Path of the Dragon Mage

Path of the Dragon Mage

by S.G. Seabourne

(LitRPG/GameLit)

Born magically talentless, Prince Corvus is an embarrassment the royal family and is removed from succession. However, he still has a chance to win back his throne. The next man or woman to hatch a dragon automatically becomes the ruler. Each member of the royal family is gifted with a dragon egg, but it is the work of a lifetime to hatch it.

The first time Corvus touches his dragon egg, he receives an odd notification: He has found a soulbound item and is tasked with an epic quest to hatch it... but only if he can walk the winding path of the dragon mage.

Armed with notifications, skill increases, and levels only he can see, Corvus is determined to hatch his dragon.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. The Dragon Egg ago
2. The Bastard Prince ago
3. Escape ago
4. Path Chosen ago
5. Betrayed ago
6. Starting Skills ago
7. Honing Skills ago
8. The Key to Magic ago
9. Rune Magic ago
10. Special Attribute Penalties ago
11. Minor Act of Rebellion ago
12. See-Me-Not Rune ago
13. A New Quest ago
14. Level 2 ago
15. Bitter (Sword) Work ago
16. Quest Difficulty: Medium ago
17. Swarm ago
18. Boss Fight ago
19. The Value of Deception ago
20. Interlude ago
21. Unwanted Visitors ago
22. Dual Wield ago
23. The Village ago
24. Scholar's Apprentice 1 of 2 ago
25. Scholar's Apprentice 2 of 2 ago
26. Mother of Dragonets ago
27. Seen ago
28. The Long-Eyes ago
29. Dragon's Secret Part 1 of 2 ago
30. Dragon's Secret Part 2 of 2 ago
31. The Closed Gate ago
STATS UP TO NOW ago
32. Grinding Runes ago
33. Vial of Blood ago
34. Quest Complete ago
35. Horseman's Offer ago
36. The Spy ago
37. Solt's Past ago
38. Corvus's Future 1 of 2 ago
39. Corvus's Future 2 of 2 ago
40. Moon Scorpions ago
41. Daughter Scorpion ago
42. BOOM ago
43. Intermediate ago
44. Moon Essence ago
45. Go Back ago
46. Blood Oath ago
47. Consequences ago
48. A Polite Kidnapping ago
49. Mother ago
50. Frozen In Time ago
51. Deadly Bouquet ago
52. Charm ago
53. A New Path ago
54. Moon Breath ago
55. Parting Advice (Part 1) ago
56. Parting Advice (Part 2) ago
57. Path Walker (End of Book 1) ago
Book 2 (Nomad): 1. Runic Tattoo ago
Book 2 (Nomad): 2. She's Not a Horse ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 3. The Blight ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 4. Horse Maiden's Mercy ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 5. Quest Update ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 6. The Killing Field ago
Book 2 (Nomad) 7. It's Not The Size of The Rune... ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 8. Okay, It Is The Size Of The Rune ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 9. Trapped ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 10. Blot Out The Sun ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 11. The Daffodil Dragon ago
(Nomad) 12. Interlude 1 of 2 ago
Book 2: (Nomad) 13. Interlude 2 of 2 ago
(Nomad) 14. Breakout ago
(Nomad) 15. Death From Above ago
(Nomad) 16. Loot ago

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Noctis479
Overall

Interesting start so far! Early days as I'm only on the 4th chapter but the story is well written, and the premise seems interesting! 

The main character seems realistic, doesn't suffer from being either far too confident/smart for his age or a total wimp like many of the genre fall into.

Look forward to seeing where this goes!

Elliot_Flanders
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How To Take Royal Road By Storm

Reviewed at: 13. A New Quest

Story: 4.5/5

After starting off strong with his first fiction Colonize, S.G. Seabourne has returned to enthrall readers with a gripping tale of magic and political intrigue. With Path of the Dragon Mage, the author has taken a classic formula and executed it with a high degree of skill—and then added an additional, compelling twist.

We begin the story by following Corvus, a noble youth seemingly without magical ability. His personality has been shaped by social rejection and feelings of inadequacy, and the author is meticulous in emphasizing this, as well as in depicting the dysfunction of his politically scheming family. With only a dormant dragon egg in his possession and the mysterious text of a system that appears before his eyes, Corvus soon finds himself thrust into unfamiliar circumstances that put his wits and resourcefulness to the test.

Many writers would be content with this tried-and-true structure for their story, but our author has some surprises up his sleeve. The inclusion of seemingly anachronistic terms like “photosynthesis” is clearly calculated, and indeed the story’s VR tag indicates that Corvus’s fantasy world is not as straightforward as it seems. The nature of the story’s system remains mysteriously unexplained, and we have no doubt that the LitRPG elements will play an integral role in the narrative. One minor issue keeps us from awarding a full five stars in this category (spoiler for chapter 8): 

The MC learns how to use magic in an anticlimactic way, with the knowledge he needed for a breakthrough being handed over on a silver platter. A major development of that nature deserved more buildup and effort on his part.

