What LITRPG There is Only Needlework [Hiatus]

tl;dr - I noped out real quick cause the grammar * and nothing else was worth sticking around for. If you don't understand, try reading the first paragraph of hte story. 

Story: 3/5

This story is entirely uninteresting. The idea is completely unoriginal. A System gets introduced to the world, and MC struggles with the initialization, the MC acquires some special quirk early on that will inevitably be the thing that carries them to dominance. Bleh. Oooh, the MC is a crafter! Also done, many times. 

The story gets 3/5 because it, like most of its components, is solidly fine. 

Style: 3/5

Strongly meh. Neither good nor bad. Not interesting but not distracting. It's just uninspired. We haven't seen dialogue, but the character's inner thoughts are handled in a decent fashion. Neither brilliant nor horrible. The flow is fine, if a bit stilted sometimes.

Grammar: 1/5

Whereas the style wasn't distractingly bad, the grammar is. The first paragraph was a hot mess. Each chapter is riddled with minor mistakes, and most have larger, very confusing mistakes. I got to chapter 8, where the author confuses a language, a religion, a country, and a people all at once, and gave up right there and then. 

Character: 3/5

The MC somehow is the best part of this story, and she's solidly 1-dimensional. She's not the typical LitRPG combat-obsessed murderhobo. Instead, she's got some other obsession. One-dimensional characters can be pretty dull, but sometimes they can be entertaining. In the first 8 chapters, it was decently entertaining, and held the story together even as nothing else did.

The thing that was supposed to make this story different was that the protagonist is supposed to only care about sewing at the expense of all other things... but then she goes on to barely sew. The things that get in the way of her sewing aren't important, if she's not sewing then there's nothing that sets this apart from every other system apocalypse story. The system doesn’t need to be designed in a way that forces her to constantly fight monsters.

The main character is flat. Mostly because the majority of the characterization she has is that she only cares about sewing, to the point that she literally ignores the apocalypse happening in front of her eyes, but then few of the actions she takes actually reflect that. She just ends up another template character in a system apocalypse novel.

The spelling, grammar, and punctuation pushes it over the edge though. I have no idea how it is possible to make some of these mistakes, maybe it’s being written through text to speech or something. Some of them are understandable but should be caught in post, like using "taught" in the place of "taut", but some of them are... something else, like using "alive" in place of "a lie". All of them ruin the flow of the story, break immersion, and make you pause for a second as you struggle to parse the sentence and figure out what it's supposed to mean.

The dialogue isn’t punctuated, lacking periods and commas, and switches between double and single quotation marks. I know it’s supposed to notate that the spider isn’t actually speaking aloud but come on. Just write a sentence saying the spider isn’t speaking aloud and make sure to reiterate that fact if it’s ever important in the moment.

You need regularity and standardization if you want the reader to be able to read this with any sort of ease and comfort. Using all these little tricks just makes it ambiguous.

The first chapter was good.

I love the mc so much. I love that she is just so obsessed with needlework, and that is all she does. I love her personality, how straightforward she is, her friends, everything about this book is amazing. I love how the apocalypse is done, I love the system, I cannot find any faults within this perfect book. That is because I am weird though. Love it, and I hope this will be revisited soon!

I've read quite a few stories on Royal Road and I don't write reviews for most of them.  I will simple state if you like Litrpg, and system apocalypse this story is probably for you.  It leans into the quirkiness of the characters for personality and that is working well so far.  There may have been some early grammar issues....one word written when another was intended...but it was neither pervasive nor did it take me out of the story.  My review scores are based on the average story on Royal Road, and this is above the average in every category.

I look forward to reading more of this story....I whipped through the entire story in one evening which is a good indication that it is both engaging and well written enough to hold my interest.

The first review is harsh without reason. I'm not sure what the scores are even in relation to but they make no sense.  The grammar one is the only one with a basis and I think it is harped on too much.  The other scores are ridiculous. I can clearly imagine the character and the story is interesting.  Unless your baseline is 1 star for a passable story....the scores are wrong.

Okay soapbox done.....If you want a good idea of whether you want to read this story, try the first couple chapters if the category of story is interesting to you it won't take long.

Boring. Reading the first 3 chapters required a lot of willpower. The character is boring and one dimensional.

