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Alice is a girl who loves science and lives on Earth. Then, suddenly, she was punted into another dimension. A dimension where magic and monsters roam the land, and, for some reason, a System keeps dinging at her and telling her that her stats and levels are increasing. As someone who loves exploring mysteries, Alice is determined to get to the bottom of this mystery. After all, everything has to have a ‘cause,’ including the System, right?
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What to expect: This story is going to be a LitRPG set in a fantasy world. However, unlike many LitRPG’s, the system has both a definite beginning and definite limits to what it is able to accomplish – rather than a singularly omnipotent, omniscient being that is tied to the laws of the world, the way systems are usually presented in LitRPG’s, the system is close to both, but has definite limits and rules which it operates by.
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Update from the future: So more chapters of the story have been released since my last review and with such some amendments should be made. I will leave the original review bellow this one since I think it is still valid in regards to the begining of the story. Enough preamble onto the review.
A capital budding lowercase scientist in a fantasy world: First update I want to make is I want to reinterpret the intentions of the author. And yes I think this is a very important distinction. I was quite harsh in my initial review because the character was not scientific enough for the title of the story. I want to draw attention to the budding part of scientist. With more chapters under my belt I don't think the author was trying to portray or claim our MC as a super genius of any kind but rather someone who is lost, afraid and trying her very best to make the right decisions.
I still stand by my opinion that the MC fails in this aspect but aflawed character is not a bad character. This simple understanding in intention .makes the MC much more likeable if not still quite infuriating at times.
A concrete jungle: as the chapter progresses our MC and with such the story leaves it's survivalist tones and enter society. I really liked the survivalist aspect of the story so I was a little disheartened by this but a concrete jungle is still a jungle. the author continues to leave no stone unturned, this world feels real and lived in. The society is tangable and understandable and the characters are believable and mostly likable. ( Except for lady Vallis, screw you, you annoying geriatric hag!)
In terms of decision making of the MC with civilization I still disagree and find myself annoyed with many of her decisions. She's too critical when she should be emotional and too emotional when she should be critical. There are times to sit down and get sciency and then there are times where you don't look a gift horse in the mouth.
In conclusion... Again: So I have more than doubled my chapter intake since my first review and I have to say I stand by my initial review but I want to emphasize the love part of my "I love and hate this story" title. What I love in the story is still there but sadly what I hate in the story is also still there. Thankfully what I hate in the story has continuously been falling in the backdrop as the chapters progress. I see a positive trend of improvement as I read and I while keep reading in hopes to see that trend continue
Fingers. Crossed that my chapter 30 update will be even more positive!
Review at chapter 8:
As a double major in physics and mathematics I was immediately intrigued by the title and premise of this story, but as I got further in to the chapters I grew to develop a bit of a love hate relationship where I continually drop the story then return anyways to read some more.
Why I Keep coming back:
Let's start off with the good shall we? This story explores the transported into another world trope with a care and seriousness I have never before seen. I love the detail and attention the author has put into the struggles and difficulties that come with survival. Temperature, disease, food, fear, all of these things are all too often glossed over in these transported in another world stories so that the mc can get on with the generic fantasy but not this one.
The author festors and drowns in the nitty gritty of simply existing in the wild with a truly terrifying realism. I'm right in there with the mc, scared and pondering how I would fare in a similar situation. It is this meticulousness to what the character needs to accomplish that has me coming back again and again to finish the chapters I unceremonisously drop in frustration.
Why I Keep dropping the story:
It's not all sunshine and lollipops though. My problems with this story come down to one thing: the MC. She's not a scientist, she's a kid. I see that the author wants to portray an analytical character bringing science and logic to a crazy world but I find the MC is one of the least rigorous and scientifically inclined characters I've ever met. I feel that the author is writing this story with a fundumantenal misunderstanding of what science is.
The MC keeps approaching her knew world, magic, and the system with the idea that it is breaking and rejecting science throwing away all that is true. It seems that the author fails to understand that science was never about truth but about a lens in which to understand it. The world, magic, and the system are logical and truthful by definition because it exist! and it is the MC's job to take her analytical mind to study and understand how exactly it ticks.
The MC understands she's in another dimension but then refuses to accepts that the ruels here might be different. She rejects and skims over certain topics because she is not willing to accept there 'science' or 'logic' stuck in the ways of her own world. Take this and add on to it that the character even follows through with sometimes a misunderstanding of our own world and physics.
