't really care all that much anymore.

To end things I loved this story. It was amazeing and I can easily see myself returning to reread it in the future. Thank you for writeing it. I would love to see more.

AlejoTheBear
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I love a well balanced world. I love the challenges a not over powered main charcter faces. I love slow growth, time to meet and fall in love with other charcters, and detailed progressions.

All those things are a great steak and potatoes kind of meal.

I also absolutely love shoviling popcorn in my face like a feral beast.

This story, an anthology in the authors own words, is like popcorn. Fun, easy to consume, and just good overall.

Ruby Leapard1
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Its a good short story with stories.

Reviewed at: Afterword (Volume 1)

The book is a nice story about souls and that power can come quickly but at the cost of enjoyment of life. The start of the story is a bit to fast and does not slow down to much. I found it a nice quick read. I hope for a book two.

djserry
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Thoroughly enjoyable LitRPG

Reviewed at: Afterword (Volume 1)

For an 'experiment', one of the best books I've read. Sad to see it's completed and will be waiting for the 'for now'. Thanks author! Great job 

Wanted to keep it short but obligatory 50 words.

While not the most polished book, each life contributed to the future, with just enough quirky lives to keep you guessing. I particularly enjoyed seeing the system change and update over time through the lives, and while this was later explained to be mostly due to the writing process I found it worked perfectly as a worldbuilding aspect. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Raz
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Not really any plot, and characters aren't super fleshed out. This story takes place over thousands of years, and the majority of it consist of timeskips. We see a world develope and our MC direct some of this development. Every chapter is another life, which leads to massively different chapter lengths. To be completely honest I I have no idea why it's so good, but it is extremely entertaining. 10/10, would recommend. 

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Without doubt the author still needs some writing experience to level up their writing. But this was a good job, for now.

The endless reincarnation genre isn't very prominent on this site, with only a few fictions include it. So any fiction with it is appreciated. This was a rather short, but still a good read. 

Lets start with the story. There is world-building, the different races get introduced, the extent of the system is shown and the different societies are lived in by the MCs. There is no overarching plot, leisure life, do as we wish and get skills for the next few lifes. That isn't necessarily a bad point, but with a long length it would have become one, but because it is as short as it is, with every chapter being one life it doesn't fall into that trap. A bad point though, would be the bit of predictability of death. With the knowledge of every chapter being one life, death doesn't come as a suprise and doesn't have as much gravitas and becomes just a cut-point, where it says, dead and they move on to the next life.

Some deaths, especially because of the added strength from the system, therefore look a bit silly

A heartattack at <100 years with level 200? Does con or strength do nothing to the bodies health then?! 

On to the style, the author is with not much fault, surely not a master at writing, but adept at least. Nothing gets too boring and there aren't any major problems I can think of atm.

The grammar is ok with a few mistakes here and there. But with the introduction of the bond and combined with the short chapter length distinguishing between the two became a real problem adding to that, we weren't always told who was who and they also changed genders and names here and then, so that also wasn't a factor we could distinguish the two with, and remembering every name only for those names to never show up again would also be a waste of time. The biggest problem that brings is during them talking, without a helpful PersonA: and PersonB: we sometimes really couldn't tell who was who..

Lastly characters, honestly only the main characters are of real concern, the rest only were shown for one chapter after all. Well I guess the 'System' could count as a character, but otherwise the side characters were each different but other than that none really brought out 'sunshine and joy' or any feelings in general. Oh, maybe the antagonist at the last chapters did.

The main characters actually are quite badly made looking back. We saw emotional turmoil, but they almost never talked about their feelings,

children, 

dead family, lost loved ones or friends (didn't have all that many on that front from what I read). They did talk about some of these but it was really really short so it barely counts and other than the status changes I can't think of much character growth other than maturity, maybe.

So is it worth a read? Yes, it is, this wasted some time and was quite enjoyable. But it also hade many faults. The most obvious would be power-progression, a recurring problem it seems, as 'In Lokis Honor' also had that problem. The best solution to that would be a limit to what could be transferred, say only one skill gets transferred for example.

But otherwise it was alright the biggest boon is the length I guess, a good stopping point for now. If there will be a second book/arc or a continuation, then a limiter, a goal or more challenges would be appreciated.