Immovable Mage

Immovable Mage

by ImmovableMage

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Traumatising content

What do you call a mage incapable of casting spells? In this story, we usually call him Terry.

When the boy is accepted into Arcana Academy, his talent in the pillars of mana foundation awes everyone. All the bigger is the eventual disappointment when Terry turns out to be an utter failure at spellwork.

Diagnosis? Major aspect impairment. No cure. Ever.

Faced with expulsion, Terry is blessed with the unexpected kindness of others. Terry loses his spot in the Academy but in exchange, he finds a home with a family.

Terry starts to train as a pure mana cultivator but never stops looking for his own path as a mage – day after day, season after season, always searching for compatible spellwork…

Until finally, Terry’s perseverance earns him a single spell – the only spell he will ever be able to cast.


Disclaimers:

Chapter Frequency: I aim for one chapter a week.

Chapter Length: I try to keep chapters between 3000 and 6000 words.

Binge Preference: I plan for 30 chapters per arc. If you want to binge a complete arc, then that is the number to wait for. I will also add a line to chapters indicating the beginning and end of an arc.

Advance Access: I have created a patreon page with early access to four chapters for patrons.


What to Expect:

Progression fantasy with a western fantasy setting and with eastern fantasy elements.

A main character that is forced to explore a very narrow path of magic due to a permanent condition.

A main character that is a part of a larger cast.

A main character that is growing but won't become the strongest around anytime soon.

A story following a single main character but with introduction or theme setting scenes without the main character.


What Not to Expect:

Edgy grimdark characters – I will never write a sexual violence scene or gory descriptions of torture. I hate reading it and I would hate writing it even more.

Romance – romantic relationships will never be the focus of the story and only appear in the background. The main character is preoccupied with other stuff. Other forms of relationships (family, friends, companions) play a bigger role.


Cover: The cover art was commisioned from redditor Linh-Nguyen87.

The font is alita brush by Inovatype Typefoundry.


Overview:

001–030 Arc 1, Cultivating Perseverance: complete.

031–060 Arc 2, Undying Defiance: complete.

061–090 Arc 3, Unyielding Fury: scheduled for publishing.

091–120 Arc 4, Savage Hope: scheduled for publishing.

121–150 Arc 5, Self-Made Fate: first draft in progress.

151–180 Arc 6, Heretic Style: sketching in progress.

Further Arcs are still in the sketching and idea collection phase.

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100 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
001 Prologue: Spoiled by Talent ago
002 Prologue: Aspect Impairment ago
003 Prologue: Path of a Mage ago
004 Prologue: Primer on Mana Cultivation ago
005 Prologue: Friends ago
006 Prologue: Family ago
007 Immovable Object ago
008 Experiments and Conditions ago
009 Cloud Badger Hunt ago
010 Looking for Companions ago
011 Revisiting Thundervalley ago
012 Intermediate Class, Introduction: Mana Cursed ago
013 Multi-Mission Trip – Outbound ago
014 Multi-Mission Trip – Inbound ago
015 Advanced Class, Introduction: Dungeon Work ago
016 Dungeon Work – The Realm's First Line of Defense ago
017 Advanced Class, Examination: Bounty Hunting ago
018 Bounty Hunting – First Blood ago
019 Bounty Hunting – Verdict ago
020 Of Friends and Companions ago
021 Warming Up ago
022 The Demon Is Vanquished ago
023 The Impenetrable Woman ago
024 The Weight of the Vow ago
025 Devastating Difference ago
026 Standing Together ago
027 The Dungeon's Challenge ago
028 Whaka Against the Odds ago
029 The Dark Night After the Dungeon ago
030 Diverging Paths ago
031 A Family's Faith ago
032 Disappointing Expectations ago
033 Progress Follows Focus ago
034 Correcting Assumptions ago
035 The Angry Naked Mage ago
036 Deathguard Scout ago
037 Investigating the Disappearances ago
038 Helpful Guests ago
039 A Small Horde ago
040 Welcome to Syn City ago
041 Living in Syn ago
042 Blood Debts ago
043 Home Is Where the Dog Runs to Greet You ago
044 A Nice Accomplice ago
045 The Abyss Lord and the Aspiring Hawker ago
046 Kindred Spirits ago
047 Haunted by the Dead ago
048 Allies ago
049 My Kind of Family ago
050 Vacation in the Wastes ago
051 Arrival in the Libra Outpost ago
052 Calling Home ago
053 Traces of Trouble ago
054 An Unusual Suspect ago
055 Clashing Guildheads ago
056 The Face of Tiv's Guild ago
057 The Devil Inside ago
058 Terry Style ago
059 Charlie Foxtrot ago
060 Facing the Music ago
061 Lessons to Be Learned ago
062 Gifts and Rewards ago
063 Shifting Perspectives ago
064 Stupidity at the Preacher's Reception ago
065 A Glimpse Behind the Curtain ago
066 Learning From Others ago
067 Forming a New Group ago
068 Demon Fortress ago
069 Demon Advancement ago
070 Departure From the Libra Outpost ago
071 Channeler's Guidance ago
072 Burst Techniques or Bust ago
073 Meet the Dungeon Scavengers ago
074 Extended Family ago
075 Dungeon Scavenger's Adulthood Ceremony ago
076 Reanimated Hellspawn ago
077 Haunting Demons ago
078 Return to the Libra Outpost ago
079 No Way ago
080 Frustration and Anticipation ago
081 The Spirit of the Valkyrie ago
082 Of Principles and Faith Questioned ago
083 The Legacy of a Legend ago
084 The Spark to Light a Fire ago
085 Bring It ago
086 Elemental Fury ago
087 Greetings From Arcana ago
088 What Is Necessary ago
089 Demonic Evolution ago
090 Calamity ago
091 One Person's Hope is Another's Dread ago
092 Retrospection ago
093 Shenanigans ago
094 Something I Can Do ago
095 The Difference a Year Can Make ago
096 Nominated Emergency Mission ago
097 Awakened Wrath ago
098 Hardened Resolve ago
099 A Ripple Across Two Empires ago
100 Stepping Into the Tiv Empire ago

