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I have always thought I would live out my life without any major surprises. You know, work on the estates of my parents, serve my time as a soldier, become a senator, a praetor, maybe a consul in time. I thought I will live the life that a Roman noble of my standing can count on.
But this was not to be. My previously simple life got suddenly very complicated. I was taken from my home, and now I have to live in a world where no one speaks Latin, no one prays to my gods, and no one knows what the heck garum is. Before, I thought I had all the answers, but now only questions remain.
Will I survive? Will I find my way back home? Will I ever be able to get the savage bastards living here to adopt the great accomplishments of Roman civilisation?
Not even the gods know the answers. One thing is for sure: should I ever get home again; I will never set a foot outside of my estate without a healthy stockpile of garum.
The cover is from Peter Paul Rubens' "The Death of Publius Decius Mus"
This webnovel is partially based on a DnD campaign where a party of three players played the adventures The Sunless Citadel, The Forge of Fury and The Witches of Westwater.
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Disclaimer: I am one of the editors of the book, and a participant at the D&D table as well, so take my review with a grain of salt. Or a sack of salt, your choice. On the positive side, I have read the entire book already. Multiple times if you consider the rewritten chapters and the D&D gameplay.
This is, where the author struggles the most in my opinion. There is too much internal conversation going on inside Publius's head. A bit more description of the environment would be better.
I can't complain, since I took some minuscule part in creating the story. Everything outside the D&D game, the first two chapters, for example, is very well thought out, and enjoyable to read. The story of the D&D game is not designed to be a novel, but the author managed to split the story when required. I only wish he would do it more often.
Grammar score: 5/5
The end product is as good as it can be. Early manuscripts were horrible, and I did some editing myself, so I am probably biased here.
Character score: 4/5
Despite the first-person view, sometimes I have difficulty to relate to Publius. Jim's character could be seen as inconsistent as well, but there are reasons behind that (I won't spoil it). Beldrak is the most amicable among the main characters, but he has a relatively simple personality compared to the rest of the group. The side characters are well represented, with just the right amount of detail.
Overall it's an enjoyable read, with a unique premise, interesting situations, and good dialogues.
This was an enjoyable story about a Roman guy caught up in an isekai (not caused by truck-kun) who becomes part of a newly formed adventurer party. He learns new languages, fights lots of monsters, and generally makes a good ruckus wherever he goes. This story was a lot of fun to read! :)
Roman legion guy in strange situation. Yay! In a novelization of my dnd campaign. Ug.
Well written, good grammar. The Soldier Doesn't Know Anything jokes get old quickly. Well, to me anyway. Your experience may vary.
And really, it wouldn't be so bad, except it seems like a very generic 5th edition game. Tieflings exist. The soldier has silver coins, the coin of the realm is gold. Every adventurer has 50 feet of rope.
fluent dialogues and amusing good monologues nearly as great as the ones I see and visual novels like fate hollow ataraxia and sables grimoire.
But as good points,
you can easily imagine what is happening.
there is no difficulty in understanding the events which I personally don't like much but I guess all other readers will.
I love the plot, not the greatest but it is pretty well written, and I love the premise
am no good at grammar yet so 5/5 no need to think much
They are just perfectly written each with a different personality.
am not gonna spoil much so I will leave this at the note that I did not give the character score a 5/5 because I just don't like them that much on my own.
I think you should read it. and not spoil yourself anything before reading the story as it is
I really like the idea of a Roman noble being plucked through a portal and deposited in a typical fantasy world. I think it's clever, teeming with potential. There are plenty of opportunities to play up the comedic elements.
The writing in this story is alright. It can be a bit cumbersome in sections, but, overall, still pretty solid.
The author clearly knows a lot about Roman history, which shows. It almost makes me (as a minor classics buff) wish for more of the Roman section, though I am still intrigued by the portal fantasy aspect. It is a bit strange how quickly the protagonist adapts to all the oddities of the new world, which gives the whole story ever more surrealist, satire vibes.
Overall, a fun read.
I think you should give it a try. At first from the premise thought it would be a LitRPG but its not! Its a Fantasy, and I think it's a good one. I am a bit confused by some terms about historical weapons, but that doesn't necessarily ruin the story for me. In fact, I don't know much about Roman history but you can stilll understand most of the the things Publius is talking about, and I think that's a bang up job.
I struggled to find anything bad about this story, and I hope to see more good things from this author.
I love the way its written. I can easily imagine scenes and what they're wearing. I don't struggle to remember or pronounce names either! The way some parts are written makes the reader wonder , Is Publius just confused, or is this really a threat? which I love.
No problems to be found. My only qualm is that it needs to have the paragrpahs broken up more for an online reading format.
The High fantasy trope is tried and true but this one doesn't seem boring. The premise of a Roman in a High Fantasy world is unheard of. I think its also interesting because maybe he'd fit in quite well. A belief in multiple gods and mythological creatures to living in a world where they are real would be a shock to anyone, but he might have a better chance at adapting.
I really love the premise.
Character Score 5/5
I feel like the characters have their own personalities.
