The Joy of Evolution

by baitlol225

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"Alright, so I have this idea, a completely original one by the way, never done before." I say.

"Alright, lets hear it." You reply happily.

"What if you got trapped in the body of a tentacle monster that looks like a virus in a world that is like a videogame, with skills and... whoops slip of the tendril there, what I meant to say is Mutations and Levels as you evolve your way up from being that lowly creature into a slightly better lowly creature, all the while, an evil devil person watches over you for entertainment purposes." I say making weird hand gestures across the table. "Oh and that main character used to be a human male and uses its past experience as one to survive in this new world as a little mass of flesh." I pull out a little ball with suction cup tendrils and show you. "So, what do you think?"

" I dont know seems, a little sameish, I think Im gonna go." You say as you start to get up from your worn but still plush velvet chair.

"Wait" I sigh, " I didnt want to do this but you leave me no choice, I promise you an extremely diverse harem..." The door closes as you leave.

"They'll come back." I say hopeful.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Mother?! ago
Abusive Mother! ago
You either die of starvation or live long enough to become the chew toy, I hope its not true. ago
This Better not be Devolution! ago
I scream, You scream, We all scream for Tree Carrot ago
Guide to Parental Bonding for Tentacle Monsters ago
The Endurance Baby Strikes Back ago
Out of the Frying Pan and into the Gas?! ago
Try to Stop me Now, Millipedes! ago
Who Needs a Refund, When you have Gilbert ago
The Cake is not a lie, but is in fact a Hermit Crab ago
[You have reached level 10] ago
Mutation Galore ago
Be like a Crab, Snip like a Cake ago
Cake Therapy ago
An Unusual First Encounter ago
It's a Lizard eat Lizard World Out There - Ch. 17 ago
The Bullet Proof Plan got G-Bombed - Ch. 18 ago
Krrrrr%Second/2nd/00:00:01 Evolution%rrrrt- Ch. 19 ago
Guess who became the Chew Toy - Ch. 20 ago
A Monster can have a Brain-fart too. - Ch. 21 ago
Even if You Throw Logic Out the Window, It still Landed on Your Lawn - Ch. 22 ago
A Stalker's Valentine - Side Story #1 ago
[Nothing] To *smack*....See Here - Ch. 23 ago
Cake's Glowing Transformation - Ch. 24 ago
How Can Cake Be So Sweet! - Ch. 25 ago
A Part-time Parasite Becomes a Full On Leech - Ch. 26 ago
Moving on from Gagging to Mantis-ing - Ch. 27 ago
A Mantis Named after the "World's Greatest" Pizza Topping - Ch. 28 ago
I Wonder What a Kiwi Dream's About? - Ch. 29 ago

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LordJJ
Overall

This is surprisingly good I expected wierd tentacle jokes and trash to kill some time. However it turned into an interesting monster mc dungeon survival. It reminds me a lot of so I'm a spider so what. It's pretty funny to some of the jokes miss but generally it's good. Hermit crab waifu has also been implied so there's that to look forward to.

definitly give it a try.

ishner
Overall

Good enough to recover from an error.

Reviewed at: A Stalker's Valentine - Side Story #1

Pretty good, though the description is way off the mark. No harem at all so far (unless we are counting the literal pet crab), and the MC is a legitimately interesting and creative beasty with only a passing resemblance to Generic Tentacle Monster 3B. Also, there was a very interesting and creative twist added at the beginning of chapter 19...

