Story: Forever After

by LastSlice

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Harem Magic Male Lead Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Sexual Content

This is a story that spanned for eons.

Through a series of misfortune, Ryner turned into an immortal creature that has lived for hundreds of thousands of years. Not bound to one world, he saw war and peace, love and hate, magic and science.

The man started as a parentless child only to grow into a powerful and shunned monster. Despite the physical and mental scars, he still fights on. He still fights Alice, his fellow, insane monster and for their own reasons, they kill each other. The two wage brutal wars in the form of a “death game” that Ryner managed to force Alice into playing.

After his latest win against her, he decides to go on a vacation. As such, he inserts himself in a seemingly normal world to enjoy a brief moment of peace and quiet. This is where the story starts, not at the beginning, but near the end. Instead of resting like a lazy tourist, problems pop up one after another. Eventually, Alice ceases to be his only or biggest concern.

This is the story of a man who stubbornly walks down a road of madness.

This is the story of how a tortured soul struggles, lives and fights.

WARNING MATURE CONTENT: gore, sexual content, some disturbing themes

Note: Sexual content will be posted as side stories, separated from the main plot.

(Will add tags as story progresses)

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Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1 - Vacation ago
Just a post test ago
Chapter 2 - Capital city ago
Chapter 3 - Night out ago
Chapter 4 - Day out ago
Chapter 5 - Lily ago
Chapter 6 - Kidnapping the princess ago
Chapter 7 - Castle visit ago
Chapter 8 - Backup plan ago
Chapter 9 - Aftermath ago
Chapter 10 - Departure and new encounter ago
Side Story - Chapter 5 18+ ago
Side Story - Chapter 6 18+ ago
Chapter 11 - Student ago
Chapter 12 - Bandit hunting ago
Chapter 13 - A small feast ago
Chapter 14 - A new game and the heroes' arrival ago
Chapter 15 - Talking with heroes ago
Chapter 16 - The audience ago
Chapter 17 - Duel ago
Chapter 18 - True ruler ago
Chapter 19 - New instructor ago
Chapter 20 - Routine ago
Chapter 21 - Past dream and future trouble ago
Chapter 22 - Training session ago
Chapter 23 - Mating season ago
Chapter 24 - Night visit ago
Chapter 25 - Mate, marks and scars ago
Side Story - Chapter 25 18+ ago
Chapter 26 - New plan ago
Chapter 27 - Trip ago
Chapter 28 - Clues and evidence ago
Chapter 29 - The heroes' important victory ago
Chapter 30 - Before a Predator ago
Chapter 31 - Killing a Predator ago
Chapter 32 - Scolding the heroes ago
Chapter 33 - Reporting ago
Chapter 34 - Study session ago
Chapter 35 - The church's faith ago
Chapter 36 - Spying ago
Chapter 37 - Second ruin expedition ago
Chapter 38 - Avalon ago
Chapter 39 - Ryner's daughter ago
Chapter 40 - Conversation between daughter and slave ago
Chapter 41 - Bath and clothes ago
Chapter 42 - Test of the true sacred sword ago
Chapter 43 - Events before dawn ago
Chapter 44 - Sudden attack ago
Chapter 45 - Dragoon subjugation ago
Chapter 46 - Unknown opposition ago
Chapter 47 - True hero ago
Chapter 48 - Fake hero ago
Chapter 49 - Alice ago
Chapter 50 - Punishment ago
Chapter 51 - Their respective nights ago
Chapter 52 - To the beastmen kingdom ago
Chapter 53 - Gods ago
Chapter 54 - Joyride ago
Chapter 55 - On the bridge ago
