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Follow Aeternum, a unlucky soul through a world some will consider a blessing and some a curse. Robbed of his rightful afterlife how will he make the best of his second life?
On his adventure he will struggle, fighting the worlds monstrous denizens. Surviving using creativity and what little know how he has; while trying to enjoy life a little.
Maybe if he works hard he will escape his fate as a toy of a bored God.
Thank you for checking out my light novel. I am a hobbiest writer still learning, I would appreciate any correction people can make and constructive critism. Hope you enjoy the story
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This story has a interesting plot and grammar is definitely sub par. It readable enough but will require to be rewritten and a good proof reading, it's better then many translated light novels (I mean definitely better then machine translation). I agree with both of the other reviews OL and MMM.
And MMM is not a troll, just read the synopsis anyone would understand what he meant by basic English mechanics not being sufficient, and this view would be reinforced in a few chapters. If you are upset by this kind of thing then let the author know.
In my boredom I had read far worse things, and it's a lot better than any of those.
This story has a very promising start, as I generally don't like the Minecraft logic of 1 m cubic that the currently only flaw I see, but I am highly biased about that so it doesn't matter. It's going in a very good direction. World building, I'm not sure this is the correct word but after reading the 17 Ch I decided that this story is perfectly good for a 4 star rating. It starts kind of lame thou but it gets exponentially better.
Please don't take that shitty one star review seriously that's a troll he reviewed it a 2 Ch. And about grammar I can't say much I didn't notice anything worth mentioning.
I hope author didn't get discouraged by that review.
This story is definitely worth trying.
The story is an excellent one with some minor fallbacks but overall it fulfills my need for a fan fiction and actually makes me want to get back into Minecraft mods.
The story can be too fast or too slow at times but I notice a quality improvement as they write more chapters I awate for the future.
The basic English mechanics of the story is not up to par. While it is not completely unreadable and is significantly better than that of "My Immortal" or "Invisible Dragon", it is nevertheless not good enough for people to bother reading. As such, the writing has no value to the reader, and we are forced to give a 1 star rating.
The summary of the story is representative of the story as a whole. The amount of mechanical mistakes in the summary is the first warning that the story is not up to par. Reading the first few paragraphs of the story reinforces this warning.
Overall, we suggest that the author of the story heavily proofreads his writing. This process should be rigorous, involving googling the spelling of words, and reading up on grammar and punctuation conventions. We believe that the author lacks sufficient knowledge of such conventions, and will not be able to sufficiently edit his story without learning.