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Micheal is a young guy in his late teens who just graduated from high school and now he honestly does not know what to do with himself. Sitting in his chair just relaxing and browsing the shit-show that was the internet, doing random shit, he suddenly becomes oddly weary. The next moment he's fuck-knows-where and everything seems rather.... odd?
He was rather confident in himself, that he usually didn't have a 360-degree field of vision, and that everything wasn't always so... gigantic. Something was really off... As if to confirm his thoughts, the very next second a series of prompts invaded his sight followed by a rather soothing voice.
[Soul restoration - Completed!]
[Welcome to Eve]
[Status...... Species: Glade Mosquito.....]
Slowly taking in everything laid out before him, Micheal responded with the most intelligent and sagely response possible.
As such Micheal's unending search for power, adventure, and family begins.
This story features a protagonist with unconventional views and morals. In a world where only strength rules, concepts of good and evil become blurred as they fade to inutility. If you are looking for a goody-two-shoes, upholder of justice, and who goes around unconditionally saving any and all people in distress, this story is most likely not your cup of tea.
It can also get pretty dark and sensual at times, you have been warned.
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Was quite the enjoyable read, emphasis on was.
Grammar seemed competent enough, the story elements such as world and system looked ok, MC wasn't particularly unlikeable and overall it was okay for a light read.
Then as most monster stories do, comes the real kicker with the ever troublesome theme of "interaction with humans".
Leading up to this, the story was fine. Leaning a bit on the OP side of the spectrum, but fine.
Then our MC gets handed one of the most glaringly moutbreathing instances of the "+10 Dunce Cap or Plot Armor" in said interaction with humans and the story moves from okay weak to strong to blatant wish fufillment and self inserts.
The signs were kinda there, him gaining "insert indomitable willpower here" skill, an explicit sex scene where MC makes all female organisms within mile lust after him after hearing how good he made his goblin waifu squeall, killing an old adventurer in front of another one (that he lets go) for rEAsONs and some incredibly stupid posturing worthy of Aloof Edgy Young Master N°533 Version 3 Variation Z, and to top it off... the Guildleader Lady lets him FUCKING GO, after pronptly beating him AFTER HE KILLED SEVERAL PEOPLE UNDER HER COMMAND JUST CUS HE IS SOOOOOO SPECIAL (and she wants his coveniently not-insectile at all dick).
No doubt she is coming back as a harem member later.
Overall, its a competent monster evolution story, but seriously craps the bed the moment interaction with anything smarter than retarded green midgets is required.
I'm an absolute sucker for Monsterstories so I try to be as critical as possible and also highlight what keeps the Story from being good and where it could be improved.
I generally really like the whole "blood" theme and also don't mind the humanoid evolution.
I do however feel like some things were really rushed.
Things that are dragging the story down hard :
-unnecessary early power boosting ( Titles and Isekai Skills )
-Evolutions happen too quickly. 20 days and MC can toy with most professional adventurers.
-Cringe Woman descriptions
-Too much Simpenergy
- ridiculous plotarmor for no reason ( not even armor more like absolutely twist a side characters/antagonist rationality so MC somehow come out of the situations without issues.
-unnecessary povs and weird format for dialogue
-Mc behaving kinda dumb
that said for a first edition of the story I think it's quite entertaining and I will be reading more of it. And maybe update on how it delevops.
Story was alright up to the point where the author started projecting sexuality in the most hormone driven teenage sex fantasy drivel.
The dialogue is boring and stale. Logic for his choice of skills arguably pointless.
Its was decent as a monster evolution story, but when introducing new characters and their interactions it just becomes glaringly poor and sexualized.
Cannot be bothered continueing this while every other chapter is "all these females look at my horrible insectile self with lust filled eyes". Or how every introduction of a new female character by describing how firm their ass looks.
I wanted to like this story, but there were a few big turnoffs. OP's attitude is extremely cringy from the very start, lots of grammar/spelling mistakes, dialogue is just formatted bizzarely and hard to read, and sex/sexual descriptions are shoehorned in awkwardly at every opportunity. In stories like this it's vital to have the main character be if not likable, at least interesting, something that was not achieved here as the MC comes off as an obnoxious edgy teenager.