Chapter 56 - Evelyn's great plan ago
Chapter 57 - Amazons ago
Side Story - Chapter 56 18+ ago
Chapter 58 - Chase and arrival ago
Chapter 59 - To forget ago
Chapter 60 - To remember ago
Chapter 61 - Reunion ago
Chapter 62 - At Myra's house ago
Chapter 63 - Evelyn's selfishness ago
Chapter 64 - Maya's friend ago
Chapter 65 - Troublesome little sister ago
Chapter 66 - Guest of Ofauvra ago
Chapter 67 - Going out ago
Chapter 68 - Leonhart's return ago
Chapter 69 - A simple duel ago
Chapter 70 - Beastification ago
Chapter 71 - A talk with her father ago
Chapter 72 - Labyrinth ago
Chapter 73 - The relic's trial ago
Chapter 74 - The relic's wolf ago
Chapter 75 - The garden, the wolf and the princess ago
Chapter 76 - The wolf's new place ago
Chapter 77 - The wolf's dream and the red puppy ago
Chapter 78 - A wolf's errand ago
Chapter 79 - The starting signal ago
Chapter 80 - Start of the wolf ago
Chapter 81 - Sacrifices ago
Chapter 82 - Cats and Dogs ago
Chapter 83 - Advent in Ofauvra ago
Chapter 84 - Humans, Beastmen and pain ago
Chapter 85 - Slipping ago
Chapter 86 - Cry and smile ago
Chapter 87 - Clan ago
Chapter 88 - The terminal ago
Chapter 89 - Leaving and amazons ago
Chapter 90 - The mistake ago
Chapter 91 - The first Heaven's Blade ago
Chapter 92 - Brazen heist ago
Chapter 93 - Evelyn's fatal mistake ago
Chapter 94 - The second Heaven's Blade ago
Chapter 95 - Scars, nightmares and kindness ago
Chapter 96 - Adventurer guild ago
Chapter 97 - Foolish and mad ago
Chapter 98 - Orcs, classes and ranks ago
Chapter 99 - Dragon ago
Chapter 100 - A dragon's honor and the third Heaven's Blade ago
Chapter 101 - Failed punishment ago
Side Story - Suky's fantasy ago
Side Story - Suky's fantasy 18+ ago
Chapter 102 - Return to Sakael ago
Chapter 103 - Nostalgic scene ago
Chapter 104 - Paperwork ago
Chapter 105 - Execution ago
Chapter 106 - Healing Red ago
Chapter 107 - A shadow's end and a hopeful's beginning ago
Chapter 108 - Buying slaves ago
Chapter 109 - Company's employees ago
Chapter 110 - To kiss ago
Chapter 111 - One dance ago
Chapter 112 - To not kiss ago
Chapter 113 - Surveillance ago
Chapter 114 - Jadistro ago
Chapter 115 - In deep ago
Chapter 116 - Interrogation ago
Chapter 117 - First contact ago
Chapter 118 - For family ago
Chapter 119 - Edwin's choice ago
Chapter 120 - Last request ago
Chapter 121 - The collection ago
Chapter 122 - Freedom, safety and revenge ago
Chapter 123 - Explode ago
Chapter 124 - Wanted dead or alive ago
Chapter 125 - Spared for a reason ago
Chapter 126 - No negotiation ago
Chapter 127 - The profitable choice ago
Chapter 128 - Swampland ago
Chapter 129 - Strong allies ago
Chapter 130 - Hossylei Nac ago
Chapter 131 - Permit it ago
Chapter 132 - Bunch of crabs ago
Chapter 133 - Blood Trial ago
Chapter 134 - Title, instincts and a small detail ago
Chapter 135 - The barrier hiding the city ago
Chapter 136 - Unexpected jolt ago
Chapter 137 - For formality's sake ago
Chapter 138 - Festival ago
Chapter 139 - Giving a chance and running away ago
Chapter 140 - No matter the setbacks ago
Chapter 141 - Sense, Pulse and ashes ago
Chapter 142 - Ruins, vines and boulders ago
Chapter 143 - Underground ago
Chapter 144 - Beginnings ago
Chapter 145 - Approaching caravan ago
Chapter 146 - Objectives ago
Chapter 147 - Doubts of reality ago
Chapter 148 - Two titans ago

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Jetzer2232
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Decent story, subtly annoying problems.