The author/MC often brings up newtonion physics as this thing that the new world often rejects ignoring the fact that our own world often rejects it as well. We have long since known that newtonion physics is a painfully inaccurate portrayal of the universe that we simply use on smaller earthly scales out of convenience, but there are many many circumstances throughout the universe in which it breaks down. Is it so hard to believe that this new world the MC finds herself in is one of those situations?
Call to the Author:
This story has gotten quite popular and there are quite a few reviews already so the author may never see this, but if you do this part of the review is for you.
I have been very negative of your story and perhaps a little insulting in this review but I genuinely believe that your story has the potential to be the very best that this platform has to offer. That's why I have an overall score of four even though my personal feelings would put it much lower.
You goal and determination in this story is truly inspiring and I am glad to see someone striving to write a story like this. In my opinion though, I think you should have your character study the world with as much attention and detail as you do to the survival. I think the story would be much better if the MC dropped her preconceptions of how things ought to be in her mind and truly studied the world trying to understand why it is the way it is.
After all isn't that what science is about? Trying to understand why things are the way they are.
I will begrudgingly continue to read your story excited to see how it progresses.
tl;dr: MC tries to fit world into her understanding instead of trying to understand world. Otherwise the detail and attention of survival is amazing and enthralling.
Update 3: oh wow this story ground down to a lethargic pace. It's been 10 chapters and we're now like only the 2nd day after the trip that they were on in chapter 37.
Update 2: Through 37. I think the story has deterioriated a bit since the last update. Yes, we are much clearer on a scientific track, but the plot (which has nothing to do with her scientific research) keeps interfering with the scientific track, especially in so much as the protagonist is only now dealing with some of the stereotypical issues common to isekai'd protagonists (e.g., first kill, violence). I had kind of thought we were over that, and that the plot would be based on the science, but so far it's been a bog-standard isekai with a little helping of science. And, while this story is not tagged slice of life, it most certainly has become one and the pacing has bogged down tremendously.
When I last updated this at chapter 18, Alice had just recently come into town and had her little inquiry before the tribunal. With 20 more chapters (more than doubling), we've gone a handful of weeks and are only now just getting to Alice leading an expedition to where Alice appeared in the world in a broken mana event.
And chapter to chapter, it's just not terribly interesting. Frankly, it seems like the story is unraveling. -1.0 stars to 3.5 stars.
Update: Chapter 18 does a wonderful job addressing the protagonist's failure to actual act as a scientist. No spoilers, but it complete absolves any complaint made by the reviewers. +0.5 stars to 4.5.
This is a pretty good isekai litRPG. The System is relatively fresh, as are the implications it has for worldbuilding. The protagonist ends up trapped in a forest overwinter, surviving after several harrowing experiences. And as she sets out to reach civilization, stronger for her experiences, we experience the wonder and bewilderment alongside her.
That said, as others point out, this really has nothing to do with science or being a scientist. The story is written with a fundamental misunderstanding of the issue. And when the issue comes up, it's basically a few paragraphs of "this defies my common sense," which doesn't lend much to the story in so much as the rest of the protagonist's natural bewilderment is perfectly fine.
I struggle with the MC but a love the story. She is supposed 16 but her age versus her actions isn't always congruent. Understanding that teenagers can appear older or younger in their thoughts and actions, I have to look at her as closer to 20-21.
I enjoyed the alone time in the first arc but I consistently wished that she would better address her shortfalls in the environment. Watch any "how to survive" television show and you will see many actions and tools that can be accomplished within the first week. Understandably food and heat (and water) are important and will probably be imperative if you aren't practiced.
moving from alone to city, I think a small amount of farm/peasant time would have been good. An opportunity to flesh out the human society and government. Observations from a sketchy merchant or vagabond later corrected would reduce the 'everything is sweet' undertone of day-to-day life.
I'm hoping we don't just see a lab-rat moving forward. We don't need Indiana Jones either. I did desire them to visit her 'cabin'; missed opportunity for proof she lived alone (outside the status award) - seeing the actual difficulty of the award.
I hope the 'gods' aren't chased soon. Please don't break the power acceleration.
At first I thought this was just a light-hearted toned isekai novel, good gramar and flow of events, decent worldbuilding from the start world-building and the System is interesting but not innovative.
Then I realized I couldn't stop wanting to know more and kept reading. I usually prefer grimdark stories cause they don't need much suspension of desbelief to immerse yourself in the story. But this author is truly sneaky, he plants little tidbits of 'maybe things aren't what they seem at first', which work incredibly well with the more research focused story. It started good, and keeps getting better.