So I normally never review stories except to rate them. However I had to make an acception for this one. The Dialogue was just that bad.
"You fucker" -me.
Is what did it for me. I just can't.
While the sociopathic Mc was "different" enough, as well as the system didn't seem to take from the story much. The sheer amount of no fucks given about the horrible voices of the characters ruined this novel for me. I hope it gets better eventually but I honestly can't wait around and suffer through it.
This novel can be fun to read IF you ignore the way literally any character that is female is introduced, the way that dialog is formatted, the super horny mc who seems to be the Sitama of sex for some reason, the rate of progression (which could be written off as fast-paced if it wasn't faster than sonic on crack), the fact that he gets a humanoid evolution really early on (and to top it off the first thing he does is check out his dick), the fact that all of the characters have little to no characterization, there is no world-building, the mc seems to have the whole mc aura that draws people to like him.
so let's actually break this down.
style wise the author does a good job of describing what people and things look like as well as helping along with your imagination of what's going, but it is crippled by the horrible way that the author does dialog that makes it boring to read at best at worst a chore. the author has obviously read and likes this monster litrpg genre as they definitely put some thought into evolutions and abilities, but that's about where that ends the evolutions and sills don't feel gratifying they don't feel impactful and we don't get to see them for long enough to really appreciate them. it took him about four days to evolve about three times which is ludicrous in this world settings as it has been shown that for everything else it takes forever to level up, this can be partially explained away with his limit break skill but I think the problem lies more with the exp rates.
Grammer has no real problems it's fine.
story-wise it goes light speed and pulls you along with it nothing that happens actually seems to have any weight behind it like there was little to no actual thought put into why they happen. you can tell that the author will tie things to throw away things in the previous chapters to make it seem connected but you can tell that it was an afterthought. the best example is e blood magic core it was found owned by a small nothing goblin tribe that is only mentioned later because its leader was the leader of a hunting party that ran off this is only used to explain how he got the core, which could have been explained away in many many other ways such as saying that the goblins formed their tribe around the stone and worship it as a god. maybe the goblins chief uses it as a power source for some tribal magic. even then the MC just stumbled across it making him gaining magic, which is a huge deal in this world, have no impact and really ruins it. while the harem part is just poorly written as expected and just as disgusting as any other harem, overall this is what turned me off from the book.
The characters are kind of a hot mess. for some, they feel like they took a railroad spike to the head, and for others, it seems like they only got kicked in the head by a donkey. many of the characters are just side characters and therefore have only as much brain as needed to stand there like a cardboard cutout and the others either have stupid as the main character trait or is suffering some form of hypersexuality and an obsession with either the mc or anything that moves. the first humans we meet specifically remark about how they f the first person in a village we meet is an old man buying sex from a young girl with drugs and cheating on his wife. you would think in a fantasy world people would be more afraid of magical STDs the first female that the mc interacts with at any length sleeps with him at the first opportunity. now of course smut and sex scenes are fine when they are well written but this. this is not it. the mc himself does at least pretend to think things through but still seems to suffer from the idiot plague that everyone else suffers from.
overall this has potential and so does the author but this is the kind of fiction you would expect to see in something fenfoxo makes. honestly, if this was a corporate mass-produced light novel it would be forgivable as just incompetence but this author has some skill that's obvious so this is just disappointing.
tl;dl: Cringey, Edgy MC, Awkward sexual scenes, No world building or foundations of any character development.
Good grammar, no obvious errors on that part although the way how the story is separated line by line can make it a bit jarring to read. This plus the unnecessary and downright cringey sexual scenes/female character descriptions makes the story a struggle to read at some points. While you can have a good story with sexual scenes, the way it's written here is awkward and painful to read.
Main issue with the story is the lack of general direction after the initial chapters where you would typically expect some core world building and general plot points or conflict to be revealed to the reader. So far at chapter 48 you have the name of the country the MC has found himself in, the idea that mages are rare and an idea of how much of an advantage the MC has over more typical monsters. That's it.
Some stories have the issue that the world revolves around the MC but in this case the world IS the MC, barring a handful of names you know nothing about other characters or their personalities beyond surface level obsersations made by the MC when they were introduced.
