Truth Seeker: A LitRPG Timeloop

by KrazeKode

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Traumatising content

What was supposed to be a simple delivery ended up taking Jennifer through the depths of the dungeon. A trial of life and death leaves her with a mark seared on not just her body, but her very soul. If that wasn’t enough, when she escapes the dungeon, she finds her city in flames, burning as monstrous invaders slaughter everyone they come across. Including her.

When Jennifer closed her eyes, she was certain her life had taken an unfair and tragic turn. But then she opened them only to find none of it had ever happened.

The only proof she hadn’t gone mad, the mark on her hand, burning with an inner fire.

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Note: This story is a first draft and a work in progress.

A random short prompt I wrote on the topic of time abilities which, now I'm writing more of. The story will be updated once every week.

A big thank you to Asviloka for making the cover. 

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StardustRebuild
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This is a wonderful start to a time loop story. Gives a good foundation for the character's ways of thinking, and has been building some small tidbits of the world with every chapter. Further, it flows very smoothly and makes me want to keep reading it. 
while there is a bunch of unknown information on the plot so far, it doesn't feel so trite and seems to have set up some higher-order magic systems, enemies, and a lot more to come. 

 

Further, this does seem to be a very well merged Lit-RPG and Fantasy setting. While there is incorporation of game like elements, it has not become all encompassing, and merely seems to add flavor to the genre while helping to run with expectations. This, in conjunction with the smooth writing does bode well! 

 

As of this review, 3 MAY 2021, we have the foundation of the main character, along with two other seemingly main characters, a family, and a possible antagonist. No overused tropes, and it feels like a really genuine insight into characters that will have a significant source of depth as the story goes along. Further, the main character is not a blank slate, which is always nice! 

I am excited to see how this progresses! 

Laovi, The Eldritch Banana
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The title says it all its a intersting read. Its one of my top 5 stories to read.

Style- It flows together really well. The pacing isnt too slow or too fast its just right.

Story- Its really well written. The fight scenes in particular are really well written.

Grammar- The mistakes are very few and they are quickly fixed once pointed out.  

Character- The characters are well written and thought out. They feel like real people, not flat cut outs of people. 

The End. 

 

TheRottingBard
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From the start, I was intrigued by the minimalist take on a LitRPG in a fantasy world that intrigued me with its hints of mystery. The style isn't groundbreaking, but I love the snappiness of the fights and the use of the different senses. There are lots of small details added to the story that greatly increase my enjoyment and immersion. The story itself does impose quite a few questions and keeps me wanting more. And I love having a female POV for the lead character that isn't forced into any stereotypes. She's her own person and her emotional complexity easily trumps the majority of sociopathic mcs from the power fantasy stories I've seen of late. 

Style
This story could easily be translated into a comic or graphic story. The use of the senses is incredibly appreciated and the snappy use of sound in combat adds to the image of a hectic or scary fight. I am loving the fight scenes in this; they aren't a master craft but they are just plain fun to read. The stakes are there, the pace is quick, and the blows land in a satisfying way. Hopefully, this continues through the story.

Grammar:
I have nothing terrible to say about the grammar at all. Their use of different descriptive words was top tier. There writing flowed nicely. A few things could have been expanded upon but nothing about their writing drew me away from the story. 

Story:
With a quick delve into a dungeon, I knew I was going to like the story. The fights are nice, the puzzles are enjoyable, and the mystery is palpable. I am left wondering about the litRPG system, the politics of the world, and the new ability the mc gains. Personally, with the time loops, I'll be watching for a butterfly effect. Currently, the MC has found themself in some sort of struggle, a trial they must complete, that pits them against other powerful characters. Excited to see what comes of this trial.

Character:
I am enjoying the MC, Jennifer. She is intelligent without the story ever having to tell us that. It's shown in her actions that she makes wise choices even when struggling against normal instinctual reactions to danger. Her motivations are humorous and understandable. And her reaction to the events she survives is very relatable. Her only partner in these first few chapters is a man named Irwys who is a bit of an engima and a little more than intriguing. I will be reading more to see where he comes up in the Trial of the Seeker. 


In short. I like this story. Will continue to read. 

Nameless32
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I've had the privelege of watching as this author honed his style, and I have to say I'm really proud of how far he's come. The story here is nice, and I'm appreciating how much voice is coming through in the writing and characters. All in all, a very fun read!

Vitaly S Alexius
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My artist pal KrazeKode has finally joined the ranks of the frontpage trending heroes and has produced a lovely novel with plentiful embedded future potential for visual excellence!

So, lets begin digesting this loop - bound work of interest:

Grammar has some mistakes but Kraze is constantly improving it through beta reader and RR commenter participation.

The protagonist is a rational-type hero who starts off weak and naturally progresses towards power through the power of the time loop and litrpg system as one would expect from this genre and the title.

Story has a decent hook to it which I won't spoil, read it yourself! 5/5 for the hook.

The world is very solid and believable and would totally make for a comic book and it shows that the author is an artist as much as a writer.

The style of pacing is quick as MC quickly moves from one environment to the other.

My only complaint is the very slow release, but that’s understandable as Kraze is cranking out covers to bless many writers on royal road with such.

Keep it up and get cracking on more chapters my friend! I believe in you and know that you can totally do it if you put your mind to it!

Chewys
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A very interesting to a time-loop story, the plot is nice, everything is very descriptive and it brings to the mood and atmosphere. Very good grammar as well. Plus the plot twist is very good. (I'm not going to talk about the plot twist or where the plot twist is, cuz ya know, spoilers). And yeah, it's a great book!

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Let me start out by saying that I did not initially expect to be drawn into the story. Not because the writing isn’t solid, but because many of the stories I’ve seen employing time loops have done it in a mediocre way at best. However, Truth Seeker strikes a fine balance between its setting and the story it’s trying to tell.

 

 Style:

As I continued to read, I found myself very grounded in each scene. This managed to keep me interested in the story long enough for the author to finish setting up their premise. And while the style of the prose might not be exactly my cup of tea, it doesn’t detract from the story and I never found myself distracted by it either.

 

Grammar:

Apart from minor grievances here and there and infinitesimal inconsistencies when it comes to punctuation, the grammar holds up well. Nothing that can’t be fixed relatively easily.

 

Story:

This is the aspect where I feel the story shines best. Once you begin to get invested, the steady pacing manages to pull you in, taking you from scene to scene in a very fluid, natural way. And thus far, the time loop elements in the story do not feel forced. Nor are they the main focus. Rather, the MCs time loop ability seems to be integrated into a magic system that has other equally interesting facets (at least thus far).  Other elements such as the socio-political landscape, the world itself, and the larger goal of the story have not yet come fully into play. But the scope of the story seems to be expanding with each new chapter.

 

Characters:

Another compelling aspect of Truth Seeker is its solid character writing. None of the characters seem flat or written in such a way that they’re just fulfilling their role. The MCs intentions are clear and while she is still trying to make sense of the events that have happened to her, we do get a good sense of progression.

 

To sum it all up, I think there is definitely a lot of potential here and a lot of room to grow. Now we just have to wait and see what happens.