ThanaTopiary

ThanaTopiary

by gej302

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A first-person slow-burn reincarnation slice-of-lives, with system elements.  An exploration of personal growth and the costs, benefits, and consequences of rebirth.  Drama and psychology play the lead roles for the first arc.  Reincarnation is not rapidfire, each life is important.

Living hadn't ended well, but dying came with its own set of complications.  Now, I get to do both again (and again .... (and again) .... ).

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue:  End at the Beginning ago
Chapter 1: Begin at the (Second) Beginning ago
Chapter 2: Phenomenal Cosmic ... Disappointment ago
Chapter 3: Algebra Pays the Bills ago
Chapter 4: Unexpected Connections ago
Chapter 5: Abrupt Disconnect ago
Chapter 6: Recovery Mode ago
Chapter 7: No Place Like ... ago
Chapter 8: Acknowledging My Giants ago
Chapter 9: Practice Makes Progress ago
Chapter 10: Keeping up the Ractice (no P allowed) ago
Chapter 11 Exercise makes Exhausted ago
Chapter 12: Job Quest ago
Chapter 13: Different Man, Different Job ago
Chapter 14: Paradigm Shift ago
Chapter 15: Putting Mental in Experimental ago
Chapter 16: Supper and Suspicions ago
Chapter 17: Not-so-heavy Mental ago
Chapter 18: Working Stiff ago
Chapter 19: Dining with the Boss ago
Chapter 20: The Room of Wonders ago
Chapter 21: Rockin’ my Parents’ World ago
Chapter 22. My Horatio Moment ago
Chapter 23: Neither Master Nor Student ago
Chapter 24:  Changes Take Time ago
Chapter 25: Post Haste ago
Chapter 26: I Hate Waiting ago
Chapter 27: Will Work for Food ago
Chapter 28: Parental Progress  ago
Chapter 29: Conspiracy ago
Chapter 30: More People, Less Secret ago
Chapter 31: Wheels within Wheels ago
Chapter 32: Back to School ago
Chapter 33: The Better Letter  ago
Chapter 34: Small Slice of Humble Pie ago
Chapter 35: Exploring the Senses ago
Chapter 36: Some Sense, no Sense Ability ago
Chapter 37: Return of Post ago
Chapter 38: Deck the Walls ago
Chapter 39: Chores and Change ago
Chapter 40: Dinner with the New Boss ago
Chapter 41:  Off to Omni ago
NON-CHAPTER ANNOUNCEMENT... ago

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A reincarnation story for cozies and slice-of-life

Reviewed at: Chapter 5: Abrupt Disconnect

Style:  Slice-of-life, reincarnation, cozy.  The story starts slow and the beginning is slightly rough (the life review goes on a bit before the plot even starts).  PoV is first person with simplified LitRPG elements- minimal tables.  Suitable for teenagers to adults, children would probably get bored too quickly.  

 

The cozy and reincarnation aspects are greater than the LitRPG here, so readers that enjoy such tales will not be appreciably discomfited.  LitRPG primary readers and those looking for action and adventure are not the target audience here.

 

Story:  The plot only starts moving after the MC dies in the first chapter.  The lead up to this reads as infodump rather than background.  Later chapters have aspects that depend on this information, though, so it is not completely wasted, it just might need a different look.

As a reincarnation story, you get the messy bit from the get-go.  It isn't dwelled upon, though, and the plot progresses with decent pace after the slow start.  Chapters 2-5 have better pacing and flow than the prologue.

 

Grammar: No major issues at all, very few minor ones that do not detract from the story.  Clean, and well edited.

 

Character:  Characterization evolves slowly even for a slice-of-life story, but it isn't off putting.  This is not a story where the character grabs you by the throat and drags you into his world, this is the story of a quiet, somewhat nerdy man who has his passions and principles, but isn't directly confrontational.  

 

Overall: The kind of story you read on a quiet evening, not the kind you read to get your blood pumping.  Not a bad tale at all.

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Ill be completely honest, the prologe and ch. 1 are a bit of a slog to get through. Chapter 2 leaves a few questions open that could have been answered then and there such as what the technology level was at, what the MC looked like, the name of his family members, ect. but by the time i finished chapter 3 i was hooked, the worlds lore really opened up in that chapter, and i will be keeping up with the story :)

This story offers an unspactacular MC in a world with a unique low-power magic system, set in an era not often explored in modern fantast, especcially Isekai. A great set up for a slow burn series.

my biggest critisism is that it took a while to understand the tone of the story. the prologue tried to be funny and sad at the same time, and chapter 1 was just mc exploring his new life and felt like a prologue part 2, so it wasnt until chapter 2 that the feel was properly flushed out.

Aside from that my only real complaint is the lack of characters. the entier story as of chapter 3 has been inber monologue so we dont know any other characters, or their opinions of MC outside what he himself has infered.

moredread
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Good slow burn story about reincarnation

Reviewed at: Chapter 13: Different Man, Different Job

Great writing. Its most definitely a slow burn. Maybe it will change later on, but its not a ton of litrpg. In the first reincarnation he is learning magic in a very realistic way. 

Your not going to get any plot armor.  No huge power jumps that make little sense. Just a nice slow progression. Its still pretty early for a review.  But its definitely got my attention.

LilBreh
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Quite flawed, but also quite original in the genre

Reviewed at: Chapter 31: Wheels within Wheels

I have a bit of trouble understanding what style encompasses, so do take that into account.

The style.

There's only one or two time skips. It's not mentioned in the literal "10 years later" form, but it is there and can be felt somewhat. It happens when he's a baby and skips to maybe when he's learnin in school a bit and again until he's leaving. I don't like timeskips, though at least they weren't explicitly mentioned.

The story. 

It's quite slow, but at the same time seems to go real quick past some stuff I'd like to actually see. It's not mind-numbingly slow, but still slow. It doesn't feel very exciting and the emotional stuff is annoying a lot of the time.

Grammar.

Doesn't really have any problems, everything seems at least good enough.

The characters:

The MC - the whole "problems with the past" and "opening up to his parents" parts felt a bit out of place. We hadn't seen much of his character, except that his teenage hormones made him a bit horny, but at the same time guilty, because he had a wife in his past life, which is why the breakdown was unexpected and felt a bit out of place. We saw he had some problems, but because we didn't see how he interracted with his parents, the breakdown, once again, made no sense.

Mc's parents - caring parents, quite normal, aren't (or weren't, more accurately) into magic.

ShopGuyWhat'sHisName and his wife - the last two somewhat memorable characters.

The girl - bait for when mc's hormones act up, honestly not very needed in my opinion.

Demiurge
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This story is a novel approach to the reincarnation / magic discovery genre.

This story gives us a breathe of fresh air with old ideas created anew and new ons being introduced.

There is inspiration from other works but the result is new and refreshing. Keep up the good work, you've got some mad skills and ideas. :)