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JKincaid
Overall

This is a story that I have tried to get into again and again, but the flaws constantly get in the way of what could  be a good story.

The world is well thought out but the MC gets lost in the wash of other characters.  The MC is constantly surrounded by way too many characters, perhaps as a way to pick up the slack for his ridiculous handicap.  Instead of trying to make his single spell develop into new, interesting, or baddass applications, it gets treated more like a gimmick that's not explored nearly enough in favor of using gadgets to make the MC semi useful in combat. 

He's never really forced to rise to the occasion beyond just experimenting with gadgets because he's again constantly surrounded by another team of cardboard cutouts with names and powers.  

Another issue is the almost impenetrable dialogue.  People are almost nonstop speaking in magic jargon that's almost impossible to follow what anyone is talking about half the time.  

Arcane_Pozhar
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Fun read, could use some editing and pacing help.

Reviewed at: 030 Diverging Paths

As my title says, it's a fun read. I like the characters, they feel real and have some nice dialogue. There's occasionally even a surprise or two, where characters didn't develop the way I thought they would. The setting feels consistent and like there is a lot more to see, somewhere out there in the grander world. There are some pacing issues (particularly info dumps near the beginning), and the occasion sentance that just flows in a very weird manner. Oh, and maybe it's just me, but I don't have a very clear visual picture for a lot of the characters. However, this issues didn't stop me from enjoying the story. Oh, and sometimes the dialoge could use a clarification of who is speaking, when there's a lot of back and forth going on all at once.  With all that said, I still look forward to more! I think with a small amount of revision this story could become one of the trending stories on the site. Makes ke wish I had read this story with paper and pencil nearby, so I could have taken note of the funny sentances and other little spots that were a bit rough. My apologies to the author.

 

Stillness
Overall

There are some interesting parts, but the story gets lost. There are two major issues for me.

One, the amount of info dumps is excessive. The author trys to explain the world so much that the story feels like an add on. A lot of information isn't that critical to the story when it is being introduced and the rest can be shortened. 

Two, the writing style could be improved, by which I mean, the way the author constructs sentences and paragraphs. As it is, the writing seems a bit inefficient and ineffective.

Sesselhocker
Overall

Could go from great to exellent

Reviewed at: 030 Diverging Paths

I greatly enjoyed reading about the characters and their development as well as the world they live in. The characters start out one-dimentional but develop and grow into more than that. However I so think it has some issues: 

1. Some scenes can get messy which makes pacing and clarity on what is happening suffer.     ( My advice to the author: try spacing the paragraphs out more and if possible make them smaller but more of them )

2. We are (as far as I am aware) never given any proper information on appearance and age of the different characters only such descriptions as old,tall,short,sideburns,beard .Which makes it hard to get a concrete image of them. It also makes the Image I have in mind seem a bit incongruous ( the young dwarves have beards but act like fifteen-yearolds !?)