I have been reading your story for a decent while and honestly, there are many aspects as an author that you are lacking in. I know this is an amateur fiction site, but even so, there are things you should realise eventually and telling you now is best before it becomes harder to reverse.

 

Grammar: No problems here. Maybe a few errors every chapter or so, but that is relatively excellent. Perfection isn't a requirement for a 5 star.

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Story: The story is developing alright. I forgot what he uses as a basis for arcs, but let's say there are 3 arcs each representing a kingdom. 

Arc 1 was the first and honestly least memorable for me personally. However, I guess there were decent attempts to build up the world a bit.

Arc 2 was memorable for the wrong reasons because it was SO DAMN LONG!! For the length of the arc, I found nothing really developing within the main character memorable enough to mention. At least we see the main 4 of the 30 or so side characters introduced develop nicely, but it was too drawn out to be worth it.

Arc 3 is near the beginning. Nothing I can comment about yet.

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Style: As I said before, this is amateur fiction, but there's things I reckon you should fix. At times, your story just reads like a japanese light novel translated without any effort or feeling. Something like this:

"A young man stood with X on his face and Y thoughts running through his mind. This was Ryner."

Instead of describing him again, not adding new things into the mix, you could just say that it is Ryner. Then you could instead describe an area or something. Just watch out for repetition of description for no reason.

 

Another problem is the way you write your speech. When you show pauses, you do this "...". What does this do? Except tell the readers there was a pause, does this add anything? You could describe how he looked when he paused, or what he did when he paused, but you instead just put that in which adds nothing.

 

SPOILERS PLEASE READ ONLY IF U REACHED ARC 3!!!!!!

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Character: And so we come to the section I have the most problem with.

 

Point 1: Has Ryner developed at all? For 3 arcs, I have read Ryner's adventures and all I have ever seen from him was an extension of his existing personality, whether it was helping out of pity or killing out of guilt or something like that. I hoped there would be a change within Ryner in some way or another. If not, then why even choose this planet to base the story on?

 

Point 2: WTF is wrong with Evelynn and Maya!?! I enjoy dark fantasy despite the fucked up shit I read in it, but the way you handled them had just gone too far in the crazy scale. Eve and Maya may have been cute, but after they raped Ryner, I just can't think of them the same anymore. Then there's how you handled Ryner. If the thought even crossed my mind that I might have had sex with my daughter, even though I was drunk, the shame alone would have probs killed me.

 

Point 3: Why do you keep mentioning key events of characters? The recent one was Snow and the dog. Every reader with half a working brain would have known that it must have something to do with that incident. Maybe a small reference would have sufficed but simply summarising it makes it lose its impact every time you do so.

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I guess Ryner's development could be attributed to the fact that the author might want to develop the others first before Ryner, but I honestly feel this was waaaay overdue.

Seems like more of a rant than a review halfway through, doesn't it?

If there's one thing I would like you to take from my thoughts, here it is:

TL;DR - "It's better to show how it is than to tell sometimes. For the rest, a combination of both should be utilised, with the showing portion being greater."

SamHaine
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Proof of how little rope is needed for an author to hang their story with

Good concept, forced execution.

You start with an MC that is OP soewhere around the 10th degree - 'I could just casually destroy worlds' level of OP. So, standard formula: you need restrictions, heavy ones, or the story turns into Joe MC Anybody swatting increasingly bigger flies. 

In this case the restriction is twofold: on the first hand, he is wounded/exhausted after his regular fight with his archnemesis, and needs to be as sparing with his powers as possible to allow faster regeneration. On the second hand, he has a heavily restricting personality - frivolous in its everyday expressions, but bound by unbreakable rules that form its core. This setup provides an excellent opportunity to balance the potentially extreme actions of someone with nigh unlimited destructive capability, so a good choice to start out with.

