Returning to No Applause, Only More of the Same

by Palt

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Kreig was summoned to the other world 130 years ago, the last 30 of which were spent in a constant, vengeful war against any army that would attempt to subjugate him. Once he returned, he found out that only 10 years had passed.

He was given the title of War of the North but he never even knew about it. After all, nobody could get close enough to tell it to him. 

But that all changes one day when a portal opens, allowing Kreig and a small band of soldiers to enter one of many portals that leads to Earth. As it turns out these portals have been opening ever since he was summoned, giving the people of Earth abilities that the world he was summoned to only used to have. But now... now, he has returned. Longing for his former life of peace and understanding, he allows authorities to capture him on the spot, only to be faced with deeply personal questions, such as "who are you?" "what have you been doing for the past 10 years?" and "why is your level so high?"

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...Have you ever read a story where the main guy who got isekai'd returns to Earth. Say, for example, FFF-class trashhero or the necromancer of Seoul station? Say, what if the authorities actually became aware what kind of monster had returned to Earth?

What if they actually tried to use them for something?

Kreig's been in the other world for 130 years, has experienced three great wars, and he isn't okay. Mentally speaking, that is. He's been imprisoned, gained and lost comrades, been betrayed... The whole lot. By now, all he wants is to put it all behind him, something the world doesn't seem to want to let him. 

(Irregular updates, mostly written for fun, no strong planning)

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1, The Portal that Took Him Back Home ago
Chapter 2, Capture and Police Station ago
Chapter 3, Interrogation With a Child Soldier and a Walking Disaster ago
Chapter 4, Exchange of Business Cards ago
Chapter 5, It Had Been 130 Years, After All ago
Chapter 6, "But in cases such as yours..." ago
Chapter 7, To Wash off One's Crimes, To Clean One's Conscious ago
Chapter 8, His New Home and a Letter ago
Chapter 9, The Artistry of Wasting Time ago
Chapter 10, Dr Darius Falk's Logbook on Inmate Kreig Wiedemann, Entry Nr. 3 ago
Chapter 11, All Those Other Otherworlders ago
Chapter 12, Vengeance and Acceptance ago
Chapter 13, A Gift for his Close Observer ago
Chapter 14, They Met Again ago
Chapter 15, A Plan to Befriend the Young Gerald is Formed ago
Chapter 16, Stalk and Observe ago
Chapter 17, The Warm Embrace of the Soil ago
Chapter 18, A Painting for a Friend ago
Chapter 19, Descent into the Below ago
Chapter 20, Friendship and Cards ago
Chapter 21, As it Turns Out, Their Brother Might not be Dead After All ago
Chapter 22, A Very Cool Helicopter (Suspicions) ago
Chapter 23, The Arrival in a Place Down Below ago
Chapter 24, "I've Waited Long" ago
Chapter 25, The Start of an Important Conversation ago
Chapter 26, Broken Promises ago
Chapter 27, Breakdown ago
Chapter 28, Light Touched Him ago
Chapter 29, Isolation and Break ago
Chapter 30, Red Skies and Mud ago
Chapter 31, Revalation and Disaster Prevention ago
Chapter 32, Prelude to Release ago
Chapter 33, He Kind of Got Lost ago
Chapter 34, Home ago
Chapter 35, His Room, His Home ago
Chapter 36, Oh White One ago
Chapter 37, Welcome Home, Champ ago
Chapter 38, Days Long Gone ago
Chapter 39, Family Portrait ago
Chapter 40, Nightmare of Dubious Nature ago
Chapter 41, Sitting on the Couch, Together ago
Chapter 42, Breakfast ago
Chapter 43, Distantly Close ago
Chapter 44, Hasty Retreat ago
Chapter 45, Sam's Doubts ago
Chapter 46, Five Roses Standing Alone ago
Chapter 47, Letters For the Remaining ago
Chapter 48, The Swallowbirds ago
Chapter 49, Black Winter ago
Chapter 50, Mud ago
Chapter 51, Too Soon To Tell ago
Chapter 52, Mrs Willowgrove Mourns ago
Chapter 53, Silent Revolution ago
Chapter 54, A Beautiful Morning ago
Chapter 55, Crime Man and Tutor Girl ago
Chapter 56, We Don't Have to do Math ago
Chapter 57, Hidden Talents ago
Chapter 58, Pacing ago
Chapter 59, Therapy for the Broken Man ago
Chapter 60, Therapy for the Young Man ago
Chapter 61, An Evening of Portraits ago
Chapter 62, Siblingship in Paint ago
Chapter 63, Switcheroo ago
Chapter 64, Childish Doodle ago
Chapter 65, A Day in the Life ago
Chapter 66, Belief ago
Chapter 67, Heist ago
Chapter 68, Distillation, Preparation ago
Chapter 69, Punishment and Forgiveness ago
Chapter 70, Tell Me What Two Plus Two Is ago

