Rebirth Of Civilization

by princepablo

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Andrew suddenly finds himself alone in world that is not his own. The creatures are hostile and unfamiliar, the land around him unrecognizable. He will have to work hard to explore the wilderness he has found himself in, to unravel the ancient magics of this world, and to create a safe place for the others lost in a foreign world like himself.

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TLDR: Like plain popcorn, it's inoffensive, You'll munch on is as a snack but you aren't eating it cause of the complex flavours and it certainly won't fill you up. This story is like that, and just like plain popcorn you get tired of it after awhile. Maybe the author will sprinkle on some metaphorical salt and butter but I can't see that happening any time soon.  So it's fine to read if your bored and want crafting as a focus for a change but that's about it. (All said, I still mostly enjoyed reading it, I just tire of all the missed opportunities)

Story: The story is more nonexistent than bad. Just survival and the litRPG grind. Though to it's marrit there's more crafting than most stories but the crafting is kinda dumb. There's the occasional creative flair but most of the time you'll be frustrated by the MC ignoring the possibility's

the style is bland and sometimes redundant. I kinda wish the MC thoughts weren't written as much cause they're mostly exposition and kinda just highlight how bland he is. On the flip side, this has been great to read before bed as I have been drifting off especially well while reading it.

grammar is fine, nothing much to say about it.

charecters is... well there is one; the MC, and I've already forgotten his name. The most notible thing about him is he dropped out of collage and you can kinda see why.he bumbles about occasionally making somewhat intelligent decisions but if you're expecting an Mac to make deliberate decisions towards the goal of rebuilding civilization that's not here (not yet at least). Forget the scientific method, I'm not sure he even know's that Iron is an element. There's no real process to his expiermentation he mostly gets lucky. His work with rune's is a bit more intelligent than smithing though. You may have noticed that what I'm describing counts at most as a character flaw, not really a review of his characterisation, but that's all we got. 

That, and an overly calm "and rational" reaction to most everything. He doesn't feel emotion beyond mild annoyance as far as I can tell but if that's your thing, all the power to ya (I know a lot of people like there MC like this. Just know he'll make a tone of noise next to a rode where an ambush happened without considering it may be a bad idea...

Note: this may all change (and improve) as the story progresses, I just have limited time and patience.

Stillness
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Making things doesn’t work like that

Reviewed at: Chapter 11 - Getting Stronger

What interests me most in the story are the runes and exprimenting with them. Otherwise, I'm unimpressed. 

There are three main things I dislike. 

One, hunting animals like the MC does only works in fantasy land. If any thing, I'd expect animals to be rarer and more stealthly than those on Earth, simply due to increased predation from literally everything.

Two, making things, especially things out of metal, is unrealistic. Magic allows for a lot of handwaving away of issues to the point where it isn't as big an issue, but in places where magic isn't used I have an issue with how things just don't work how they're described. 

Three, the story goes nowhere. There is no reason to care. It's just a guy gaining levels and skills alone in the woods. 

TomWrites
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Overall: 3.5/5

There's nothing objectionable with this story, but there's also nothing notable. Excellent grammar and decent (if generic) style is pulled down hard by the very light story and lack of any characters.

Grammar 5/5:

Well edited and without errors. I have no complaints here, and compared to the usual 4.5's and 5's of rating on RR, I wish I could give it a 7.

Style 4/5:

In a word: fine. Entirely generic, but that can be comfy.

Concept and Setting Style: The setting is a generic fantasy forest with wolves and boars and a boss bear. The system is a generic levels + attributes + skill + class: not quite as basic as they come as the magic has a seperate XP track, but pretty close: you've seen it before. Character is generic Isekai only more bland than usual. The magic has runes and if you move them around you change the effects.

It does delve a little bit into crafting things using what little runes he knows, the materials available, and the power of magical wishful thinking. There hasn't been all that much developement, but I can see it becoming interesting in the future.

Writing Style: The writing style is easy to read, but also doesn't grab attention. Nothing technically wrong with it in terms of grammar, but also not much, well, style. I found myself skimming paragraphs at a time because the individual words weren't particularly interesting. The descriptions are enough to understand whats going on. Its fine.