If you're thinking about it, give it a try!
I stumbled on this story and have been following it for a few months now and thought it might be worth writing up my thoughts and feedback. (Of course, I don't know that much about writing, so take this with a grain of salt.)
I don't know how to improve on this -- writing characters that feel truly genuine seems extremely hard! -- but it feels like the single biggest point of leverage for the author in improving the story, in my perspective. (One exercise I've done myself, although I don't think I'm good at this, has been re-reading books where the characters feel really genuine, looking at the scenes where this is most true, and just trying to figure out what makes them feel that way to me.)
But someone decided that the cover of the female leads face is somehow sexual. I'm here to dispel any misunderstanding. There is no sexualization of the MC, at least none so far in the story. It's an entertaining read, and I love how it displays what someone forced into a "survive in the wilderness" would actually be like. That said, it does tend to be a bit wordy, the first chapter especially. If you find it hard to stay interested then I'd say skimming through the less important pieces would be fine, it's worth it to stick with the story. Hopefully the rating gets brought back up
So far this story is off to a great start, following the classic dumped in a strange world how would you fare formula. The main character is just a young girl finding herself in this situation all of a sudden, no supplies, no equipment, just the clothes she stands up in , all this in a world where her survival is FAR from assured, Need food? Better learn how to forage , because the system will not help until you make an effort yourself. Need shelter? Good luck with that, hope you can cobble together something because again the system will not help. It really feels like even with the system she has to EARN her skills, and think hard on it to do so. The MC seems sometimes little clinical for somebody in her situation, but I guess for some people stoicism is how you cope. All told well worth a read with no OP or power creep. The use of the scientific method as a tool for survival really makes for a unique story, though the title describing her as a scientist may confuse a lot of foks given that the MC is a schoolkid of fifteen years old, not a qualified scientist, although given that she is studying the use of an entire new way of living in a world far removed from our own we can safely say she is rapidly becoming one.
This is not the first story I read where the gimmick is that a character from earth tries to apply logic to a fantasy realm, but many of the decisions the author makes in this story make it feel wholey unique in that sub-sub-genre.
First of all, the character is merely a 15 year old girl. A totally average high school underclassman. For the most part the author makes the character believable in this sense, only occassionally does the protag do something that I find improbable for a 15 year old to think of or do. In other works in the "logical protag" vein, you'd expect to see a grown adult, or at least a highly gifted student, rather than the totally average teenager in this story.
The author is clearly interested in telling a story that goes out of its way to subvert "overpowered protag" tropes, repeatedly having the character come to terms with how unexceptional they are by the standards of their new world. But it falls flat for the most part, since the main character does in fact have some minor system advantages that turn into more signifigant advanges in the latest chapters.
The first arc of the story features our protagonist alone in the wilderness, and while I was reading it, I was greatly anticipating the introduciton of other human characters to bounce off of, but once the story does reach that point, I feel that the focus gets lost a little bit, and all of the characters seem samey, nearly all the characters who appear more than once are simply earnest and friendly. There's nothing wrong with a society of mostly kind individuals, but it is a little draining for the reader when every interaction is so formuliac and straight forward.
The author chooses to write very detailed descriptions of things the character investigates, which fits with the "logical protag" idea and the title of the story, but it is a little tiresome when certain ideas become dead ends or when the information the protag seeks has to be painstakenly pulled from another character in dialogue sequences that feel fairly naturalistic, but don't move the story forward much at all.
Don't let my negative points deter you. This is a very stong 4/5, and the style and grammar are very professional. I beleive the weakest part of the story is past now, and I'm excited to see where it goes from here.
So this is a great nonstandard story. The MC is forced to work for everything, makes mistakes and really relateable. The focus on mearly staying alive is a refreshing change from OP MC that liter this site. Give it a read you will enjoy it.
As of this point I have compleated only the first segment of the story but based on current quality we shall likely see much more high quality story to come.
Overall: I like the MC and so far I'm liking her motivations and priorities which are both enjoyable to read and realistic, I like the setting though I'm waiting in anticipation for the expansion on this due to her reaching civilisation and I love her current path of develop.
The only reason it's not 5 star is because though I'm liking the system you currently have in place I would recommend putting something in between her different classes perks (so they are slightly more separate) and maybe finding a slightly different way of organising the individual skills as whilst it currently works I can see it easily getting out of hand in the future.