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Blobofjello
Overall

Whether you like this story or not is a matter of taste. It's a pretty slow story in which the MC has a lot of power but doesn't use it. I personally hate stories with extremely passive MCs, but if you don't mind that it's an excellent read.

This is a very well written story with character development and all. I'd say read the first few chapters and see if it's for you. Unfortunately, this fiction is not the type I like but hopefully this review will help this story get to its intended audience.

Waffle(est)
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Nice, It only has one (huge) problem

Reviewed at: Chapter 44, Hasty Retreat

The premise is fine and somewhat novel.

The presentation is engaging enough and the grammar is not an issue in any significant way. The author has a way with words that is quite engaging.

Some of the characters are quite well developed and believeable. There is some character development and wholesome moments. So long as you can look past a certain problem it's quite the immersive read... and when you notice it becomes un-immersible. You can tell by the "reviewed-at" on this review.

But there is a problem, the problem, a problem so great I have dropped this fiction entirely because of this one problem. For the rest of this review, please allow me to explain.

One day a godlike entity emerges from an interdimensional portal. The strongest of your warriors cannot even begin to gouge his strength, but from interrogating his former enemies you learn of his unparallelled military prowess.  This godlike entity acts very meek and submissive and asks to see his family, and promises not to cause trouble.

So like any logical war council with a sense of self-preservation that has managed to defend this world from interdimensional horrors for several years you... take every single chance you are given to antagonise this entity..?? You steal all of his posessions, walk him naked through a public space, put him in shackles, have the most obnoxious person on all of earth constatly spew abuse at him, stuff him in a solitary box for months, Ignore the one request he cares about, lie to him, hold his friends hostage to compell him to act, lie to him some more, gather the worlds strongest military might to surround and surveil him at a arms reach .. Yup, there is definitely nothing wr... you see the problem yet?!  And all of this while the Mc has shown no incentive to carry out any even mildly objectionable act..

As for the MC: apart from being infested with a seemingly demonic mind-twisting .. entity (for a futile attempt at spoiler control), there's nothing noteworthy about him. His personality boils down to "yeah i killed a lot", and allowing everybody to step on him as if he was some sort of ant without even the mildest objection. Some government entity abuses you for weeks, steals all your epic gear, threatens your family and and you just accept it lying down..? You who has destroyed like 2 entire countries .. has literally no backbone.. wtf? Promises given to you go unfulfilled and neglected and you don't even get a "we're working on it" and yet you still go along with everything they ask, still believe them at fact value, still take everything lying down???

Basically anything that relates to the MC and plot is utterly absurd and illogical. Everything else is fine, but the core of the story is rotten to the point of disintegration. 

Zenopath (AEV)
Overall

I suppose at some point something must happen to make other people like this story so much, but for me, the story could be summed up as, what if superman was autistic, and stuffed into prison he could easily escape from but instead spends months jumping through hoops trying to convince self-righteous psychologist who thinks human rights means being polite enough not to read the undelivered mail you prisoner wants to send his family. While it's nice that they don't torture the godlike creature trying desperately to reunite with his family, and there are hints they might let him at some point if they can keep his existence hidden from the press, this story is both depressing and dull.

