dungeon of the abyss

dungeon of the abyss

by shadowmaster 67

this is my 4th ever story so tell me where i can improve

when  our hero noah got stabbed in the back the persecutor was aprehended

it was too late for noah when the cops and paramedics arrived

he later awoke as a pitch black gem

he was a dungeon what could go wrong

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