Character seems to have a screw loose. Considering the only thing on her mind is sewing. So yeah character seems like a heroin addict . other than that the English is alright. But the story is sooo boring. Don't let this review stop you from resding it. Just felt like it wasnt my cup of tea. There's a reason it is/was on trending so yeah give it a try. Hopefully author can add more depth to the character. Just feels like character is forced to fight cause of system but her passion is sewing. Weird . unless it's going the route of the overpowered tailor in a litrpg environment.

A different name for the system which is great. I don't know if author will further expand on the system but probably will. Other than that yeah just found it boring. This review will probably get dislike bombed by the fans. Makes sense. But yeah its not a five star story. Story has potential but just seems to lack something that catches and makes the reader eager to read more. Book won't be able to appeal to all but eh not a problem. 

The book seems like it will go on for a long duration but books like these tend to have a higher chance of going on a hiatus. It lacks purpose other than sewing. Maybe if it was a comedy it'd make sense but yeah this story is a diamond in the rough. Will improve over time. Give it a chance. 

Why does it have to be 200 words? This review is annoying. 

Update

Also realised I struggled reading such a book cause of the horrendous grammar. Lols yeah author can do better. Hopefully it improves but yeah this book wont last 2 months

She does not care about her granny( i did looked at the chapters she is not there). 

She does not care about her life( she did locked all her weapons away, like why? ).

She does not care about apocalypse( she did not scared even a bit that world is ended). 

She has no emotions. She just lives for sewing something. She is not a human. She is a sewing machine. 

Just use grammarly.

Its free to use and will fix 90% of your spelling errors.
If you use the paid version it even helps you with word structure.

Just do something. I cant read it anymore.

Also as the top reviewer has stated.
If your novel take on the apocalypse is a character that is crazy into sweing, then the story should centre around that and not monster slaying.

The story has been done before, crafters are relatively rare though. The characters only have one notable personality trait, and need more. The grammar and spelling is abysmal, it hasn't even been put through a spellchecker or autocorrect, that or it's an unintelligent autocorrect instead of using AI. The style doesn't flow well but could be worse.

If the spelling and grammar were fixed I'd rate this as:

4/5 RR.

2.5/5 Published.

I don't think the grammar is so bad. 

So, I am writing this review, because I really don't understand the ones given here.

If I give an 1* rating, then it's unreadable, which is not the case here. Sure there might be unused potential. 

So.... The following may contain soft-spoilers up to 34.

I expected an Protagonist, that is obsessed with needlework (check) and a story, where exactly this single-track-mind would bloom. (Not so sure there.)

By now, not much is known about the world. Only three characters (including the MC) have been included for now, which is not a bad thing itself, just what happend to the rest of the world? Did everybody die? Countless questions and no explanation for now ( also not a bad thing in generall, but some hint would be nice)

Spoiler: it's some sort of (endless) testing-waves apocalypse.

Which is new to me, every thing has to end at some point (my opinion).

The Litrpg part is shot down the first few chapters, by 'automatic distribution'.

Sorry I drifted off:

I hope there is going to be more needlework.

Till then, not my cup of tea.

So it has to be 200 words, which is more than I had till now. So here we go.

This review is sponsored by all the other bad ones given to this novel, which are quite the downvotes. 

If you're still reading, you could just give this story a try. It gets obvious pretty fast if it's your kind of tea.

There are three kinds of stories on Royal Road with the LitRPG tag: actual LitRPGs, stories with some token LitRPG elements to lure in readers, and subversive LitRPG comedies. A lot of the ones in the third category tend to fall flat because they think they have to be a standard LitRPG to subvert one. 

Vongrak has proven that this isn't the case. This world of the story trying to be a LitRPG, but its constantly be subverted by a protagonist that really couldn't give a s**t; she just wants to do her needlework in peace, and that's all she wants to do. While she is smart enough to have some longterm planning in regards to her continued survival, the story has yet to sacrifice her mentality of not caring about any of this nonsense the world is throwing at her. We don't even know if she has a standard status screen with attribute points, skills, and all that other stuff, because one of the first thing she does is go into the settings and turn off everything that can be turned off so she can focus on her needlework. As long as the author is able to maintain Sui's (the protagonist) apathy, this story will be a joy to read.

Edit: Gets a status this chapter, sets it to auto. Never change.