A Budding Scientist in a Fantasy World

A Budding Scientist in a Fantasy World

by acaswell

Warning This fiction contains:
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Alice is a girl who loves science and lives on Earth. Then, suddenly, she was punted into another dimension. A dimension where magic and monsters roam the land, swords and sorcery reign supreme, and, for some reason, a System keeps dinging at her and telling her that her stats and levels are increasing. As someone who loves exploring mysteries, Alice is determined to get to the bottom of this mystery. After all, everything has to have a ‘cause,’ including the System, right?

What to expect: This story is going to be a LitRPG set in a fantasy world. However, unlike many LitRPG’s, the system has both a definite beginning and definite limits to what it is able to accomplish – rather than a singularly omnipotent, omniscient being that is tied to the laws of the world, the way systems are usually presented in LitRPG’s, the system is close to both, but has definite limits and rules which it operates by. This story is also relatively slow, since that is my writing style. The main character also begins the story as a young, 15-year old girl who has yet to finish high school, and is going to explore more of the world around her as she grows as a person and starts to get her feet under her.

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I love & hate the story with unprecedented passion

Reviewed at: Chapter 20

Update from the future: So more chapters of the story have been released since my last review and with such some amendments should be made. I will leave the original review bellow this one since I think it is still valid in regards to the begining of the story. Enough preamble onto the review.

A capital budding lowercase scientist in a fantasy world: First update I want to make is I want to reinterpret the intentions of the author. And yes I think this is a very important distinction. I was quite harsh in my initial review because the character was not scientific enough for the title of the story. I want to draw attention to the budding part of scientist. With more chapters under my belt I don't think the author was trying to portray or claim our MC as a super genius of any kind but rather someone who is lost, afraid and trying her very best to make the right decisions.

I still stand by my opinion that the MC fails in this aspect but aflawed character is not a bad character. This simple understanding in intention .makes the MC much more likeable if not still quite infuriating at times.

A concrete jungle: as the chapter progresses our MC and with such the story leaves it's survivalist tones and enter society. I really liked the survivalist aspect of the story so I was a little disheartened by this but a concrete jungle is still a jungle. the author continues to leave no stone unturned, this world feels real and lived in. The society is tangable and understandable and the characters are believable and mostly likable. ( Except for lady Vallis, screw you, you annoying geriatric hag!) 

In terms of decision making of the MC with civilization I still disagree and find myself annoyed with many of her decisions. She's too critical when she should be emotional and too emotional when she should be critical. There are times to sit down and get sciency and then there are times where you don't look a gift horse in the mouth.

In conclusion... Again: So I have more than doubled my chapter intake since my first review and I have to say I stand by my initial review but I want to emphasize the love part of my "I love and hate this story" title. What I love in the story is still there but sadly what I hate in the story is also still there. Thankfully what I hate in the story has continuously been falling in the backdrop as the chapters progress. I see a positive trend of improvement as I read and I while keep reading in hopes to see that trend continue

Fingers. Crossed that my chapter 30 update will be even more positive!

Review at chapter 8:

Intro:

As a double major in physics and mathematics I was immediately intrigued by the title and premise of this story, but as I got further in to the chapters I grew to develop a bit of a love hate relationship where I continually drop the story then return anyways to read some more.

Why I Keep coming back:

Let's start off with the good shall we? This story explores the transported into another world trope with a care and seriousness I have never before seen. I love the detail and attention the author has put into the struggles and difficulties that come with survival. Temperature, disease, food, fear, all of these things are all too often glossed over in these transported in another world stories so that the mc can get on with the generic fantasy but not this one.

The author festors and drowns in the nitty gritty of simply existing in the wild with a truly terrifying realism. I'm right in there with the mc, scared and pondering how I would fare in a similar situation. It is this meticulousness to what the character needs to accomplish that has me coming back again and again to finish the chapters I unceremonisously drop in frustration.