Its not like the elements of style are bad, but there's little new to find here either.

Story 2/5:

A generic "person" who was in the woods and got transported to a somewhat depopulated fantasty world that has a generic System. By luck they witnessed a caravan get massacred and could salvage everything they needed from it. By luck they fell on top of a book of magic and was able to use the pictures to make some runes and learn how to manipulate mana. They have killed some wolves.

That short description sums up everything thats happened so far. There aren't any threats to him, not really. The only goal with any stakes he's had (find water, shelter, food) were perfectly solved in either the first or second chapter through sheer chance. There's no goals with stakes, no tension, no inciting incident, nothing. There is no story so far.

The only thing of interest is that some magical accident killed ~90% of the planets population, which is why people got grabbed and put there, and maybe what was going on with the caravan, but the MC doesn't seem particularly interested in exploring either.

Character 1.5/5: 

There has been one person so far: He was camping in the woods, played video games in the past, took a semester of Japanese, and failed out of college. He is excited by the idea of magic.

Thats it. I know nothing about his past, his views, why he was in the woods, what he wants, whether he ever had pets, what his skills or interests were, his personality etc etc... He's just a blank slate, more automaton than person, that messes around with things.

A least the MC isn't actively awful, and that count for something, but there basically aren't any characters in the story.

assasin
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Beautiful start to a litrpg

Reviewed at: Chapter 7 - Beartrap

disclaimer; this was done as part of a review swap

The story starts of very slow but I love the premise. Too many litrpgs are focused solely on progression fantasies and ignore the fun stuff like an interesting crafting system. Plus I definitely prefer ones focused more on exploration,discovery and survival.

The grammar and vocabulary is impecable and outside of the very slow pace I see nothing wrong with the style. 

The magic system and worldbuilding is interesting enough that it doesn't come across as another generic litrpg. There's a certain je ne sais quoi that appeals to me that I think a lot of them lack. I think it's because every discovery is a real effort of sweat and, sometimes literal, blood and not just a gift from the author. 

My one complaint is the main character is very bland. But I think that can easily be addressed as the story progresses. Especially once more characters are added to the story so there's some actual character growth through dialogue and interpersonal relationships. Way too many litrpgs fall into the same trap. There's too much focus on one character in the beginning and it gets very tiresome to see the same cliche over and over again. 

 

Frost_Rune
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As of chapter 11 there are some details that already need to be addressed. Such as the phone not working, like does electricity not function? This can be explained by magic interfering I guess. The main character also doesn't seem to have any remorse for the world ending. Avoiding grief is understandable but even an attempt to forget or ignore grief isn't mentioned. A lack of empathy isn't great in a main character. Even if besides this he's empathetic and normal, which makes it seem more like a plot hole. The rest of the story isn't that bad at all and rather wonderful. The world building and magic is where the story shines. The lack of any guiding hands or for shadowed b.s. tropes is also pleasant to see. Those ruin stories so easily. I think this will be a story that can only be great by sheer volume of material. Like the Azeranth Healer in a way. Just needs to steadily build itself up. Pacing is near perfect as he's struggled but enough build up. Maybe take some time to build the character itself up but not so much focus to derail the story. All in all I'm glad this is being written and look forward to wasting my free time reading it and contemplating. Good job man keep it up.

MadGod
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The only mistake the author has made for this story so far is in its description. He should have just mentioned that it's a crafting focused novel and not story/charater driven and instead of casual readers complaining that it's plain, he'd have the crafting nuts drooling over it, like how it happened with Magic Smithing.

Basically, it's all about a guy in the woods bushcrafting, researching rune magic and base building, with some ocasional fighting in-between and slow leveling.  And this is all you need to know to decide whether this is the story for you not.

Don't go around downvoting stuff just because you don't like the genre.

DoomAlsoDoom
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I like it. It was sold to me as a survival and crafting fiction, and it delivers on these themes almost immediately. I think one thing that really differentiates this fic as a survivalist is that it actually feels like I would imagine it would. It's very reminiscent of the feeling you get when you play some well known survivalist games; you make do with what's around you and craft things to help you progress. Baddies are going to come try to kill you and you hope that the gear you managed to throw together is enough to stay alive. This pairs well with the MC's total willingness to experiment with whatever he has on hand.

