Mob without system in Naruto world
HEY, WHERE IS MY CHEAT SYSTEM???
WHY AM I SOME NAMELESS MOB????
Can I at least have a Sharingan.......please?
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Starts okay but the author isent serious anymore, he is just meming. While that can be entertaining for a chapter or two it doesn't really work out long term. The story has the same problem most other Naruto stories have that they run out of steam around the chunin tests.
At this point in time the author focuses more on cheap comedic relief since he hasn't shown any of the protags teammates cabilities. I have literally no idea what his teammates can do and the protag just solves the teams problems.
"What my nationality was, is not important, because first of all, I am no longer in this world, and secondly, because there are more important things to know about me: for example, I was a true meme lord"
So, for me, this line from the third or fourth paragraph of the first chapter basically made me decide this probably wasn't for me. I read a bit further, but using "u" and "tho", as far as I could tell unironically, basically cemented that this book and I weren't going to get on.
That said, I've given it a 2/5 rating; I didn't give it much a of a chance and it may pick up later on; 0.5 seemed maybe too harsh for a snap judgement. But a review should ultimately reflect your personal tastes, and for me, this one was a big nope.
This type of story usually isn't my preference but it's pretty good for what it is. Nothing is overly complicated, and it's a fun romp. The power creep is a little too much though, kinda feels like the protagonist boosted to a lot of power around the Chunin exam.
I'm looking forward to what the author develops since it looks like the story is going to seriously deviate from established canon.
This story isn't amazingly well written, or even that new of a concept. BUT - this is a fun enough story for fans of Naruto. I liken this to a bag of Cheetos - Cheetos are not good for you, and aren't exactly made of high quality ingredients. But When you want a cheesey snack? There is nothing more delicious. If you want Gintama adjacent Naruto shenanigans, this is a good fic to read. It will never be one of the titans of this website, but that is ok - as long as goofy Naruto fun is what you want, goofy Naruto fun is what you will get.
The tone of first chapter and something which are cringe is quite misleading it becomes great later on.
just skip the bullshit bully part if you don't like it. it seriously gets way better in the middle.
Once it covering plot which happens in naruto it's better. it's not a power fantasy
This is just another Gary Stu self insert. The main character faces little to no challenge in his life as a ninja, a deadly and harsh profession, and when he does it is quickly resolved in a paragraph or less. These kinds of stories aren't bad per say but they're usually never very good either. These stories are usually redeemed by either the side characters or the comedy. The side characters are all base clichés and the comedy can be fall flat. Overall it's just a mediocre time waster.
Edit: have to drop to down to a one star, the quality just really dropped in the later chapters.
At first glance this book is your standard crappy naruto fanfic, but given the fact that i read all of it in one go foregoing sleep and food and still, somehow, enjoyed myself.
It's clear that this story has something quite special about it, and i'd say that thing is pacing, there is no pause what-so-ever in this book, it just keeps going, not one unintersting bit of dialogue, and no superfluous descriptions.
It's not perfect, there are some entire sections of the story that are frankly just terrible(in particular the bit where the MC spends like a month fighting retard gangs) but even the retarded bits of the story are funny sometimes so you should definetly try to power through them.
Another thing that separates this from other fanfics is that it stays true to the material, there's no systems, divine gifts or whatnot, the MC is quite strong but he plays by the rules, which i like.
Overall i'd say give it a try, this is far from a masterwork of litterature but i had a great time reading it, which in the end i think is what really matters. 5/5
this review needs 200 words so you can ignore this bit, i'm just writting till i hit 200 words which should be verry soon if my calculations are
this story can be a mess for sure, with poor/no editing and sometimes flimsy plotlines. And more jokes than sense, and they don't ALWAYS land.
Despite this, i enjoy the story. Even as a non naruto fan.
i think there is a good heart in this story. the characters feel good when they are conveyed properly (which they aren't always), and the humor that lands genuinely cracks me up.
The story flip flops between absurd humor and heartfelt DETERMINATION. it's silly and bad and fun and gripping and cringy and encouraging all at once.
the story definitely bears the marks of fast and sloppy writing. i think it could benefit a lot from proper editing and generally more time spent on it. but i also think it's unrealistic to ask for. i think the story can probably only exist as it does, because this is the way the author desires to express it. The way it is, the text feels close to the author, and you can almost see in the text when it's written in a silly joking mood, because it speeds up and quickly spirals into absurd hilarity.
not my favorite story by far, but i like it. keep it up my guy.
don't know if royal road is the place for this story, the standards and expectations are very different to a site like scribblehub where this was originally posted (i think?). so the reception here is a lot harsher ;-;
Welp, one review got warned because forgot of spoiler alert, and this one I guess will also be warned due 'trolling?' I guess, so ill just kind of place a real review.
Style is weird, sometimes its real fast, sometimes real slow, sometimes there are real nonsence chapters, ill just give it a 3.5, not perfect but neither that good.
Mostly the fun, but it was only funny the first or so chapters. (1-40 or so)
Story. Welp, the title is "a mob in naruto" (without system btw) and prota is all but a mob, killing important figures and becoming hella strong while naruto chunnin exam stage.
Grammar. Im not even qualified on talking about this, still, some words were kind of off that even a person like me can detect so... Idk a 4?
Characters.. Quite honestly, it felt like a chinese novel, I guess you know what I mean...
Overall its a 3, its not that bad if you like overpowered Oc without a harem and a very acting fanfiction (one that actually changes the story) and for some, the humor could be for laughing at how good the joke was and not how bad the intent of joke was. Some may even like how simplistic the story is, without emotional bullshit (aside from one particular scene), without deppresion, without overcomplicated scenarios.
Still its not for me, I quite honestly would put it a 0.5 (like I did), but gotta recognize that its not that bad.
And yes, im scared of Wing san.
Gg it says.
This is not a serious fanfiction. It is a comedy.
Don't expect it to be serious. Accept it's nature and you will have a good time. It gets a bit more serious when the first ark starts nearing it's end, and overall there is surprising amount of detail and charaters seem alive.
Grammar is far from perfect and there are numerous typos.
Real rating is probably about 4/5, but at the moment it is a bit underrated, so i give it 5/5