I especially love how Publius has a reason of being a humble noble. So tired of seeing people raised in the lap of luxury somehow be humble and understand to everyone... which I doubt ....
Publius on the other hand is humble because of his lineage, and it makes him a great hero!
I feel sorry for Jim. Why are people so speciest?!?! Leave Jim Alone!
Full disclosure - I am one of the book's editors, and I registered to review this book specifically. Take everything I say with a grain of salt. On the other hand, I have read the whole book already, so I have that advantage over other reviewers.
The author suffers in white-room syndrome but makes up for it with the fluent dialogues and amusing internal monologues. There is some decent witticism in there. Though I won't lie, there are also some cringe moments. All in all, the style is ok, I guess.
It's based on a DnD campaign, so the author is not actually the one who came up with the plot. I guess that's why it's of acceptable quality :P
Thank God for us, editors, because I swear, the author is illiterate! His grammar is simply beyond salvation, his punctuation is especially atrocious. The man can't tell a comma from a semicolon! We, editors, have toiled and sweated blood to raise the text to an acceptable quality. There are still typos remaining presumably, but it's all the author's fault, I refuse to take an ounce of responsibility for them!
There were three player characters in this DnD campaign, so the narrator is but one of the main characters. I think Publius and Beldrak are rather enjoyable as they are, but Jim is not as fleshed out as he could be. The side characters have a unique voice, which is good, I guess. Speaking of NPCs, keep in mind that we are talking about a DnD dungeon crawl, so the enemies' choices are sometimes suboptimal - that's just how the genre works. In exchange for that, there are also instances when the players fuck up something and fall into a trap.
Overall this book is an editorial masterpiece if I do say so myself. Read it, and reflect on the vanity of authors, who refuse to give credits to their conscientious and hard-working editors! Vanitatum vanitas, indeed.
So far, the story is both entertaining and engaging, it has made me laugh a number of times. There clearly has been quite a lot of thought thats's gone into the planning of this work.
The writing flows smoothly, and is quite fast paced, without feeling rushed in the slightest.
There are quite a few people and a lot of action happening right at the start (I am terrible at remembering names) and some latin words and history in the mix.
Against all expectations this does not distract from the story (I was initially a bit hesitant to read this book for this reason). But rather, it is written in a way that is quite amusing and easy to understand without being patronising or preachy. It quite successfully draws the reader in.
The writing is smooth, and funny. The author has a distinct, humorous style, that you'll recognise in the story, author's notes and comments. I love the consistency. He uses expressive language, the scenes are set just right, vivid without being too descriptive or giving the impression that he is trying too hard.
It draws you in, I want to know what happens next and will continue reading the story. Some of the actions are a bit random or abrupt, but I believe that is due to the DnD inspiration and absolutely true to the genre.
The grammar is pretty much spot on. A few mistakes here and there, but nothing that would stop me from reading. The author also corrects anything that's pointed out to him, so I expect the few mistakes to be disappearing soon.
Each character has a clear personality, that's apparent by the way they talk and interact. I think this is one of the main things I like about the writing, even if you only meet a character for a short while, they seem authentic and thought out.
A unique take on the isekai trope. Really promising and refreshing.
I'm at the end of chap 6 when writing this review.
Grammar is excellent and i havent spotted any mistake. reading comments and reviews, the author seems to edit his work, which is always a good sign.
Style is simple and fluent, giving the story a nice pace and a good balance between contemplation, dialogues and action. The few skirmishes were easy to understand. It lacks a unique take as it borrows on 5E DnD.
Story has a unique setting: a Roman getting thrown in Dungeon and Dragon 5E. My only take with that is that it makes the author consider we are familliar with DnD, not doing much world building, considering we already know the DnD world. There are a few historical inaccuracies that bothered me (MC seems to be fighting with the sammites yet the IIIrd war was already ended by the date he refers to [edit: my bad, romans still fought samnites during the punic wars afterward]), same goes for the manipules organisation or the capitulae censi mustering (they were not mustered by definition).
Althought it is a minor blame, it is also what makes the story unique, so it feels all the more frustrating. It takes more from rome total war than from actual historical material.
Characters : MC is fine, he takes the isekai far better than one could expect from a roman who never read any such story ^^ there is some justification with his manes.
I'd like him to act more roman though : swear in latin, appeal to his gods and laws more, complain about his caligae, refering to his lorica an scutum rather than plain shield and armor.
I can only hope it gets more fleshed later on.
Conclusion : This is a very good read well worth your time if you are looking for a refreshing take on the isekai genre.
Althought i would like it to exploit more the unique historical side.
Maybe taking some time to gather some historical material on roman daily life, to make it sound more plausible and bring some nice triviae (for ex there is no "yes" in latin, having MC talk in periphrases until he gets used to the notion of "yes" would be nice)
It is also really promising, the setting allowing for so many more possibilities if he isnt the only earthling to get isekaied (imagine if he is to meet with a samurai, a napoleonian Dragon or a fierce Zulu later on)
I'll definitively read more of this.