 

Why I Keep dropping the story:

It's not all sunshine and lollipops though. My problems with this story come down to one thing: the MC. She's not a scientist, she's a kid. I see that the author wants to portray an analytical character bringing science and logic to a crazy world but I find the MC is one of the least rigorous and scientifically inclined characters I've ever met. I feel that the author is writing this story with a fundumantenal misunderstanding of what science is.

The MC keeps approaching her knew world, magic, and the system with the idea that it is breaking and rejecting science throwing away all that is true. It seems that the author fails to understand that science was never about truth but about a lens in which to understand it. The world, magic, and the system are logical and truthful by definition because it exist! and it is the MC's job to take her analytical mind to study and understand how exactly it ticks.

The MC understands she's in another dimension but then refuses to accepts that the ruels here might be different. She rejects and skims over certain topics because she is not willing to accept there 'science' or 'logic' stuck in the ways of her own world. Take this and add on to it that the character even follows through with sometimes a misunderstanding of our own world and physics.

The author/MC often brings up newtonion physics as this thing that the new world often rejects ignoring the fact that our own world often rejects it as well. We have long since known that newtonion physics is a painfully inaccurate portrayal of the universe that we simply use on smaller earthly scales out of convenience, but there are many many circumstances throughout the universe in which it breaks down. Is it so hard to believe that this new world the MC finds herself in is one of those situations?

Call to the Author:

This story has gotten quite popular and there are quite a few reviews already so the author may never see this, but if you do this part of the review is for you.

I have been very negative of your story and perhaps a little insulting in this review but I genuinely believe that your story has the potential to be the very best that this platform has to offer. That's why I have an overall score of four even though my personal feelings would put it much lower.

You goal and determination in this story is truly inspiring and I am glad to see someone striving to write a story like this. In my opinion though, I think you should have your character study the world with as much attention and detail as you do to the survival. I think the story would be much better if the MC dropped her preconceptions of how things ought to be in her mind and truly studied the world trying to understand why it is the way it is.

After all isn't that what science is about? Trying to understand why things are the way they are.

I will begrudgingly continue to read your story excited to see how it progresses.

tl;dr: MC tries to fit world into her understanding instead of trying to understand world. Otherwise the detail and attention of survival is amazing and enthralling.

 

 

luda305
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Update: Chapter 18 does a wonderful job addressing the protagonist's failure to actual act as a scientist. No spoilers, but it complete absolves any complaint made by the reviewers. +0.5 stars. 

Old Review:

This is a pretty good isekai litRPG.  The System is relatively fresh, as are the implications it has for worldbuilding.  The protagonist ends up trapped in a forest overwinter, surviving after several harrowing experiences.  And as she sets out to reach civilization, stronger for her experiences, we experience the wonder and bewilderment alongside her. 

That said, as others point out, this really has nothing to do with science or being a scientist.  The story is written with a fundamental misunderstanding of the issue.  And when the issue comes up, it's basically a few paragraphs of "this defies my common sense," which doesn't lend much to the story in so much as the rest of the protagonist's natural bewilderment is perfectly fine.

Brights
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So far this story is off to a great start, following the classic dumped in a strange world how would you fare formula. The main character is just a young girl finding herself in this situation all of a sudden, no supplies, no equipment, just the clothes she stands up in , all this in a world where her survival is FAR from assured, Need food? Better learn how to forage , because the system will not help until you make an effort yourself. Need shelter? Good luck with that, hope you can cobble together something because again the system will not help. It really feels like even with the system she has to EARN her skills, and think hard on it to do so. The MC seems sometimes  little clinical for somebody in her situation, but I guess for some people stoicism is how you cope. All told well worth a read with no OP or power creep. The use of the scientific method as a tool for survival really makes for a unique story, though the title describing her as a scientist may confuse a lot of foks given that the MC is a schoolkid of fifteen years old, not a qualified scientist, although given that she is studying the use of an entire new way of living in a world far removed from our own we can safely say she is rapidly becoming one.

draxsiss
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an amazing survival story

Reviewed at: Chapter 12

So this is a great nonstandard story. The MC is forced to work for everything, makes mistakes and really relateable. The focus on mearly staying alive is a refreshing change from OP MC that liter this site. Give it a read you will enjoy it. 

