Demon King's end (Inactive)

by Just a Rookie

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Female Lead Gender Bender
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

During the beginning, only 4 beings roam the Earth. These beings were called entities, and they watch the Earth for eons. As the earth develop more creatures started to appear. The earliest humans discover these beings and worship them as gods. Curious the entities chose to live amongst the humans and protected them from all danger. Civil war broke out among the gods. A few entities were overcome by greed and wanted to rule the entire world for themselves. The war almost destroy the earth itself, realizing this the entities banished themselves from earth, and made a pact to never directly interfere with the world again. A new entity was born from the corruption that drove the gods into a civil war. The creature slowly corrupted lifeforms around the planet making them give in to their inner demon. The entity was simply called the Demon king. Unable to directly interfere the gods created a weapon that was capable of killing the being. The weapon was called Excalibur only a hero could wield it. After a fierce battle the hero defeated the demon King, but they soon realize that it is capable of coming back. A tradition was created, a champion will be pick to wield Excalibur and fight the reborn Demon lord. Centuries later.. The Demon King always come back and the hero always win but the devastation that the demon lord cause was always too great for the battle to ever be called a victory. Now the demon king is back again and as always the hero is there to stop him, but this time the story is different.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue: The Final Battle ago
Prologue: Final battle pt 2 ago
Chapter 1: Revival ago
Hidden prologue: Birth of a demon ago
Chapter 2: Find Alice ago
Chapter 3: Separation ago
Chapter 4: God of Corruption ago
Chapter 5: Legacy ago
Chapter 6 : Abandon ago
Chapter 7: A day in the city ago
Chapter 8: Torn Apart ago
Chapter 9: Survival ago
Chapter 10: Not Forgotten ago
Chapter 11: The Promise Day ago
Chapter 12: Most Hated ago
Chapter 13: Black Heart ago
Chapter 14: Lesson ago
Chapter 15: Peaceful Days ago
Chapter 16: No Matter What... ago
Chapter 17: End of the beginning ago
Arc 1 Epilogue + extra ago
Chapter 18: Rumors ago
Chapter 19: Dreamer Boy ago
Chapter 20: Something Worse ago
Side chapter: It's a romantic comedy! ago
Chapter 21: Enemy Territory ago
Chapter 22: The Beastmen ago
Chapter 23: The Great Escape ago
Chapter 24: Escalation ago
Chapter 25: Invasion ago
Chapter 26: An unexpected team ago
Chapter 27: Wager ago
Chapter 28: Round Two ago
Chapter 29: The Apex-Unstoppable Justice ago
Chapter 30: Malicious Plot ago
Chapter 31: Story Teller ago
Side chapter: Starting over ago
Chapter 32: Downfall Theory ago
Chapter 33: Corrupted Legacy Part 1 ago
Chapter 34: Corrupted Legacy 2- Tainted Soul ago
Chapter 35: Alexander the Great ago
Chapter 36: The greatest city ago
Chapter 37: High Life ago
Chapter 38: Where's Alice? ago
Arc 2 Epilogue: Mad Queen ago
Chapter 39: Successor ago
Chapter 40: First Mission ago
Chapter 41: Chimera ago
Chapter 42: New Breed ago
Chapter 43: Defeated ago
Chapter 44: Bad Day-Role Play ago
Anniversary ago
Side Chapter : Mirrior ago
Bad day: Spirited Away ago
Chapter 46: Little Brother ago
Chapter 47: Desire ago
Chapter 48: To the end ago
Chapter 49: Just the two of us ago
Chapter 50: Nightfall ago
Chapter 51: Cruel Fate ago
Chapter 52: Betrayal ago
I've been thinking (Not a chapter) ago
Chapter 53: Far Superior ago
Chapter 54: Sister's instinct ago
Chapter 55: End of the night ago
Chapter 56: Friends ago
Lore chapter ago
Chapter 57: A New Era ago
I'm sorry ago
Rewrite is up ago

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Amadeus1
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 The story seems to have much potential, and I'm a fan of these kinds of stories about the villain. However, the grammar absolutely slaughters it.

 

Style: I'm dropping this like a rock because of the terrible grammar, that I'll go over later.

 

Story: Having survived my way through most of the chapters, I can say that there is definitely thought going into every move made by each character, and I appreciate that. Good job.

 

Grammar: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

There are few spelling errors, that's good.

The punctuation, sentence structuring, flow, idea mapping, word placement, redundancy, all of that is absolutely miserable. Very poor. Also, bear in mind that I'm likely the most cynical grammar reviewer on this site.