 

KingLionex
Overall

Way, way, way too much info dump, you could condense that utterly excessive prologue into like two chapters and still get the same point across. It was a complete slog to read. Some people like that but most people don't. I suggest refining your style a little, and focus on writing less words but putting the same amount of data into them.

Teja Sunku
Overall

I've enjoyed reading this story. I think the characterization was good, and I enjoyed the plot and worldbuilding as well. I think the magic system was especially well done, and the brief depictions of dwarven culture that we get didn't make me cringe like many other attempts at fantasy worldbuilding tend to.

There are only two main points of criticism that I would have to give. The first is that the beginning of the story is rougher than the rest, especially when it comes to the first few chapters. I tried reading the story a few times before and dropped it, but now that I've read it all I don't regret doing so. The second criticism that I have is that I think the summary is a little misleading. In my opinion, being limited to just one spell didn't actually seem to be too much of a handicap, but rather was mainly just used as a way to get him kicked out of wizard school. We see some creative uses of the spell for sure, but he has other options available to him. He does have some progression though in that he is able to find ways to augment the use of his one spell, but that progression tends to be somewhat slow.

In the grand scheme of things, I think my two criticisms aren't really big problems. I enjoyed the work, and I would recommend this story to anyone else who might be interested in a good adventuring story.

 

Belga
Overall

A well written engaging story

Reviewed at: 071 Channeler's Guidance

Immovable mage is not the most original of stories. 

Young mage with talent encounter a massive roadblock that should theoretically cripple him as a mage. Fine.

But damn is it well written, well thought out and in a very well constructed world.

Characters are believable, multi-faceted personalities, the interactions are nice.

I have nothing bad to say about the writing, the grammar or the vocabulary used. Some sentences flow better than some others, but all in all a great read.

Keep the chapters coming.

MeowMix
Overall

Skip the first 9 chapters

Reviewed at: 030 Diverging Paths

Until the first 9 chapters (up to Cloud Badger Hunt) are removed I can only rate this as 3.5. Without the first 9 chapter I would likely rate this as 4.5.

The first 9 chapters provide very little in setting, characterization and plot. They have enough you might miss a bit without it, but you're still better off not reading the first 9 chapters.

After the false start, it properly picks up, it develops our cast it introduces characters that matter more, it gives depth to characters we barely met. 

The story then is dungeon diver with a twist. The main character by all measures is only impeded by his disability. It's a disability through and through. He has the passion, the talent, the work ethic, to have been one of the greats. He has disability that makes him only able to use his singular spell and he makes it work. He makes it work. He doesn't excel, he works at above standard for his career. Mind you this is with a good dose of nepotism from his adopted parents.

The dungeon diving is fast paced without rushing through, has an exciting lore, that keeps tensions higher, and has wonderful fauna, that intrigue and worry. 

It takes a while to get to the dungeon but there's a realism to adventuring that's often not present in stories. Not all party members are the right ones, some simply aren't quite cut for it while other cause other problems.

Outside of the dungeon I find difficulties with the setting. There are capped pens and books are quite common. The city that they reside in isn't well described the prologue, we hear of small towns. One point mentions the protagonist thinking about science beyond the setting and presumably beyond the protagonist, but we're never given a great description of the world itself.

Theres good lore and history to the world, but the world itself ain't quite there. 

Jaksterzoo
Overall

Normally I don’t review anymore due to being harsher in my reviews and opinion. Reading up to chapter 30, I’d say I would recommend.

only giving a normal review without much effort, so sorry author...

I am giving this novel a 5 star because I felt strong emotions near chapter 29-30 and the entire story had good logical development. I loved reading the entire time and I really appreciated how there were few to no grammatical errors that I could easily find. Made for a good read and I honestly can’t find any fault with the entire novel. Even the characters I didn’t like, I understood and wasn’t thinking ‘Please Kill This Character. Now.’ Instead, I thought ‘huh, stupid kids/teenagers.’ 

Again, would recommend and loved reading this entire novel, thumbs up to the author 👍 

 

Brightest void
Overall

It is a solid story, starting with an interesting premise Immovable Mage has maintained quality writing so far. The characters are interesting and even with obvious flaws that are recognised in world they are likeable. The story manages to keep the balance between exploring the world, magic and emotional well-being of the characters. You won't find characters acting irrationally without good reason be it prejudice or misinformation. This is a solidly constructed story where each character have depth and their own motivations which are made clear throughout the story.