Style: 4.5/5

The author has an engaging, eminently readable style, varied in its imagery and competent in its descriptions of the protagonist’s thought processes and emotions. Without relying on flowery or ornate language, the author is also capable of crafting strikingly vivid scenes, as can be seen in this description of the king using magic:

There was no warning. The wall that separated the antechamber to the royal receiving room simply melted away as if the stones were made of soft wax. The stonework, marble, and the golden filigree puddled to the floor like liquid and ran in rivulets...

On the other hand, half a star has been deducted because a number of sentences are slightly awkward, or require minor tweaking; for example:

The violently pink egg was cool to the touch and inert in a way he couldn't quite explain. Like touching a stone statue completely without movement.

This sentence is perfectly understandable, but doesn’t feel quite right because “violently” should be “shocking” (a shocking pink) and the phrase “stone statue without movement” is a little odd, as it can be taken to imply that statues ordinarily do move. While little issues like these don’t come anywhere close to spoiling the reader’s enjoyment, they do crop up from time to time.

As for the story’s Lit-RPG elements, they are judiciously employed and clearly one of the story’s strengths. They are well written, appear when appropriate, and are not used as a crutch to compensate for proper story telling, or as superfluous padding to extend chapter length. Essentially, Path of the Dragon Mage is a hybrid story, midway between a conventional fantasy and a Lit-RPG. Thus far neither aspect outweighs the other, and the result is an agreeable read with much to appeal to fans of both genres.

The author does, however, have to make sure he preserves this healthy balance: in a recent chapter, the protagonist kept himself from weeping, which promptly unlocked the skill, “Emotional Control.” This may be a little excessive; our fear is that if “not crying” is a skill, the MC’s profile and skill list will quickly assume daunting proportions as the story progresses and more and more abilities are acquired. So long as this pitfall is avoided, the story will remain stylistically appealing up to its conclusion.

Grammar: 4/5

The author favors simple but functional sentence structures, and he is diligent in keeping the story’s tense consistent. On the other hand, there are a few niggles to point out: punctuation is occasionally missing, some commas are superfluous, and typos are not an uncommon sight. These issues are becoming less and less prominent as readers point out mistakes and the author fixes them, but it does mean that the story’s early chapters are generally smoother reads than its latest releases.

Characters: 4/5

Though the involving narrative will understandably draw and retain the interest of most readers, we must also make mention of the story's commendable characterization. The protagonist is convincingly presented as a self-doubting, well brought up noble youth, with whom we can readily sympathize. The product of a troubled upbringing, Corvus is clearly lacking in self-confidence, but not to a wearisome degree, and his character arc promises to be significant. Accordingly, we look forward to seeing his growth as the story unfolds.

As for the rest of the cast, some side characters (such as the MC’s father) have received less development than others, but there are hints of underlying depth. Many of the characters speak to Corvus with ulterior motives, and there is an ambiguity behind their words and actions that will keep readers wondering what twists and turns lie ahead in the narrative.

In terms of tone, from the royal Aunt Sunli to the rough-speaking Solt and the commoner Gwen, every character possesses a distinctive voice and we have no difficulty keeping track of who’s who. Where the author can improve is by accentuating class differences; though the dialogue of nobles and commoners certainly differs, the effect could be strengthened by making peasant speech more dialectal, or noble speech more elevated.

Overall: 4.5/5

The author has laid an excellent foundation for a highly entertaining coming of age story. A must for LitRPG and fantasy fans alike!

Chipcarver
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This story is just starting out, and already the main character has a well developed personality. The story is exciting, but also even-paced. The idea of several different types of magic working together in the same world is quite intriging. I can't wait for the dragons egg to hatch! - - - -

Sugarbunny123
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My opinion on the story is: in short: its great. In long: It is a great story that reminds me of many novels that I have read.

FEEDBACK SANDWHICH:

The good: I loved how the story implemented the system and being a dragon mage. And while at the time of writing the story has not explained why he has this power. It makes up for the fact he was born without the same magical ability of his piers. I enjoy this to a great extent but this isnt even the BEST thing!!!.

The bad: Yes, yes all stories have their flaws and this one is no different. The biggest flaw I could find at the moment was The egg choosing ceremony. It felt just a bit bland. He picks it out of a regular room with only 1 person watching. The room isnt even that fancy. Now I see the reason for this: He needs to be alone for this choice. However I still somewhat struggle with the lack of "Power" from the room. Otherwise the book is GREAT and don't let this 1 small flaw ruin it for you.