Theres no meaningful reflection on why the characters do half the things they do and when there is, such as the skill decisions, the choices were minimal in impact and barely a decision in the first place.
The MC is the main reason why I dropped the story, there's one thing intentionally making the main character detached from emotion but you would at the very least expect that he'd make logical decisions.
Time and time again the character has reaffirmed that 'he isn't evil' yet the complete inconsistency of his actions just makes the main character look stupid, in one part of the story he regrets doing one thing only 20 chapters later to do that exact same thing again and whenever the character does something stupid, the story fills in the gaps where it could have potentially backfired. Something that by the point I had read into the story I would have expected to stop by now.
Not good, not average, just frustrating to read.
It's a somewhat decent read if you can look past its flaws and just enjoy a little power trip.
Speaking about its flaws, I think the main one is how fast and easily the MC gets overpower, and by "fast" I don't mean really the number of chapters, although is a little fast you can put that into it being a more fast paced novel, but the time in the world he is in, with 20 days he is already really strong, and with 60 he is stronger than one of the 8 generals of his neighbor country, that just doesn't make sense. The problem was clearly easily fixable, just make those time skips bigger and add a few more chapters here and there, when he goes and kills 55 rabbits in a few hours, even with the intervals for digesting the blood in between, that just doesn't make sense, make that shit a couple of days, when he takes Bob to train and he kills several goblins parties in one day, evolving to a Hobgoblin, make that shit a few days, when he gets imprisoned and fights in the Colosseum, returning home afterward to see EVERYTHING CHANGED IN A COUPLE OF WEEKS, make that shit a couple of months, it's not hard to make it more believable and the author were already doing those time skips, just doing it longer was no problem at all.
Now the misogynistic descriptions of women, that shit is really annoying, I don't know if the author is a teenager and has this dumb thoughts is his head, because the way he always describes how hot or not hot women's bodies are in a very weird manner screams virgin teenager to me. Not only that, but basically all women in this story are crazy sexy fiends, with the MC's "wife" (that calls him master) being the most cringe person I ever witnessed, 95% of the reason she exists is to venerate and have sex with the MC...
That's it, aside from this two big flaws, the story is pretty good actually, not the best, but pretty good....
Keep in mind that I didn't finish reading this. This is the impression I got from the first like 25 pages.
The prose is pretty bad, it's very weird to read and written kinda like a play or movie script but intendet as a novel so what comes out is this weird mess where after every line of dialogue it gives the speaker, like this: " "..."-Me", but in first person, which looks weird especially if you follow it up with an "I said". Not just the dialogue is weird but everything is written very... stiffly, if that makes sense? There's no flavour to the text. It's just a dry retelling of events most of the time.
Aside from the weird prose it is very "male gaze"y. Every new female character is introduced with multiple paragraphs describing her breasts, ass, and just generally how hot she is. Like really? What is this a 20th century noir novel?
Overall I find the story interesting though at times it is a struggle to get through. But it can be worth your time if you can struggle through some difficulties.
The style of the story is fine, but not anything special. The language seems quite generic, but it doesn't really take anything away from the enjoyment.
What does make the story a bit of a struggle for me at least is especially the grammar. Mostly the tense, it shifts from present to past constantly, which can be quite distracting. But at times it also seem as if the auther hasn't had time to edit the chapter completely, as some structure of a sentence is a bit off.
I think the story itself is good though, I can defenitely see the auther connecting many of the strings in the future. Even though it seems quite fast paced when you read how few days Michael has lived there, we still don't know exactly how powerfull Limit Breaker is.
The characters feel very cliché, both in how they act and their interpersonal relations in the different groups. As if their class in the party determines their personality. It makes it feel repetetive whenever a new character is introduced as they dont feel particularly interesting.
Lastly, although the blood magic of the story is quite interesting it doesn't really develop the magic system much after the early chapters, which I think is a missed opportunity as a well developed and thought out magic system makes a world of difference. It feels as if after the auther tried out developing it with the glyphs he chose to focus on other parts, and simply just use the magic effects whenever convenient.