A Ten Pound Bag
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A serial saga with short chapters published each and every morning to read over your coffee or tea. This is a "versus life" story with no great evil to face just life in a hard place during a hard time. Our hero and his companions get catapulted back in time and must find a way to not only survive but prosper.
This story is definitely "R" rated maybe even NC-17 but don't expect explosions, blood and orgasms at every page turn. Bad words and uncomfortable topics are addressed in this story, this is not for every reader.
This is a technical story and develops slowly at first, full technical details, maps and research are available over on Patreon.
I hope you enjoy this story as much as I am.
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A so so slice of life of a man sent back in time
The twist being the MC goes back so loaded with supplies and support characters the only way it could have been even more extreme would be if he went back with the contents of a Costco warehouse.
Add in a harem subtheme and it's clear this is wish fulfillment territory that is as also a time travel story
However, the writing's not bad and the characters are more or less consistent with decent grammar... until we reach a line in the sand for myself
We have MC, a white man, explain to a black man, that he (the black man) will face racial discrimination in the southern US during 1800s America. This is after they both attend a slave auction.
Maybe this is a story for you, but this strikes me as being insensitive to race issues and is not a story I can recommend because of it.
I love time traveling kingdom builder stories, and there aren't a lot of them out there. If that genre is your jam, you should definitely check this one out. The writing isn't bad and the author creates some good moments. Honestly, though, I think you'll enjoy the story more if you literally use the table of contents to start the story at Chapter 30. Up until that point, you get a little bit of character development and a lot of contrived reasons for the protagonist and his party to accidentally end up back in time fully loaded with everything they could possibly need for survival. While I appreciate the author trying to provide that justification, it took a ridiculous amount of story space to do it.
Note that there are harem elements in this book, and the story suffers from a lot of the same issues that infect most harem books. One notable difference is the lack of extreme lovey-dovey reactions from the participants. Instead, this story takes an almost 180 degree different tack where there is an almost complete lack of emotional connection between any of the characters.
The biggest problem I had with the book is that the protagonist came across as unlikeable to me. Honestly, he's a bit of a jerk, and I don't understand his goals and motivations.
The story really picks up, though, when you get to the meat of the story. There's still the harem crap and the jerk character, but I liked the kingdom building aspect enough to keep me reading. When I got to the end of the published chapters, I was dissappointed that there wasn't more available, which says a lot!
A couple of genre nitpicks, though:
1. The characters never worry about the timeline. In most books of this type, the characters either deliberately set out to change things or worry about the butterfly effect that their actions might have. This story had no discussion of potential consequences and only the vaguest of hints that the protagonist has some kind of plan. Instead of withholding information from the reader, I think the author would have been better off having the protagonist lay out his plans and discuss the merits and problems. As it is written, the character's actions ring false.
2. The characters give lip service to hiding their advanced technology but then recruit a bunch of people and display it all openly. I don't get it. Is their technology being discovered a problem or not?
Was mediocre, boring, and nothing I expected. Felt like I was reading a quick journal entry in the form of bullet points. It's mostly goes here does this and that's about it... What makes me not want to read this anymore is not only the fact that its written like a bullet point draft, but also questions that are not answered to keep you enthralled and create suspense? Made me literally say GET TO THE POINT and Im pretty patient, but 15 chapters of character creation broke me.
para pessoas que gostam de histórias lentas, isso é bom. bom desenvolvimento, muito realista com caráter bem desenvolvido.
MC é um cara normal, sem poderes e não é inteligente, aceita que precisa de outros personagens para fazer as coisas.
Estou gostando até agora, espero que você possa ter uma longa e boa história.