The problems start when the author wants to use a gradual descent into OP actions for someone old enough that no significant change in their power could be reasonably explained. He gives the MC an inventory (a personal dimension, to be exact, but same difference), filled to the brim with fun little toys from ridiculous guns to magical weaponry powerful enough in its own right to change the tides of any war. Also, the MC has a killing intent unachievable by mere mortals, that has no associated cost in power. And he is also implied to have more than enough skill to build/create pretty much anything. (Curious weakness: the MC is incapable of regular magic, altough he is implied by an author's note to have the capability to create a body that does not have this weakness, the flimsy excuse for not doing so is to hold on to his mortal form/abilities as much as possible - yet his true powers, those that he wants to regenerate so 'desperately' do not cause him to feel out of sync with his body...) Despite being given so many safe/economical options, the MC still uses lifeforce based abilities basically right from the start, which feels like the author forcing him in order to get a chance to introduce said abilities. The MC, bing made to waste his precious resources, naturally whines about this all the time, which is basically the character complaining about the author's inability to use the resources he was given effectively, at least in an implied sense. It also serves to have the MC seem like an idiot most of the time. It basically feels like the author chooses which ability the MC would use on an ad hoc basis, which would make the situation the most interesting, most fun to read - as long as the reader does not stop to think. (I tried to, and managed to rush through enough content that my impressions where unable to catch up to me till I got to chapter 49, in which the MC is once again made to make a decision that is incongruous with his supposed intelligence, experience and general sentiment - I mean, he lists half a dozen serious reasons not to take the second bet, then, reacting to an exceedingly lackluster taunt, without even a mention that the rewards for winning said bet were mentioned or negotiated, accepts said bet. Seems to me like a serious case of USS Make Shit Up (google it and wait for the Voyager/Borg reference). But as soon as you do start to think, you'll realize that the author is basically abusing his own creation, forcing decisions and actions on a character when all he should do is to simply let said character be himself and solve any problems he encounters with whatever method is actually best suited for it. Worst of all are the little asides that come up from time to time, where even the author acknowledges that a better solution with an 'oh, well, could have done it better" (see: sniping comment during the dragoon invasion).

Simply put, the MC doesn't feel real, his actions are too forced for that most of the time. 

Another glaring problem: speech. The author uses a theater-style speaker designation, the problem is that he puts up these name boxes even when they do much more harm than good: he uses general and often too-part designations for multiple actors in the same conversation. This breaks immersion and does not provide any benefits - I mean, who wants to read [Random Hero]/[Random Villager] after every sentence, when the content already has enough clues to connect said instance of speech to a generic side character. Also, the author keeps using these direct name tags in cases where the speech is followed by a descriptive paragraph that once again explicitly explains who was talking. And these after speech descriptions are problematic on their own: they break timeline. You have multiple characters talking to each other, name box after their lines, going on about something for a while, a speaker could even come up multiple times during this, then you get a paragraph that explains everything from the beginning of the conversation again. Bad form, better to just put the descriptive parts right after the parts of the conversation they describe, letting the feel of time be natural.

Speaking of bad ideas the author keeps repeating: putting references in double brackets or whatever into the middle of the text, i.e. ((This was based on A from B show and C from D show, mixed this way.)) This just breaks immersion. If you really want to share these references, put them into an author's note at the bottom.

Overall, the story feels like it has a strong starting idea and concept, but not enough time was spent by the author to think about ways to realistically implement said concept. Instead he just forces events and characters into the generic form he expects from his story. As I said in the title, he managed to take what little rope he gave himself and still managed to hang the story perfectly.

admira
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It used to be better.

Written: Chapter 109

Overall: 2 Stars

Style (***): Not much to say. I've never been a big fan of the "Dialogue" (Name) style, but the non-dialogue portions are well written. Common tropes are used often, but they are somewhat well-integrated. 

