Dungeon Core Abi

by Egar Gnizama

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Abi is a Dungeon Core that's down on her luck.

Previously a human and with no memories of how or why she ended up this way, Abi awakens to find herself not as the woman she remembers but now as a gorgeous jade diamond in a small dark corner of existence. 

Forced to endure her new life, with no other alternative, follow Abi on her growth and expansion as she powers up her new home with the help of Me.

Will she be ready to take on adventurers willing to test their might or any monsters that may enter her? 

Will Abi be victorious, potentially earning the chance at her new life, or will she succumb to defeat and eventually be destroyed? 

Can she uncover the mystery of why she became a Dungeon Core in the first place? 

With little options to begin with, only time will tell and this dungeon opens in 24 hours, Abi had better get a move on if she wants to survive.

Note:

Currently releasing 2 chapters per week early morning on a Monday and Friday GMT.

Ratings or comments on how the story is progressing will be gratefully appreciated. 

Please let me know if you find any inconsistencies and constructive criticism is also welcomed to help make the story better for everyone. 

Thank you for taking the time to read my work, it means more than you know. 

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Ellen Taylor
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This was fun. I really liked the snarky interactions between Abi and Me, and I low key love that she named the AI Me, because I do that in practically every video game I play.

I didn't give a full 5 stars for grammar, because I'm assuming I only do that if the grammar is flawless, and I saw maybe one or two mistakes, which I probably should have pointed out, come to think of it. It certainly didn't distract from the overall story.

Style was at four stars, because while I read it I kept wanting there to be some sort of distinction between when Abi is specifically talking to Me, and when she has her own personal thoughts. I know Me can practically hear everything she says, so simple quotations wouldn't work, but it would have been nice to have that distinction. I just don't have a suggestion. Maybe italics for directly talking?

I like the story, but it's currently at four star because I was really interested in the backstory of Abi and her friends, and there didn't seem to be a ton yet in the chapters I read. Hopefully there will be more.

Overall, a good read.

Doctor Zero
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I found this on Trending, and I'm glad I did.  The story is loads of fun, and the author gives it a nice voice.  I would recommend this book to anyone who is looking for a good read.  

Style:

The early chapters are very much in the Dungeon Core style.  A lot of internal monologuing about "What the hell is happening?"  I think that's an unavoidable consequence of the genre.  That said, it's a brisk, enjoyable read.  The author doesn't get bogged down explaining Dungeon Core tropes I already know, and quickly shows us his new ideas, plots, and characters.  It's good.

Grammar:

The grammar is fine.  Better than mine, so if there's anything wrong I can't tell.

Story:

I'm on chapter 5, so I'm not sure what's happening yet, but the world building seems solid, and the characters have backstories, so I'm trusting that this is going somewhere.

Characters:

This is the strongest point so far.  I like the main character.  I like the supporting characters.  That's not an easy thing to do in a dungeon core novel.  Heck, it's tricky in any novel.  It's ultimately what makes this book so readable.  So, bravo author.  Well done.  Thanks for writing it.

John Dovey
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It is exactly what you might expect from the title, a human dungeon core. 

For those who like the genre, this is a nice straightforward example with a lokeable MC and witty prose.

At this stage the dungeon is still being built, so how it all plays out is still up in the air.

 

Decent spelling and grammar.