The Love of a Lazy Potato with Cheats- MCU FanFic
- Sexual Content
- Traumatising content
A man dies and get's to live again, as part of a mysterious entities entertainment, after agreeing to be part of it. [This novel is MCU, not Marvel. There is a difference between both.]
TO NOTE FROM AUTHOR- READ THE TAGS BELOW AND ABOVE!!! If you don't like any of the tags please don't read it.
This is my first time writing fanfic. Remember the first 30 chapters are intricately linked. Somethings won't make sense unless you read the first 30 chapters and all the authors note. If you can't be bothered to do that and drops it before that then goodbye. I don't need you announcing that with a review or chapter comments. If you want to leave then leave, don't announce it like a child seeking attention. I don't give a damn if you leave.
This novel is not for everyone. It is aimed at a select few audiences who likes the romance genre and small amounts of actions. So don't read it if you are expecting anything else.
I don't need you to tell me which direction to take my MC and my novel for the plot and how to utilise my MC's powers. This is my novel so I decide what to do with my MC. You either suck it up or drop it!
Also, I am not looking for readers who want to change my novel or my MC. You either read it and ignore the minute plot holes, things that make you uncomfortable and deal with the fact that there are some things here that you can't make sense of cuz this is a fictional world or drop it.
I won't bother to respond to every single haters, logic spotters. But I do welcome grammar corrections.
If you don't like who the MC is, again just drop the book. Don't come saying I don't like MC change him because I don't appreciate you enforcing your ideas into my novel.
There will be heavy 18 plus sex scenes and violence so don't read this if you don't like those kinds of things.
Not good with writing so don't expect perfect grammar or sensible sentence. I welcome grammar Nazi's to come forth and point out to me mistakes with the suggest edit functions.
This story will have one of its main focus as Romance tag and his relationship with his love interest. Also, the plot won't be heavily changed from MCU, even though MC tries to change parts of it, so be cautioned if you like heavily changed plotline.
This is a free novel. Any attempt to translate it without my permission and taking money for it from people will lead to me taking down this novel.
If you want to translate this, you ask me permission and you do it for free. Otherwise, you are not allowed to translate my novel no matter which bigshot country you come from.
Romance, Drama, Strong MC, Exploring Emotions, Lemon Scenes, Sexual-Content, Average Looking MC, MCU, Not Harem or Polygamy, 1 Love Interest, Slice of Life, Exploring Powers, Rated 18 and above, Gore, Pre-written novel.
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The MC's powers are interesting and have a lot of potential, they aren't explored particularly thoroughly (apparently due to the laziness of the MC) which holds it back some.
Sure an immensely lazy person might just be happy with one exploit for their powers but a person that lazy wouldn't put in nearly a smidgen of the effort the MC puts in to things like playing the flute, for example. I get that it's easy for him but it still takes effort and he puts more effort into it than trying to understand his powers.
This also applies to their basically complete lack of interest in doing any research on the world they find themselves in. The MC knows something about the MCU as the author does but doesn't really look into anything and just kind of hopes for the best. That's not laziness, it's stupidity.
That being said, I don't hate it, the power is interesting enough and has enough potential that even their lack of exploration of it is fun.
The main issue with the story is it's writing. I don't know if the author is young, if English isn't their first language or what but they either don't read their work before posting or they don't have a particularly good grasp on the language.
The story is riddled with errors, sentence structure in places is off, spelling and grammar is pretty bad, to the point where it would be an almost full time job to try to correct them. I don't say this to be mean, this is a warning for people that can't handle that sort of thing that this isn't a story for you.
Characters are pretty flat, I've not read particularly far, only about 19 chapters, but up until this point all the characters interactions with others have been glossed over pretty much, the dialogue is wooden and unemotive, and the poor grammar only detracts from that. Conversations are hard to read and follow when English speakers are speaking in pretty broken English.
The depiction of Stark shows it fairly well too, it takes a certain skill at writing to show a character like Stark, where he's witty and sarcastic in a charming way. In this story he's just rude and aggressive. Again the quality of writing detracts here because it's hard to depict an intelligent character when you can't write fluently.
The amazing reviews are clearly just readers from another site that enjoy the story that have followed here and are supporting the author. That's fine, but it's worth knowing that only positive reviews are going to follow since the people who don't like the story are obviously not going to come here.
I want to be clear, this is your story, I do not want you to change how the character acts, I do not want you to change what happens. Unlike what you seem to believe and maybe how others treat them a review isn't a demand for the author to change.