 

Character: Mysterious. However, this mystery seems less like the "you'll find out later" kind of mystery and more like the "we'll find out later" type of mystery, where the author is riding by the seat of their pants on this aspect. The characters are good, but I am concerned about how they'll be developed in the future.

hurt_lock3r
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Give it a go if you like gender-bender

The story is nice with a little twist to the reincarnation scenario. The characters don’t have paper thin forgettable personalities, and can be easily related to. The story is going at a good pace, but sometimes random chapters appear with random people, who sometimes I can’t keep track of.  The other concern I have is with your grammar. Either you should work on improving it, or get a proof reader. I ,myself, am not a native English speaker, so I can understand the problems you may have. But still you should get a proof reader, it’ll improve your story a lot, and it’ll make my life easier too, cause I get more irritated with every mistake that I read.

Elyas
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Love the novel so far

25 chapters in and the story seems really interesting so far, (slight spoiler inc) I'm a bit pisses her brother almost gets her killed or worse and then right after she's saved he immediately goes back to try the same thing again which this time luckily seems to be stopped.

The only other problem so far is the grammar and i think this story would have a lot more viewers if you managed to get a proofreader. Still the story is definitely readable but it could improve slightly.

PS: more "cringy" stuff from chapter 20 is always appreciated :o I feel like this type of stuff would definitely come up if someone were to change gender like this especially during that age I'd probably expect even more serious stuff. 

Overall thank you very much for writing this novel it is a pleasure to read.

Vixen
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So far, I've enjoyed myself.

Up to Chapter 33, might contain minor spoilers.

 

First off, I'd like to say in the beginning, I know the Demon King felt like toying with the great Hero, but the fight, in my opinion, was very anti-climatic.  I've thoroughly enjoyed reading this thus far, and I could definitely name a couple recommendations, but what you're currently continuing on the story isn't bad at all.

 

Style -  I'd say the style is noticeable, and very attractive, but still needs a tad bit more work on the most part.

 

Story -  It's interesting to see people mix the standard story of anything into something almost entirely different.  I love to see the Demon King, the Entity of Corruption take form as a little girl named Anna, and not focusing on her past power because it's risky.  Her personality, of which I hope, will turn a bit sweeter to her brother, or I wonder how he himself will turn out.

 

Grammar - Your grammar does, indeed, need work, but if you're willing to put in the effort to fix it, then do so.  If not, you may contact an editor, or request for one in an A/N.  I've seen some words that don't go in place whatsoever, some Is not capitalized, but I can easily deal with it when I'm reading such a great story.

 

Character - The way I see it, the thing that stands out the most often in this story are the characters.  Do not expect any character, even a sideline one, to have the same personality as another, even when it's just a simple sentence to multiple chapters of dialogue.   This creates the remembrance of characters, such as Arron, Claire, even Cain.  I remember these characters because they weren't dolls, they had a personality. 

 

Overall, this story is VERY enjoyable to me, and I'd love to see you continue it.  I usually check for a new chapter twice a day on my phone, and if you ever decide to reach out for an editor, I could potentially help, as I wouldn't mind helping out a mind to a great story.  Good luck, Rookie.

 

 

Andrej Jaksic
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hmm enjoyable story i liked it and i hope you will continiue  to work hard for sake of you readers :D

!!!!!!!!! keep up the good work

SovietWeeb
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 I ended up dropping this story just when I reached chapter 36. 

I was really apprehensive on reading this because of all the reviews talking about the grammar. Now that I have read it, I can state my opinion on it. The grammar isn't really that bad. It really only is the first 2 chapters with any issues. 

Really, Issues I had with the story mostly comes down to three things.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 The story still managed to keep me entertained for a bit. The only reason I am dropping it is because the story has come to a really slow pace and a bit repetitive seeing the MC deal with the party members. That also reminds me that I am not a fan of the Brother and would've liked to see the MC lone wolfing it more.

Overall the story is alright. I am planning on reading the remake of it that the author has up.

sabrac1
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I just hope it won't end hero/demon lord pairing :)

Exray24
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Love the story. The side characters are pretty fleshed out compared to other stories on RRL and the mc is an enjoyable and Badass character. And the grammar and dialogue have no problems as far as I've come across. The only real problem I have is that the story comes at a fairly random and slow pace which kind of makes me a little impatient. Other than that keep up the good work author, loving the mc the most. She's totally badass. 

kisuke28
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The Story – I is great and told from a unique perspective.  It’s neat to see the demon king of all people to be put on the gender-bender spot instead of the hero.  Sometimes its down right funny too!  The story also has plenty of action to go along with it.  Overall The story and plot is very enjoyable.

Characters- You see both the main and the side characters grow slowly but surely.  It’s not instant like a lot of other novels.  So far you see the characters slowly changing over time.  This to me feels more natural. I will not go any further on the characters because I do not want to spoil this story.

Grammar- Its got its fair share of mistakes but its okay.  The Author is improving more and more each chapter.

What is a major plus to me is that the chapters are fairly regular it isn’t dropped like so many other novels on RR.  So if you like a good story than give it a try!