T̶h̶e̶ ̶a̶u̶t̶h̶o̶r̶ ̶m̶e̶s̶s̶e̶d̶ ̶u̶p̶ ̶H̶A̶R̶D̶ ̶a̶t̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶e̶n̶d̶ ̶o̶f̶ ̶c̶h̶a̶p̶t̶e̶r̶ ̶1̶9̶.̶ ̶S̶t̶i̶l̶l̶,̶ ̶r̶u̶n̶n̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶i̶n̶t̶o̶ ̶a̶ ̶b̶r̶i̶c̶k̶ ̶w̶a̶l̶l̶ ̶h̶e̶a̶d̶ ̶f̶i̶r̶s̶t̶ ̶a̶t̶ ̶a̶ ̶f̶u̶l̶l̶ ̶s̶p̶r̶i̶n̶t̶ ̶i̶s̶ ̶a̶ ̶l̶e̶a̶r̶n̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶e̶x̶p̶e̶r̶i̶e̶n̶c̶e̶.̶ ̶F̶o̶r̶ ̶a̶ ̶n̶e̶w̶ ̶a̶u̶t̶h̶o̶r̶,̶ ̶I̶ ̶a̶m̶ ̶w̶i̶l̶l̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶t̶o̶ ̶f̶o̶r̶g̶i̶v̶e̶ ̶a̶s̶ ̶l̶o̶n̶g̶ ̶a̶s̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶y̶ ̶l̶e̶a̶r̶n̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶i̶r̶ ̶l̶e̶s̶s̶o̶n̶s̶.̶ ̶I̶ ̶d̶o̶ ̶r̶e̶c̶o̶m̶m̶e̶n̶d̶ ̶r̶e̶a̶d̶i̶n̶g̶ ̶a̶n̶y̶w̶a̶y̶ ̶a̶n̶d̶ ̶j̶u̶s̶t̶ ̶m̶o̶v̶e̶ ̶s̶w̶i̶f̶t̶l̶y̶ ̶p̶a̶s̶t̶ ̶t̶h̶e̶ ̶e̶r̶r̶o̶r̶. The author went back and changed it. Normally I dont support revisionism but is this case it really was that bad.

some total kretin
Overall

I quite enjoyed this little progression grind filled story until the point the system started screwing her over.

There are probably people who enjoy twist like that, but the step from snarky condescension to acts of active manipulation/sabotage - even if in the end selecting the appropriate option - just went a step too far for my enjoyment.

Seleucus
Overall

Dropping it around the eight chapter.

The premis is standard with an interesting twist around chapter seven. The author makes an effort to add humor, and succeeds to a reasonable extent. (you probably gathered as much from the intro.) From what I saw, the author also seems to be active in the comment section, which is always a point in his favor.

Main reason for dropping is that the early chapters that have a tendancy towards run on sentances and poor punctuation. Nothing that an edit couldn't fix.
Personally, I also found that the story was written in more a of a happy go lucky tone. I felt that suspence suffered a bit because of that. Again, personal taste.

tl dr; solid premis with a few surprises, sometimes poor punctuation and a specific writing style.

sandro530
Overall

This is quite enjoyable, a budding harem, which doesn't seem to go into any wrong directions. Nice comedy reminding of "Kumo desu ga, nani ka?", if the release rate stays the same this story should quickly grow in popularity with time. All in all a great story, I am guessing the MC will soon turn into a human/humanlike and become a hero/villain.

But while this is a great story at the moment, many things are yet to open up. About the condition of the world, the heroes and villains, superpowers and mana/magic. And most importantly the MCs goal and path in all of that chaos.

VerdantHerald
Overall

As per the other reviews it does seem very similar to what that spider novel might be about, it's fem-fiction, monster-to-human (probably) and it's got twists.

Between the expansive types of monster abilities, the humans having their own equivelent and sentient god like entities instead of a proper system, it's definitely something that could grow to be a mainstay series.

Carson6319
Overall

The synopsis reflects the rest of the story. 

Light hearted, silly fun that uses very basic often disjointed language. 

Definately the kind of story that you read for a laugh or a 'oooh cool hermit crab girl'. 

The author has started alluding to a larger more indepth world which is nice because I can see the being stuck in a volcano stick becoming bland. 

All in all I would say give it a go if you enjoyed reading the synoposis you should enjoy the rest. 

N0b0dy
Overall

This story is about an MC dropped into the heat of it right from the beginning like the famous spider. And just like that story with one has been a blast to read. This story is filled is pop culture references that will put a smile to the face like an episode of Rick and morty. If you are looking for a serious story this isn't for you but is you are looking to smile and maybe even laugh a few times for the next few hours I would suggest this story.