This review is purely to inform those who are interested in reading this story on it's quality.
I truly wish you well in writing and it will only improve as you go on. I would like to warn you now that you will likely suffer a lot of negative reviews (0.5 starts in particular) in the near future as people don't seem to recognise that there is more than 5/0.5 stars. Don't let this disuade you, you have a fun story, that clearly a bunch of people enjoy and I hope you enjoy writing it.
Part of the reason I leave this review is that the kind of people that will read and be turned away by a review like this and as long are not your target audience. Many of them would start the story, give it 0.5 and leave, I write this in the hopes that they turn away and leave your story be.
Nothing here is a personal attack on you, it is not meant as an insult to say the quality of your writing is poor, again it is merely a warning to potential readers
Seeing this pop up on Trending, I thought it would be worth checking out mostly because the author's warnings were ten times longer than the actual story description. If anyone is wondering, the premise is that the protagonist dies and is reincarnated in the MCU with three-ish superpowers. The relevant one being that he can command his mind to do something and it will do so to the best of his ability. Work out, memorize textbooks, process and understand information, everything he wants up to and including learning to play the flute. The concept is interesting, being able to mentally sit back while your body and mind operate at 100% is an intriguing power, but the execution makes it into more of a lackadaisical power fantasy than interesting fanfiction.
Style: Fairly choppy, sentences are rarely organized into paragraphs, and words are frequently reused in the same sentence. It's been pointed out by others, but most action relies on "I did this. I did that. I did the next thing." There are very few moments where one statement flows into the next, instead of just hopping into another sentence.
Grammar: It's not the worst I've read, but it's pretty rough. Spelling errors are relatively rare, but incorrect word tense or conjugation, missing articles, and odd phrasing are present in nearly every other sentence. My assumption is that they aren't writing in their native language, which makes for an impressive accomplishment but leaves a lot of room for polishing.
Story: The concept is interesting, how far could someone go if whether they wanted to do something didn't matter, but the execution is a bit bare. The author's defended avoiding worldbuilding by setting it in an established universe, but it doesn't erase the issue that the MC lives in a hollow world. He has no friends, no relationships outside his family, and only takes off two weeks in the 16-18 years after his arrival. All he does is go to school, work out, and play his flute. He gets a Masters degree from Oxford (skipping undergrad?) and then jets off to the US in order to dismiss Stark and contact Pepper Potts. The issue is that he has no motivation or purpose, no reason to antagonize anyone despite doing so, and a vested interest in staying unknown despite revealing himself. Given that his only drive seems to be laziness, it seems like he should just be content hiding out, scooping up tech, improving his toys, and just enjoying being a millionaire. He laughs at the idea of being a vigilante or a hero, but he never stops to consider what his actual goal is, instead periodically explaining things in hindsight. I get that the author very firmly stated that he has no desire to hear readers trying to rewrite his story, and that's fine, but there's a fundamental lack where the protagonist has no goal, purpose, or plan.
Characters: Not great. I've touched on this a bit already, but the only character that isn't wallpaper is the MC and he has little to his name. In the first 18 chapters, nobody does anything except for the MC. No one notices him working out 3-4 hours a day in the orphanage, no one notices that he aces every subject without studying, no one notices anything about the 20-year-old turned 6. And then after nearly two decades of carefully hiding, he outperforms an entire arms company in under a week, inviting governments, Hydra, and other companies to hunt him for fun, before antagonizing Stark for no reason. Does he want to hide? Does he want to rub the inferiority of others in their faces? What does he want?? After watching him grow and set up on his own, I couldn't tell you what the main character's personality is. Incipient villain seems closest, but I'm pretty sure that's not supposed to be the case.
Overall, this is a story. It has a neat premise in a familiar world, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired. If all you're looking for is a power fantasy that takes the MCU by storm and presumably hooks up with one of the Avengers, this will probably scratch that itch. Otherwise, I would recommend heeding the author's words and avoiding it.
Nothing really super standout yet about the author's style yet. It has a great deal of potential and sounds like something the author has a passion about.
The author seems new and it shows a bit in the writing. There are no major grammar issues for spelling, my only critique for grammar is the overuse of the word "I", a common enough problem for many new writers.
The story is interesting in the basic cheat ability of the main character. All the advantage of working hard without any of the consequences or will power to do so. The mc may become a back seat driver and side character to their own power even, interesting to see how it goes.