Real deep dive into how people would treat a superhuman they distrust and how his deep PTSD turns him into a potato with not enough self-respect to even complain at how he is being treated. I suppose it's a good thing he doesn't remember what a lawyer is, but since he's in a prison for people who don't have rights, it hardly matters.

What really annoyed me is how the staff of this prison is portrayed as good people. But I almost would rather read a story about a superhuman getting abused but choosing not to fight back, rather than a story about a prison that is about "evaluating" a prisoner that spends 20 chapters learning how to draw and not much else.

Gave this 4 stars because it's well written and I suspect some people will plow through the "slow burn" to get to where the story starts, but for me, "no thanks". 21 chapters were long enough, the author needs to learn how to properly start a story within 20% as many pages.

Jackercracks
Overall

Successfully evokes emotion; mostly frustration

Reviewed at: Chapter 20, Friendship and Cards

This story is decently written,and successfully evokes emotion in the reader. Sadly, the emotion is mostly frustration at both the seemlingly suicidal authorities, and the extremely passive MC. 

Essentially they take this super powerful god-being that could probably take on their entire country with a reasonable chance of success, covered with blood, whom they know little about. They take this man, and put him in solitary confinement for 3 weeks for no reason explained to him. In 99% of cases, this leads to a destroyed containment facility and possibly a decaptitated government. Only because of the extremely specific mental issues his 130 year war have inflicted on him do their thoughtless actions not lead to their annihilation. 

This is a story about an uncaring, unjust and cruel system grinding down upon a poor mentally ill man. And that would be a perfectly reasonable story, if the poor mentally ill man was not also completely capable of crushing that entire system without significant effort.

Chyra
Overall

Started well, then fell on it's face

Reviewed at: Chapter 45, Sam's Doubts

It's definitely an interesting premise. But I'm sorry, the main character is just broken.

My biggest issue/disconnect is basically that between one chapter to the next the protagonists' brain suddenly stops working and he has no knowledge of things that he should understand and know about. Even if he is as old as he is. That he can emotionally understand his fellow inmate in one chapter and then not understand something far more obvious later.

And what the government do to contain him. And letting motor mouth anywhere near him. Nope. Just nope.

Oldage
Overall

Starts well but failed to hold my interest

Reviewed at: Chapter 50, Mud

The story starts well and with an interesting premise: what happens if your isekai hero lives long enough to become the Villain and is then removed from that world and returned back to his home where he grew up?   The story revolves around the MC being treated for the years of trauma and PTSD he accumulated while on the alien world followed by his subsequent release back into society.

Unfortunately while it's reasonably well written and has a decent storyline, it's not for me. It's not my cup of tea and I don't think I'll keep reading beyond this point.

Savane
Overall

A journey to the center of the mind of Krieg

Reviewed at: Chapter 69, Punishment and Forgiveness

How dare the MC to not get over a century of abuse and torture in a few weeks...

Its a great story, centered around a broken person who returns to a family and a world he no longer recognizes and with which he is trying to reconect.

He is physically too powerful, but his mind has yet to break free of all the conditioning he has been through, fortunatelly, his remaining family and other people he gets to meet help him to slowly shed the chains trapping his mind.

to do
Overall

This is not a fantasy story, or an action story, or an adventure story, or even a litrpg story really.

It's a story about a severely autistic man painting and hugging people and feeling bad and being treated like trash by the government, while also being really powerful.

Nothing really happens, the interesting bits(to me at least) are only used as framing for basic hurt/comfort stuff.

Essentially if this story was written about a farmer who returned from the otherworld it would be just as interesting to me, maybe more since it wouldn't be relying on the MC's overpowering strength as a tool to create forced tension, which personally comes off as bland to me.

Not my cup of tea at all, but if that sounds interesting to you then give it a try, you may enjoy it.

Yiphen
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Story:

Personally, I think the concept is great, a person forcibly desensitized to emotions and violence, having to reintegrate into society. Actually telling the story is where the problem lies.

Grammar:

Overall it's good, but if 5 stars is a fully polished book, there's still some distance to go.

I've got this habit of mentally autocorrecting any errors I find, so results may vary.

Character:

Style and character are pretty intertwined since you're telling the story from their perspective. I'm starting with character.

