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This is the story of a woman named Riza.

Riza wakes up in a forest all alone, no idea how she got there, naked, and with a knife stuck in her side.

After a brief tangle with a boar, she levels up and gains a skill that can heal her wounds.

Little does she know that this branch of magic is not only outlawed across the land but is considered a dead-end one as well.

Not that any of that matters to her; she can't even understand the language in the first place.


Riza is not some chosen one nor is she given any special gifts undeservedly. Instead, she's mathematically, scientifically minded and approaches things from a rigorous perspective.

Although numbers play a large part, she doesn't just grow numerically; she uses ingenuity and knowledge to better deal with her struggles and grow stronger.


I have ADHD so there's bound to be maths mistakes that I miss. If you see one, please leave a comment so I can correct it.

This is also, essentially, a first draft. That means I will edit older chapters, changing details, adding things in, altering the numbers, etc.

Heavily edited and rewritten version of Ortus (Old Version)

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KevNZ
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As per Title. Didn't read the original. Am enjoying the new version overall.

There are a few nitpicks, the chief amongst which is the constant switching of first person and third person naration, occasionally in the same paragraph.

Apart from that, a strong female lead, alone, naked and wounded in the woods. A struggle for survival. What's not to like?

Well, okay. I must admit, after 11 chapters, the fight sequences get a little... Boaring.

=D

Oha
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Fumbled Start made better retroactively (Edited)

Reviewed at: Chapter 13: Farmer

So, I have read the original, so Im a bit biased to the plot of the original, but nonetheless I cracked this out in an afternoon and decided to leave a review for a tiny lil boost.

Style.
Read the Original, enjoy the whole concept and enviroment, but I cant say its overwhelmingly originally, When dealing with style I often dont look directly at it. What the style is doesnt change how well its been executed, and this ones been dealt with like most standard LITRPG stories, if not slightly above average.

Grammar.
Not much to say, didnt see any issues but as evident from my copious amounts of needless commas, Im not the best one to ask. Case in point the run on sentence.

 

Story Score.
Almost perfect, sorta brought down by the character but what can you do, its consistently high quality so if you can make it past the character then you wolnt have any sudden drops.

Character.
Bad start, character is dumb as a rock compared to the original, but about halfway through, ~7ish I think? she gets better, not perfect, but better. If you can get to that point where she actually catches her stride then its mostly smooth sailing except for a minor screwup that was edited out in chapter 13 shortly after writing this. I get the feeling Author realized it was weird after the comments criticized it and went back to fix it. So author listens atleast!

 

I dont want to say much about the plot or the story because my standards are low, and thats generally up to the individual, but if you have time, Id recommend you read it once it gets atlest ~30 chapters. A good buffer to get past the starting foibles and begins getting wind behind its sails. 

 

r_bun
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Perfect - besides purple prose

Reviewed at: Chapter 13: Farmer

In a word, Ortus is amazing. I haven't read the old version, but this story is certainly special. 

The plot is intriguing so far (Ch 13), full of new ideas but comfortably mixed with classic topics from this genre. It is probably one of the best LitRPG style-wise so far, I'm thrilled to know what has the author prepared for us, now that the tale is visibly about to unfold. 

The story so far is a 10/10, accurately realistic without the overly dark environment that some LitRPG stories use at the start. The likeliness and enjoyability of the story makes it much more enjoyable than others where the start is heavily clicheed or too realistic.

As for the MC, the author is keeping a freaking ton of things from us. I believe this is just how the story unfolds, and the author might not want for us to know anything until much later. Maybe I'm mistaken, as I've been reading it on updates without burning through the whole thing at once, but I don't believe I know the name of the MC. Or at least, it is just said sparingly. My point is, at Chapter 13 we still not know nothing about her, except that she is smart and is probably american. I didn't give that section a bad rating, because the style let me to believe that the author wants her to be a mistery for now.

The only thing I somewhat dislike (even though the final result is excellent despite it) is the use of purple prose, especially in the first chapters. That is, using overly complex vocabulary to describe elements, environment or feeling in the story. It was quite uncomfortable at the beginning chapters, it made the reading speed slow down and, most importantly, it distracted reader's attention from the plot and into the writing. It has improved over the chapters, but it keeps being a negative aspect of the story. If it weren't because of the excellent plot and grammar, it could be a problem. Most of times, descriptions and feelings can be conveyed with simpler words, without losing beauty or quality in the slightest. It is my personal opinion that complex adjectives and nouns should be used sparingly (maybe once every couple descriptions, twice as max). 
The author's style is altready beautiful without purple prose, so my advice is to tone it down whenever possible.

However, that doesn't lessen the fact that you should absolutely read this work. It's great, I promise.