The description of the setting is good. I wouldn't say this is a funny story, but there are some descriptive elements that are humorous, from the MC's pov.

 

Story:

There isn't much of a plot right now other than "survive and perhaps rebuild civilization", but that isn't surprising as it's common at the beginning of survival type fics. I imagine that once the MC has powered up enough we'll start getting arc level plots/goals. 

What is there is interesting. You can see the progression system without having to be bludgeoned by a "tutorial", which is nice. There is a very good sense of progress in terms of skills and character capability. There is a sense of progression for the exploration aspect as well, which is something I feel is often overlooked in these types of stories.

There was a bit of beef in the comments about the class choice, but I thought it was great. It's a natural extension of the survivalist theme and leaves itself open to a huge amount of potential later.

 

Grammar:

Grammar is pretty spot on. I didn't notice anything and I was never kicked out of the story. I did spot a few typos here and there, but nothing noteworthy.

 

Character:

As of the current chapter, there is only the MC and no other characters, and he's well done. His personality is distinct and the characterization noticeable. He's upbeat and positive, and willing to experiment, which is a good pairing for a survival fic, as those character traits are going to take him a long way.

 

Style:

This is probably the only category I had any issues with, and it's only one aspect. For the most part, the author's style is straightforward and clear, which makes for easy reading, but the story relies heavily on internal dialogue for both exposition and narrative. My only real critique of this fic would be to not rely so much on internal dialogue to give the reader information, or telegraph the MC's intentions. Use it for what it's best used for, which is characterization and context to the narrative.

 

Overall, I'd say this fic is well worth reading. It has a solid survivalist theme that is going to carry the story a long way and the quality of the writing is going to carry it the rest. Give it a shot.

Luis Ramon Sierra Flores
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Weirdly Good. Reminds me of Chris Hetchl style

Reviewed at: Chapter 11 - Getting Stronger

Well, this is the first time that I have found so many similarities between authors.

This is a story about a crafter/warrior, the story focus 80% of the time on crafting and developing himself,15% on Fighting monster to level up,5% on the world around him.

And it just Works... somehow, now please understand this is a very niche type of novel that does not work for everyone, some people might find it boring, or too slow, there is no OP from the start MC, the MC is not a genius, he fucks up from time to time (Spoiler alert: Don't mix air with fire dumbass), and there is no grand objective so far, the MC thinking pattern is like an engineers mind, he breaks problems in steps and works his way to solve each one by one. 

Grammar is Ok!

The bad: The author needs to learn how to use Blue Boxes, or find a way to show the status that it's more friendly for the reader. He really needs to add some side characters into the story, we are at chapter 11 and so far the MC only interacts with his mind, if he is going to take this stance, then making sure the MC develops a speech problem because of his lack of talking would be a way to go.

 

I have added the story to my follow list, and I plan on staying until the end. 

moredread
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The plot is pretty basic. Guy gets pulled into another world that has a system. 

At the point im reviewing this it's still very early so the meat of the story hasn't come out yet. So far the MC hasn't had any interactions with anyone but wolves yet, but it's a lot of fun. It's just survival and crafting traps. I love these types of stories though.

Looking forward to seeing how this turns out. 

Caloo
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So far this is a well written wilderness survival/crafting story with litrpg elements. It seems to hold promise for future 'civilization' in that the main character is clearly moving towards better gear and knowledge though he has not yet met any other characters. It's definitely just starting as the mc is slightly underdeveloped but I can see some character shining through as the story progresses through his choices.

What you're in for with the first nine chapters:

So far the Andrew Neilson has scavenged for materials (after watching the only random people he's seen get slaughtered) and a magical text which includes magical runes. He's working on understanding the new world around him, this runic magic, and the litrpg system while creatively using what he has to beat challenges and goals of his own making through crafting, runes, and grinding stats.

I will emphasize that Andrew isn't a passive protagonist from what I can see so far in that he chose, with little prompting or pressure, to take on a fight that he didn't necessarily have to and could have easily avoided.