The main character is a war veteran, who essentially was an unthinking, unstoppable monster prior to his return to earth. It seems like a good backstory, but it frankly was horribly fleshed out. 

His only hobby (from what I could tell), while he fought in the other world, was praying. Just that. Nothing else. And even then, it didn't seem like he did it very often, with the whole "War of the North" thing going on.

Why he never tried anything new is explained as always having an enemy to fight, but that's not how wars work. It seems like he's been fighting in the same rough area for 30(?) years, and by then any rational kingdoms should've realized it would be better to leave him alone.

The men they wasted to attack him could've been used to further develop their kingdom. Also, he killed a platoon of specially trained assassins in minutes. Expecting him to be fighting that many high-level people all the time for 30 years is absurd. Especially during winter.

Also, that "kill everything" frenzy he gets into when fighting seems extreme. He literally needed someone he wholly considered a friend to snap him out of it. There should also be some trauma from his imprisonment, leading to an aversion for manacles. I think it would be more plausible that when it first happened, he went on a rampage, leveling part, if not all of the city.

His attitude just doesn't seem very believable.

Style:

As I mentioned, you're telling the story accented by the main character's perspective, and because of that, the style reflects on the character. 

His reactions don't seem real. His reactions are closer to apathetic than traumatized, and some scenes didn't seem realistic. When the officer slaps handcuffs on him, it seems more likely that he sees the cuffs, tries to figure out how it might threaten him, and maybe lash out on instinct.

For the writing style itself, it's off. I don't really feel like explaining it because it's a pain, so just think of a literary classic like Huckleberry Finn or 1984. Story aside, they're still written in an engaging way.

That, and character, is what I think the story lacks.

Oh, also, there was a moment where it was like,

"The reasons he gave for it had been manipulative and selfish in nature. ‘If Kreig Wiedemann can open up to me, I will be able to better understand the state of his mind and what missions he is able to fulfil. I can keep an eye on him at all times. He’ll trust OICRO better.’

But his true intentions were far less focused on the ‘good of the world’, and more so on improving Inmate Wiedemann’s own psychic health. Sure, his new family and Speerhalter (who would otherwise find education and housing in the same city Inmate Wiedemann would live in, funny coincidence) would do plenty and be a great help for his personal improvements, but in the end, they knew next to nothing about how to actually care for him. Darius himself was no wiser, but he at least knew better how to care for a man experiencing PTSD and other trauma-and-stressor related mental disorders."

This is painful. Also, I just realized you misspelled "fulfil."

"The reasons were selfish and manipulative in nature. 'I will make him trust me, and in relation, make him trust OICRO. I will analyze him. We will be able to gauge what work can and can't be assigned.'

In truth, his wishes were a bit more personal than he wanted to believe. He is a psychiatrist, first and foremost. Krieg will have his patchwork family, but expecting them to fix his particularly difficult branch of trauma would be... unsound. At the very least, Darius had experience treating PTSD."

This sounds better. You could also scrap the paragraphs entirely and focus more on Darius' actions. I'd personally have one of the board members make some sort of condescending remark and Darius would say something like, "He is more than a weapon, sir."

reteiker
Overall

(The spoilery review [No spoilery review below])

A boy was summoned into another world as a chosen hero for a heretical religion. After many trials and tribulations, everything around him falls apart, again and again.

Except him.

To his chagrin, no matter what the world throws at him he survives and lives on, and as the saying goes ¨you either die a hero or live long enough to see yourself become the villain¨. The MC doesn't become a villain per se, he simply stops building himself up and becomes more a beast than man. And that is when he's given the only salvation he could hope for, an opportunity to go home.                        And that's where this story starts.

A long time in isolation and endless wars & battles has not been kind to him and he must now learn how to become the man he now is.

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No spoilers: This story is about the rehabilitation of a broken man. A broken man who has reached max level is practically immortal and can pulverize pencils by looking at them too hard. It's a good story but if you're looking for your average OP MC power fantasy or a numbers heavy LitRPG you won't find it here, this story is all about people and emotions & stuff. (That's whats makes it good)