What was a hero?
Someone with superpowers? Or was it someone that devoted themselves to helping others?
Aaron didn't know; but he did know that one day he, and a few others had woken up with powers and his girlfriend, a hero enthusiast with a little too much money and free time on her hands was more than willing to make them into heroes.
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This is an origin story without many of the flaws I generally see in origin stories.
- None of the characters start out useless in order to show their growth
- None of the characters are scum bags in order to show their growth
- None of the characters instantly hate each other in order to show the team's growth
Instead the characters (mostly kids, the rest very young adults) react about the ways I would expect normal people to react. Some of the kids instanly jump at the chance to have a friendship and others are more reserved. Some are suspicious but not paranoid.
It will take more work and better writing than relying on the crutches above to show their growth and I really look forward to seeing that.
I like the multiple viewpoints. The viewpoints are clearly labled so I'm not left wondering why character 1 is thinking something when it is actually character 2. The different viewpoints also have different voices. It can be a bit too subtle at times but I'll take that over stereotypical crutches.
The one thing that could use some work is that sometimes the different viewpoints seem to overlap and it can take me a couple of paragraphs to figure out *when* the chapter starts. This isn't enough to knock half a star off of my "enjoyment measure" and I'm pretty sure this will improve with time and practice (especially once the author reads this).
Untill now I think the story is a really good and promising one. Its readable and easy to understand, but I do think that the pacing is just a tad bit slow (thats my opinion, otherwise the story is going at a good pace).
The story is interesting and engaging and I havent found that many mistakes in the grammar (maybe 1 little mistake in around 5, 6 chapters or more)
I think the author should focus a tad bit more on world building, but maybe that will come in the next few chapters when they actually get to living somewhere and not just running around.
Otherwise the book is one of my favourites and hopefully there will be MOAR chaptersss.
Don't burn me at the stake, this is my first review and all the mistakes I made in it are 100% intentional. :)
On one hand, i do like this book. Characters are likeable, and the experience is enjoyable. Its made with good intentions and there seems to be no harem in sight. Its also not inherently boring.
On the other hand its... Jumpy. And lacking in some key areas.
Iv only read up to chapter 5 so i cant comment on anything past this point, but for the first few chapters:
There are more run-on sentences than are comfortable. They are readable, but it takes you out of what you are reading.
The mc has repeatedly said that they are a popular, but relatively small figure in the sports space, but then everyone seems to recognize him (2 out of 3 character introduced by chapter 5 know who he is or straight up recognize him. This seems very much at odds with what should be expected of real life)
Other characters also seem strange. They are very chatty and have the "we are now important side characters suddenly" vibe surrounding them.
Its all just very... Off-putting.
If youve got down to the bottom of this micro review, give this book a try to chapter 5 like i did atleast. There are no massively erroneous errors and the premise is interesting.
Give it a shot.