The 2nd GOOD: 1 extremely good thing about this book is the way the egg is implemented. Even though it hasnt hatched yet at the time of review. It reminds me of Eragon mixed with rangers apprentice so far. I do VERY much enjoy how the story is communicated in the first person aswell. It never seems to fail.

The grammer seems good.

The spelling seems accurate.

The author is nice. 

The story has promise. and so far is AMAZING.

So yeah worth a read.

hakatri gin
Overall

Personal growth and Status growth

Reviewed at: Interlude

This story has a double-angled hook (double-runed hook? huehuehue), on one side we have a coming of age adventure where a naive teenager sets up on a journey to know the world and find himself, and at the same time we have a story about a discarded magician discovering his true power and grinding the numbers to become overpowered

This makes a progression where there is always something happening, but the variety of power ups and personal development keep the story fresh and engaging

Another good choice is the MC's personality, as he is book smart but has lived a sheltered and repressed life, which allows him to discover the world organically, but without the need to make him dumb

His inborn skills complement this idea as he is naturally gifted in some areas and very bad at others, which makes it necessary for him to mix max himself or to find another way to overcome his weaknesses

Also, he has a system but lacks the context of videogames to understand it and has to discover things as he goes, this makes his cheat feel grounded because he lacks the knowledge to abuse it and can make mistakes

So far the current 20 chapters have been dedicated to setting the foundation of the world, its magic systems, the geography, the people and so on, because of all this detail the story feels really promising

Owlish
Overall

tldr: I like it, give the first few chapters a try.

The fancy cover caught my eye, thought I'd give it a read. It's fun, clearly going to be a The Chosen One Saves The Kingdom kind of High Fantasy book. The GameLit elements are strong, after a certain point in time dang near everything become a Skill for out hero.

Grammar is good, with a couple of errors that don't really disrupt the flow. Characters are flawed, and everyone has a secret. Or more.

a_man_in_black
Overall

Decently written, but...

Reviewed at: 27. Seen

Grammar and spelling are just bout perfect. Author clearly cares about quality. The problem is the main character. The plot armor is so thick you could mine it to turf a niven ring, because the Mc is utterly devoid of even the most vague notion of common sense or basic intelligence. The only reason he doesn't fall up stairs and break his neck is said plot armor that keeps him alive through every stupid he does.

That kind of naivete was entertaining in the beginning, but since the kid hasn't shown any sign of growing out of it, or indeed, any character growth at all, it's really become quite stale.

Not bad, but not entertaining like the first half was. Will check back after more chapters to see if the Mc looks like they're developing at all and would give more stars if so. Really like the premise.

scorched100
Overall

Has the grammar of a good author and the words are easy off the tongue and are something people would actually say. So far a good and new plot with a new mix of RPG stats! Coming from a guy who looks for something to read everyday from this website, this books a huge diamond in disguise and I do dare call it a book! Description for this book is definitely underrated, give the book a try!

msng
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Interesting Story of an Underdog with a System

Reviewed at: 22. Dual Wield

Appealing story about a young royal who strives to learn magic and hatch his dragon egg, despite his lack of innate magical talent. He has little parental support or respect from those around him, but he has an advantage over others in that he has a litrpg system that provides him with a potential way to change his fate. The writing style is clear and engaging, while the spelling and grammar are generally good (though there are a few minor errors).

The story handles the family drama and politics in an interesting manner and contains a few twists and turns that help drive the story forward. The characters are also pretty interesting, though the only one that we have really been exposed to in any great detail is Corvus, the Main Character; which is not too bad considering there are only 22 chapters currently and that he is quite interesting in himself. He has some fairly stereotypical MC traits (e.g. personal parental issues, intelligent but naïve, physically weak, etc.) but the author is able to mix and portray these traits in a very engaging manner that makes Corvus seem genuine and someone readers can empathise with. Corvus has strengths, but he also has his own set of weaknesses that seem realistic and don’t require him to act like an idiot to generate drama. The side characters are not portrayed with too much depth at the moment, but they seem more rounded and genuine than the stereotypical stock characters that often populate fantasy stories. Hopefully this will only improve as more chapters come out and more is revealed about these other characters.

The story is still relatively new and the chapter release rate is quite fast, so I will update my review as the story continues. Hope this helps.

Review initially written when Chapter 18 was the latest chapter. Updated when Chapter 22 was the latest chapter.

Axyz
Overall

I can't wait for the next chapter, just a few chapters, and is one of my preferred fictions on Royal Road. The characters are credible and well-executed and the worldbuilding is interesting that show instead of telling. Is simply a very good fiction that anybody with a like for fantasy can enjoy.