There's a level of rom-com that induced a whole lot of eye-rolling from me early on; recently, it became outright disdain. More on that under characters, though.

 

Story (**~): The premise was interesting. An immortal being goes to a random planet to recover from an ongoing war. Since he recovers just by being around to leech off the planet's energy, it becomes a vacation of sorts. 

However. He gets dragged into random situations for no truly good reason. He even does things that will strongly impact his ability to fight said war in order to save some people, and those people disappear from the story immediately after. 

The story doesn't really seem to stick to the original premise, but the arcs are still weakly bound together in that direction. 

 

Grammar (****): I can't give 5 stars to a story that uses the "Dialogue" (Name) format in good conscience. Aside from that, the grammar isn't bad.

 

Character (*): Yes, 1 star. Early on, the characters were fairly templated and 2-dimensional. However, that would at least earn 2-3 stars. However, a character was introduced later on who I am 100% certain will cause me to drop the series within the next arc.

She has characteristics that would make her an intelligent, interesting character--yet it's rendered completely worthless by the fact that she constantly acts like she's in heat. And honestly, this isn't even a spoiler. She acts like this from the time she's introduced, but she gets much worse as the story progresses. 

(Some spoiler material ahead, but no concrete details)

 

Quite frankly, her relationship with the main character has turned coercive in a self-harming way. Even when her misfortunes aren't manipulated into reasons for intimacy with the main character, her actions are so extreme that I can't tell if she's there for comic relief or fapping material. 

Well, plenty of other readers seem to like her just fine. But to me, this character is quickly ruining the rest of the story. 

sabazurc
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It was very enjoyable to read but...

I like the story, it has OP strong MC with interesting personality, good action, and magic. For me that is already enough. Plus it is enjoyable to read and you want to read more and more. Sometimes it reminds me of arifureta. I’m surprised that some shitty novel ended in top 5 weekly and this one did not and that I have not started reading this earlier. This is one of the hidden gems of royalroad. 

 

Update: Soo now I am at chapter 60 and I lowered my score. SPOILERS AHEAD!!!  The reasons are: though MC is op author put such restrictions on him that he very rarely uses his powers. He can’t use magic or most likely he can, but does not for some strange reason. He made some stupid bet which really irritated me, it was so obvious that he would lose. Generally he makes some questionable decisions(like planning to travel to dangerous places for no reason) and is being very nosy. He just can’t stay away from problems, while constantly complaining and reminding readers after every fight that he should not waste his powers(which he does). Also it is already chapter 60 and we know nothing about MC, his powers, why he does not use magic and etc. I want to see more of MC’s powers already(it does not matter how powerful he is if he does not fucking use that power) without stupid restrictions and his usage of magic. I don’t want to see only some side characters to get stronger, I wish for MC to develop too.

reinyday
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definitely worth reading

this is the kind of story that i would read more than once. its simply awesome! great character development and almost perfect grammar. despite being OP and all, ryner still faces plenty of challenges which gives the story more depth. thank you LastSlice for bringing this story to us. 

mcdeathcore
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MC gets raped multiple times, first main heroine gets raped

Reviewed at: Chapter 56 - Evelyn's great plan

Everyone is too rapey, and it's one of the few things I avoid (mostly because its a cheap shock value gimmick and is usually foreshadowing for crappy story) 

The second thing I avoid is a spineless yesman which this character is, sure he kills people nonchalantly and all that, but he is incapable of telling a woman no or even getting angry at them (even when they literally rape him) 

Which seems to be a sort of theme for the novel and the third thing, although this only bugs me. There are no competent male characters, they are either submissive, incompetent idiots or just plain evil, the first Kingdom is a matriarchy, with the king being incompetent, the second kingdom the king comes off as at least powerful, but that is only so the terrified of the wife trope can waltz on in, and if that wasn't enough they are literally in an SnM relationship with the King as the Sub... tmi and it doesn't fit the King's character considering he cares about face so he wouldn't have her announcing it in public. 