 

As of this point I have compleated only the first segment of the story but based on current quality we shall likely see much more high quality story to come. 

rulerhades
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Wasn't going to do a review

Reviewed at: April Fool's Chapter

But someone decided that the cover of the female leads face is somehow sexual. I'm here to dispel any misunderstanding. There is no sexualization of the MC, at least none so far in the story. It's an entertaining read, and I love how it displays what someone forced into a "survive in the wilderness" would actually be like. That said, it does tend to be a bit wordy, the first chapter especially. If you find it hard to stay interested then I'd say skimming through the less important pieces would be fine, it's worth it to stick with the story. Hopefully the rating gets brought back up 

EpicGnome23
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5/7 Stars a perfect score, I really enjoyed all the personality and stuff put into everything. The way Alice looks at everything in the world with a question in mind is great and is a great way to exposition about how everything works. Am excited to see where the story goes next.

Sansvoid
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Classic litrpg, survival story. I love this part, the limitations of knowledge, skill and Skill. 

 

So far our protagonist has managed to not die quite a bit. Good tension.

 

I skim over some of her thinking sometimes though, cause I want to know what happens next. Other times what she thinks is very important. Maybe that's just me, well...

 

Keep up the good work.

Void_walker
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Great story, I see some potential. I like the concept of using natural forces or phenomenons to make a magic system. It has been revealed that there exists kinetic magic and electro-magnetic, if we follow with this then there must be strong force magic, weak force magic and gravitational magic, but it seems a little weird that there are only 4 types of basic magic. Thermal magic might be a possibility too.

 

 

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Started off okay, now getting better.

Reviewed at: Chapter 30

"A budding scientist in a fantasy world" is exactly what it says on the tin. Alice, or MC, is a young naive girl who happens to have a passion for science. She wakes up in another world and spends the first fourteen chapters or so surviving in the wilderness through the winter aided only by the world encompassing system that she barely understands.

After she reaches civilization her passion for learning seems to kick in, and we get to see what some of what 'budding scientist' in the title means. We also have a couple of antagonists set up for future shinanagons. So overall the story is going in a great direction.

Both the style and grammar are solid and consistent, with very few typos or poorly flowing sentences. The Litrpg aspects are also well done, it is basic enough to pick up quickly, and logical enough to follow. Dialogue is another solid aspect, many stories on RR suffer because of poorly written or styled dialogue, this author makes few mistakes in that regard.

I really like the survival start of this webnovel. While it isn't an original plot idea that she would find herself in the middle of nowhere, forced to survive. (See: Wandering Inn, Azarinth Healer) It does provide a rather well though out crucible for the young woman to go through before she makes it to civilization. We get to see her resiliance tested early on, and some of her niavete... challenged?

Probably the most consistent complaint I see, now that we have moved out of the wilderness, is that she doesn't act her age or seems too knowledgable about science. Both these critiques hold little water. She still is as niave as someone her age would be, but after surviving in the wilderness alone she has taken on the adaptability necessary to thrive in this world she has found herself here. The complaint about her being too knowlegable about science is in bad faith. Unlike MCs in other webnovels, she doesn't just pull information out of her ass like she stuck one of googles mainframes up there. She has the understanding of science that someone who grew up a nerd would have. In the recent ten chapters we have begun to see her finally start comeing up with experiments and testing her understanding of her new world. 

 

TL;DR: Enjoyable portal fantasy with nothing new or crazy, well written with enjoyable characters and gimmick. I look forward to where the story goes in the future.

thewitness
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Overall: I like the MC and so far I'm liking her motivations and priorities which are both enjoyable to read and realistic, I like the setting though I'm waiting in anticipation for the expansion on this due to her reaching civilisation and I love her current path of develop.

The only reason it's not 5 star is because though I'm liking the system you currently have in place I would recommend putting something in between her different classes perks (so they are slightly more separate) and maybe finding a slightly different way of organising the individual skills as whilst it currently works I can see it easily getting out of hand in the future.