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I've read the first 25k words of this story and let me tell you all, you're in for a ride. If you liked Thieves' Dungeon-- this is by the same author, btw-- you'll love this one.
Style is well done and very refined. It's unique and very noticeably NoDragons' style.
Grammar is excellent, as expected from NoDragons. A couple typos on the first read through but I pointed out as many as I could and he fixed them.
The story is compelling, though it felt a bit rushed on the first draft. NoDragons will probably be fixing this. I know he mentioned he intended to fill in some spots.
Characters are unique and attractive. The way they're depicted is very detailed and I can imagine each one individually and perfectly as they arrive.
Over all, if you're looking for a new dungeon novel to get into, this is the one. This baby is a mound of gold just waiting to be mined, and I intend to collect. Expect massive releases in the beginning because there's a lot written already. And get this story on Best Rated!!!
Hop on for the ride, ladies and gents, because Oasis Core isn't waiting for you, or me, or anyone else! It's going!
(Also, I won the bet.)
Overall: I am infatuated with NoDragons's writing style. I've read Thieves' Dungeon, and I'm super looking forward to what he has in store for us - the readers. Watching his follows go up is satisfying, because the way he writes is leagues above his competition. Having said that, I'll get into the rest of the review!
Style: This. This here. This is what makes me come back. His style is captivating, without an end in sight. I want more. Always. I know it's inhuman to ask him to push out any more chapters than he already is, but the way he describes things brings perfect clarity to the world. He ties everything together with great proficiency. Honestly, I'm envious of the way he makes the world feel alive. I could gush all day, but let us continue.
Grammar: Now, if I were to take points off anywhere, this would be it... HOWEVER, creative writing means bending the rules to make something unique. Something that flows well and is enjoyable to read, and Third does this. He takes the rules of grammar, uses them in unique ways that only add to the story instead of detracting. I usually can't get past a story if punctuation is incorrect, but there is no complaint to be had. Everything is seamless.
Story: Oooooh, I love a good underdog fight. I think the thing that captivates me about Thieves' Dungeon and Oasis Core both is his creativity when using what he has to make things happen. Part of the story is seeing how uniquely it can be done, and as a dungeoncore fic, his creativity knows no bounds. The simplest thing can become a great addition to something so simple. I'm very excited to see if/how the core overcomes the god/devourer duo, and if it can restore the world to its former glory.
Character: Ohhhhhh man, this is great. All the characters are unique. The crow in its regalness, the lemurs in their comradery, Ramses in his comforting confidence, aaaaand Shiny-Catch. They're all so well done. I don't feel as though any character is flat, and that is another thing I envy. I honestly envy his writing ability and actively take notes to improve my own. I'm always afraid dungeoncore fics will have the same numb core, buuuuut:
He feels for the struggle of his creations as they fight for him and carry out his will in the world. I love the passion he feels, and - ohhhhh lord - the bats can BURN in Halla's Maw where they deserve to rot and fester.
SAVE MY MAN CROW!
In conclusion, give this story a read. Seriously. It's great, and I figure myself a very picky reader.
This story is good. And I can not stress that enough. The author makes good on their experience when they wrote Thieves Dungeon. They wrote that by the way.
The story follows a Dungeon Core made by who knows what. My theory being a cosmic space duck. On a mission to restore a world some random god leveled into a desert. The grammar is great, I can't find any typo's or anything else. So it beats out hundreds of stories all ready.
If you liked the lonely Dungeon as well than this story is probably for you. As it has a similar world, though not one consumed by an unending hellscape of illegal magic.
All in all. I liked this book and hope you will too.
The grammar is pretty good. At least for me who tends to unknowingly read over minor typos there is nothing that sticks out. And there aren't any weird sentence structures or other weirdness either.
There is a tendency for pure, unexplained evil that is not well explained. This was not obvous at the time of the initial review (at 3 chapters), but by chapter 25 all but two humanoid character (future minion and a martyr) that the MC interacts with are outright sadistic. Now you might say that "Hey, it's a tought world, of course there's killing and stuff", but that does not explain how everybody seems to derive such pleasure from outright torture. I would expect hard sacrifices and tough choices, extreme frugality and maybe some territorial behavior to safeguard the last scraps. Even some killing would make sense, but not that everybody seems to enjoy it.