For Style it needs just a bit more descriptive parts though once again a real common issue all writers come up against early on.
That being said it is a fun idea and the author has that spark in their writing that shows promise. Looking forward to seeing them grow as an author and for the growth of the story.
Worth giving a look through for sure!
Dozens of rave reviews made me expect an outstanding performance, but the story showed very few advantages.
The main character justifies the title of a lazy and average intellectual potato.
For 20 years, he did not bother to explore the mechanics of his superpowers, acting in the rut of the first discoveries. Superpowers and their names are the only positive things I've found.
The author's style does not inspire empathy for the hero, it creates a sense of a cardboard world in which even such mediocrity as the main character can shine. Scenes of human interaction raise huge Mary Sue flags. Seriously, the first interaction with Stark killed any hopes of a good read.
If the main character, who is positioned as smart due to superpowers, has average intelligence, then the author has to make everyone else either empty or complete idiots, unfortunately.
The author did not bother to describe the process of planning and thinking of Dave, his awareness of the results of his decisions. This gives the impression of impulsive stupid actions, the suicidal recklessness of a headless chicken.
I couldn't bring myself to read this to the point where the romance begins, sorry.
You should certainly try the story yourself, just moderate your expectations. I really missed the review that describes the downsides of the story when I started reading, which is why I'm so upset and bitter about it.
Finally found you my lord, it's has to be one of the best marvel fic for me, the character feel real and not one dimensional, and MC is smart know how to use his power fully and not thinking with his dick, overall it's good fic that really worth reading
All Hail Potato
Awesome character development, props on not doing harem, also props on the gifts he received.
I love the romance... These days nearly all stories showcase a horny MC who just wants to fill every hole in the Universe.
Good luck Potato Lord.
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a great story one, with good growth and development of character and of the couple as such. I recommend them to everyone in search of new stories with touches of action in the middle of romance, I hope this great story continues ... I just took half a star from it because it was difficult for me to find it as a Latino who still does not speak English
I started reading this because I'm currently in a Fanfiction phase of reading, i've done cultivation, standard jap isekai and much more, now I'm all for Slice of Life and Fanfiction, and this is both in one, and to top it off, MCU!
The story starts out very good in my opinion, you get to know his powers and while very confusing on how they work, the MC (and author ofc) uses these powers in ways no reader could have imagined at the beginning.
He does his own things and he has his own plans for whats to come, since this is just MCU and not all of marvel, he already knows every important part, but made only one mistake. He fell in love with someone he never thought he would. (Mistake as in it wasen't in his plans to fall in love suddenly)
The romance.... The romance is only of the biggest reasons I'm so in love with this fic, it feels real and I love it. The romance partner is someone many fanfiction writers gets wrong when it comes to romance, but the author managed to pull it of perfectly in my opinion.
As mentioned above, I love slice of life, and cooking on top of that makes this so much better. I do not expect very much cooking later on, due to whats happening in this story as well as MCU story.
For those who wants to know more about what kind of person the MC is, he is a cautious, paranoid and insanly smart. If people ask who the smartest human in MCU is, everyone would say Tony Stark, no doubt. The MC kicks Starks ass when it comes to intelligence. The MC knows pretty much everything, he took advantage of his school days to read every single book, in every single library he could find. He uses his ability to read and understand every single book. It takes time, but he just needs to skim through the books and his ability can later read it and understand it.
I totaly recommend this to anyone looking for a good MCU fanfiction with Romance. If you are looking for Harem, gtfo, you wont find it here, luckely.
I came for the OP MC in MCU, but stayed for the romance.
Continue the great work author, your novel is just simply amazing. Hope you get over what happened from the past because this novel is just full of great things. I can see how hard you think through to made this novel because of those complicated yet not really so complicated things like those potato abilities and some things about extremist and the hulk serum and this is just too good, need nerfed bro, also, you're cool man goodluck to this one.
It's great that you have started uploading here. In general from what I have seen the people are more mature on this website than on webnovel.
Now onto the story. It is a very cute romance story. No harem. The MC is a broken baddass but still does fall under the consequences of his own power.
You can't after all live normally when you are basically on auto-mode all the time lol. Feelings suffer.
Can't wait to see what more you have in store! The entire dynamic between (spoiler female character)
and the MC are great. They open up to each other slowly and really resonate. The action is also there, though the focus is on the romance.