Bar that stuff it's a good story so onto the advance review. 

Style score, it was easy enough to read and I didn't find myself rewording the author's sentences 4 stars.

Story score, I was interested enough in the story to forgo some sleep, some of plot points are a little forced, but it was fresh and interesting enough to keep me reading. (I kinda want to read a dot point summery of the plot simply to know what happens rather than continue reading it for reasons stated in this review) 4.5 stars.

Grammar score, only noticed grammar mistakes once in a while so 4.5 stars. (they may be there but they didn't break immersion so as far as I'm concerned they don't exist)

Character score, this is where this story falls off a cliff, The MC is interesting, but inconsistent, its impossible to tell how he is going to react in a given situation, while this can be interesting, it only shows that he doesn't have a personality, he just reacts whichever way makes the best scene (the one the author wants to write) instead of actually being a character. 

The other characters suffer from this too, the two heroines act out of character, do horrible things to the MC, who then has to be even more out of character and let it slide, to keep everything together, just so the author could write a scene... half a star. 

also the first heroine literally throws away her interesting personality that had layers and adopts the MCs alter ego as her main personality, only with added hornyness. it was a weird and uncharacteristic personality shift. (personality) 

 

p.s. do you know why 99% of published works have very vanilla relationships and any spice is just increased romantic elements rather than kink. because putting kink in your story will only turn off everyone who isn't into the same thing as you, which tends to be above 50% of the population.

 

 

 

 

Leigie of sloth
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This was a very promising novel , but the stupid reasons mc gives for doing something or savings someone is just nauseating. He is just plain ass stupid.

Zeiji
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The main character pretending to be dopy but secretly a badass can only hold the reader’s interest for so long. 

 

Do not read this story unless you can withstand angsty teenagers trying to out-white knight an emo MC.

Grarg
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Good story - a few critiques

This story is good, much better than many of its comparables. Basically, the MC is OP but has lots of self-imposed restrictions on his abilities. The world is also not centered around him and feels alive.

 

I've read up to chap 55 so a few critiques (spoilers) for the author:

 

1. I really do not like the ongoing Alice/Ryner plotline. Giving him constant nightmares and giving her unrestricted access to his dreams got old really fast. Very little of their background is explained and thus far, we still don't know why they're playing what appears to be a ridiculous game. Why drag things out? Why not just fight and get it over with? What exactly are they fighting about? I actually get angry every time the plotline comes up and the characters say things in an intentionally vague way to not give away the mystery to the reader. It feels forced.

 

2. Most of the antagonists are just raving lunatics. Sirius, Dan, and the ridiculous number of rapey bandits are just all insane. It's like Ryner is tripping over them every time he turns. Please include more interesting antagonists and conflicts that are not just resolved with Ryner crushing them with brute force. The ongoing antagonism between Ryner and King Charles is a good example. It's not a simple relationship and the king isn't monolithically good or evil. Do more of that. Less crazy lunatics.

 

3. Most of the people Ryner have directly saved are cute girls, from the princess to the most recent mother/daughter pair. As the series continues, you might want to change it up. The reader notices and it feels unnatural.

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Let's get to the point.

Definitely one of the good reads on RRL atm. Now let's get to the point.

 

Style: Reader friendly, creative, perfect. 5/5.

 

Story: No plot whatsoever but who cares the fic is amazing. 3/5.

 

Grammar: No one can be perfect in this Department. However it is pretty good. 4.5/5.

 

Characters: All Characters create an impact on the reader. You can relate to each one of them. The MC is exceptional. 5/5.

 

Overall: I marathoned through the fic. It deserves a 5/5.

 

To the writer: A nice twist to the typical reincarnation fictions. Your fiction is amazing.

 

To the potential readers: This fiction is a hidden RRL gem. Even without the mature tag, this fiction would definitely entertain you. Start reading now!