There is some nice character development going on with the minions. They are introduced to the reader in a fleshed out and memorable manner and the important ones get some time invested to exploring their back-stories. How they adjust to being/becoming a dungeon minion/monster and their personal growth over time is really satisfying to read.
In terms of creating and changing the minions the MCs actions are hard to understand. I constantly (not always) get the feeling that he just does what comes to mind at any given moment and that whatever biologial adaptations he "graciously" bestoved on the victim just happen to almost universally work out.
It is not explained how he can manipulate the very genetic and structural makeup of random critters that happen to enter his domain, and at the same time has 0 influence ove some other "invaders" that are merely slightly bigger or slightly more sentient. Is dungeon-friendlyness/non-hostility the criterion, some arbitrary threshold of intelligence/sentience/sapience, dungeon level, divine intervention, plot-convenience? As far as i can recall none of the creatures tthe MC has changed have affirmatively consented to the changes and many are not originally dungeon created.
To be clear it is described how the changes take place, but it is unclear why certain creatures can be changed and others cannot or are not. It's clear he can accidentally kill critters this way, and something like disrupting the operation of the heart of an invader seems like the obvious (and OP) thing to try, but this is not even mentioned.
The premise and backstory seem to be in conflict.
There are many gods and one of them went insane due to a certain evil being sealed withing by the other gods. He then proceeded to destroy the rest of the world while the other gods were unable to stop him. The mc is summoned to fight back against this god, but because he is absurdly weak at the moment of creation he is given divine protection that at chapter 3 (see "Gods") completely deflects said insane god.
This begs the question: if he can be stopped so easily for the sake of MC, then how come the world had gotten to this point. One would expect that either the resistance was powerful enought o contain the issue, or powerless to protect an entity from the frontal assult of the big bad while their power is at their very lowest.
The meat of the story is the dungeon creating, gathering and evolving minions and trying to ensure his survival. Since he is good-guy-dungeon he also does some nice things like saving lives and cleansing radiation now and then.
(the main complaint at the initial review)
When ever a god and a non-divine MC are set on a course of mutual annihilation there will always be contrivances and top tier plot armour involved down the line. It takes less than 3 chapters for some inconceivably insane god to attempt to murder the MC and some insane deadlines to be set that are impossible to clear without, I assume, epic plot armour and constant divine intervention.
Aparrently there is some gradual transition going on that will give the MC a fightng chance to grow stronger. This still implicitly defers the fate of the MC to the power plays of some deities that she will not have the capacity to meaningfully influence for a long time.
This story is off to a great start! The execution is clean and works well. The main character makes realistic and well thought out choices. The creatures created are also inventive and the story is very descriptive. Overall, the story might become one of the the best Dungeon Core stories in the future!
Our good friend is at it again. for those who missed the thieves dungeon this while not being directly connected in time is definitely in myth.
Good deep characters, plot that is both epic in scope and deep in complexity.
The dungeon here is driven to build for there survival. For the survival of the world and that of others to come.
Mysterys of the world that popped up during the thieves dungeon find them selves in song froming here.
Follow a dungeon core as it seeks to save the known universe. Though it also just wants to keep it's friends alive. Well that and turn the desert green.
Nothing Nodragons writes is bad and this is no different. I was abit disappointed after the end of thieves dungeon but this helps fill the hole. The authors ability to describe and create such fantastical creatures never fails impress seemingly having endless creativity. The prose is great with grammatical and spelling errors being almost non existant so give it a go.
Honestly this is alright but the reason for 5 stars is this. I would get you sued for attempted murder if I wasn't already dead.
The stone’s first thoughts were vague and sleepy. It had just come into existence, and that was a very tiresome thing to do.
Just… A few… More minutes…
I'm dying. really.
This is fun story to read. Excellent characterization, each character has their own distinct personalities,even the non sentient ones, and grammar is excellent with with little mistakes. A well designed system that is easier to understand and follow.and world building is marvelous with great mythology thus far shown. I would recommend this to any dungeon core readers. And looking for to the progression of the story
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Definitely give it a try. There may be a few.tense based typos in newer chapters if that bothers you, but I believe that anyone should try at least the first 5 chapters