The Defective Hermit

by SciFiAddict

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Comedy Fantasy Romance Sci-fi Harem Supernatural Virtual Reality
Warning This fiction contains:
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Vincent Standish had faced a lot of disappointments during the last five years. But things were finally starting to look up for him and in a big way too. While working the late shift at his second part time job, as a cashier in a gas station, on a whim he bought a lottery ticket which had a jackpot that had grown extremely large.


Three days later he was astonished to find that he was one of three lottery winners. With that money he was able to retire, when he had been afraid that he would be forced work until the day that he died, or worse yet living in a cardboard box if he lost his two paltry paying jobs.


Vincent soon found forty acres of land and quickly had his simple and robust dream home constructed. Disappointed in people, it was his avowed goal to be a hermit and shun the world. Too bad for his dreams that only a year after winning the lottery, all of humanity started seeing colored text messages before their very eyes, messages that warned of dire things to come.
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hurt_lock3r
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I feel addicted to this...

Give me my daily dose or else i might, I Might!! I MIGHTT!!!!!………cry. 

MC is hilarious, has brains, and guts to do sh!t, so what do you need more, except for the fact that it’s not  your run off the mill story with rpg elemets, but a completely new concept. But beware it has some massive info dumps in the first few chapters, and those who are fans of world war weapons/vehicles, and some classic vehicles, you are gonna like it a lot. But seriously trying to use SKS with gunpowder lol.

You!..yes You!..just read the fan fiction, you won’t regret any piece of it.

 

PS

My advice to the author- When you are changing POVs, you should write a header/title of some sort to actually mention it, cause when you shift POV from one person to another it makes no sense to the reader who is talking about who.

Armarium
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The defective hermit is a story about people trying to survive after their world has been changed to a mix between victorian/steampunk and magical elements, while losing all their old technology. The story centers around a grumpy man that would rather be a hermit, but is forced due to circumstances and personal morals to become leader of a small but growing community. Hence, the “defective” part in the title. The story as of now is still in its early phase (survival and rebuilding).

Style:
The writing style is unique. The author has a good mix of seriousness and comedy. However, sometimes the writing can feel like reading a long report (which in most cases actually is a report given by a subject of the MC) due to too many details. This may put off some readers while others (like me) like the extra details. A way to fix this is perhaps to make the highly technical stuff optional by use of a spoiler section. Combat scenarios are written good and descriptive so you know exactly what is going on and where, but they can start to feel drawn out during very long encounters. In the early chapters POV changes are unclear, but this has been fixed in later chapters.

Story:
The story is written in chronological order (so no flashbacks or visions) and chapters follow each other up logically. Explanations are often given about certain choices made or events happening, making sure that the chance the reader gets confused is rather low. For a part the story decisions are taken with help of RNG by the author. This makes sure that there will always be unexpected situations arising. The author does an exellent job of showing the thoughts of other characters including the antagonists, this in turn makes you more engaged in the story and provides for some non superficial enemies. Where the story lacks is the emotional department. There is not a lot of inter-family relationships that stir up the characters as most of the novels characters tend to be extremely busy with their jobs.

Grammar:
The grammar is excellent and compared to the average on royalroadl would earn six stars if it could.

Characters:
The MC is well fleshed out and is unique on royalroadl in the sense that he is extremely grumpy but also stands by a really high moral code and has a good sense of humor. There are a lot of side characters and all of them have unique characteristics. However, due to the lack of interaction outside their working conditions you get the feeling you don’t know them quite as well as you would like.

All in all, if you are looking for a well written story in a unique world with long chapters and a (sometimes overly) friendly MC that has a few screws loose you’re in the right place, but if you are looking for a story with lots of bloodshed, a hardcore MC or sex scenes this might not be for you.

Another thing I have to give the author credit for: the author is very fast in answering questions and actively discusses with readers that offer suggestions. A big thumbs up for this.

cbspyro
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Extremely unique, a different take on the gaming world becoming reality

 I really enjoyed both this story and Swamp Boy by this author (If you haven't read it, give it a shot!)

 

The story gives a unique spin on the real world becoming like a gaming world and reality digs deep into explaining the situations unfolding around the different characters within the world.

With the wide range of characters I will admit it does become a bit confusing keeping track of all the different individuals. The MC makes odd choices, sometimes brilliant and then next equally stupid but it honestly helps lead to understanding the MC a bit more. 

 

To those complaining about why the MC isn't going around banging all the women around him and actively collecting a harem as in many other stories, he has been betrayed by multiple women in his life (wife and daughters) so while he goes out of his way to help people, emotionally he is obviously very wary about the repeat happening.

 

Keep up the good work sir!

LifeOfConfusion
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If this were a book, i would buy it. With Big characters and an engrossing world, i can't stop looking forward to the next chapter.

M.Oudekerk
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a really amazing original story

Writing this since 11 chapters are out.

 

This story has me wondering what will happen next all the time, it is original and really well thought out.

the protagonist is serious and hilarious at the same time and can have you laughing out loud from time to time ( so if you're reading this on a train be prepared to be looked at like you're a madman :P )

the story is exiting, well thought out and feels like it makes sense in the situations where it's happening.  and the ''system''(for lack of a better word) on which the world works is really interesting.

the story feels a bit hectic at the moment but i blame that on the fact that it all has just started. and when you read it it feels justified to be so due to the situation.

 the only thing that almost kept me from reading this is the virtual reality tag since most of those story don't really do it for me personally,.but it does not even mention being inside a game or some kind of virtual space at all (at least not to my knowledge) and i think it's more there for the world's system.

 

all in all i like this a lot and will definitely stick around

00Yang
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Addictive, Can't stop reading

Fast paced. Things are getting done in every chapter and the MC is also likeable.

Vatan
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This fiction is awesome. The author really put some thought into the story and it shows. I especially enjoy how the MC while powerful is not OP so the story is very interesting. When the MC comes up with solutions to his problems he has to be creative and can't just tank enemies. I would say the only downside to this fiction is that we need to see the MC acting like a Hermit by at least turning some characters away from his compound but we only have 14 chapters right now so its excusable at this time. 

wacjob
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Great story!   Vince needs to become even more curmudgeonly though! :)

cyanBlue
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I love the story, it is very well done and creative. I especially appreciate how well thought out the story is, and how the characters react realistically to the situation. It must have taken a long time to come up with this world and these characters, and it shows in a good way. I look forward to the next chapter! 

 

Also, the chapters are long so don’t wait to read if you are worried about the number of chapters. 

xvan
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Think of Walking Dead with Aliens

This is a Sci Fantasy world Apocalypse Survival mash up, with  some VR troops. Somehow the author managed to not screw such a mess by giving OP dangers to his OP MC.