CHAOS VINES ONLINE

CHAOS VINES ONLINE

by Asviloka

Do not fear VINE.
You can trust VINE.
VINE will save you.

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Jandru Harolski does not like vine, and that's not fine. Jandru goes to vine confinement shrine online as part of a fine. Vine is fine, and a fine vine. Everyone's metaphors are vines, and also vine. (Not to be confused with vines, which is not vine and arguably not fine, but that depends on whose perspective you're following because it's a fine line. This opinion is mine.)

At some point there is a mine in vine and vines in the mine. Jandru thinks this is fine.

Vines turn vine's vines orange and vines' undermining of vine's mine's fine vine is dismissed as a whine as Jandru tries to make wine from vine with vine tokens and token vines.

Kia, finely entwined with Jandru and the metaphorical vines since long before the under mine undermining swears off vines but not ivy and exactly how much of her is fine or vine or not fine or vine is undefined.

Jandru's justice fine is now just not fine but Jandru is increasingly fine since the undermining vines under the mine just find ways to make vine whine. The whole thing entwines into a fine diabolical design which may or may not be vine's or vines' but definitely features vines. 

Jandru grows to accept his new life among the not-so-fine vine vines in his fine, but is it really fine? Will ivy win after the mine, or will vines? Where is it okay for vine to cross the line, where is that line defined online, and what will happen to the system design? 

Find out, in Chaos Vines Online. It's fine!

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Although I have only read one chapter (because that is all that is currently out), I am interested to see where the author is taking this. It is a nice build up of tension with hints of a world that is not quite right.

This sounds like a very serious GameLit with a different kind of VINES.